A " Haiku Doing Yoga " Re-Write

As though, thrown-on, browns,
now, lay on the ground, autumned,
her legs just as bare.

All is on the ground.
yes. zero’s lower; zilch, on
Bare as the tree, denuded
.
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USED TO BE:


Brown, so like thrown-on
to shed, autumn, here; her legs,
naked already.
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.

UNDERGOING CHANGE:


Brown, so like thrown-on As though thrown-on browns
to shed, autumn, here; her legs, now lay autumned on the ground: her legs not more bare:just as dressed.As autumn grounds now —-_legs_naked already.:

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juddarwin

A " Haiku Doing Yoga " Re-Write

juddarwin

Joined June 2009

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