Motor City Mayhem 1982

The streets of Detroit were dark.

Bernie wore a leather. We wandered up from a yacht parked on the Detroit River looking for coffee. I sported an Hawaiian shirt.

There was a ruckus around the corner. We heard screaming and smashing noises. Five black men came running with chains and clubs.

We were out numbered five to two.

I knew gang fighting. “I’ll get the big one. You get who ever tries to save him!” If the two toughest were down the others might hesitate.

A brown Nova pulled up behind us blocking our retreat. The driver’s door swung open.

I was ready. Bernie was ready. I heard a voice from across the street. “What?”

“Git out da way foo’!”

“Oh!”

We stepped aside. The gang rushed past, piled in the car, and roared away. Tire smoke hung in the summer heat. Sounds faded into banging echoes among the tall buildings. I realized a perfect stranger had just saved my ass.

“Hey, thanks!” I called back.

“Foo’!” Said a man slowly shaking his head. As he walked away he looked back and scolded. “You just gotsta git out da way!”

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Comments

  • George Yesthal
    George Yesthalover 6 years ago

    One critique – this more in the way of humor. What are the odds of one well schooled in gang fighting using the word “whomever”?

  • ‘Whomever’ may have been a gang fighter from a Catholic school Ç;-)

    I’m glad that you pointed this out! It is important to know when an element chips away at verisimilitude. Your feedback is very helpful!

    This anecdote actually came straight out of my diary. During an early sailing adventure, I crewed a boat that tied up on the wall at Hart Plaza during a concert— unaware that as soon as the music ended, the crowd split, the Detroit cops went off-duty, and someone else owned the streets!

    – Bob Fox

  • jcmontgomery
    jcmontgomeryover 6 years ago

    Something like this really happened? OMG, I would have just performed a nasty bodily function all over myself and kissed my behind goodbye. LOL….nice twist at the end.

  • I grew up gang fighting— me against everybody! (I had a big mouth)

    This is fiction by omission. More than this happened. It was quite a paradigm shift ignorantly stepping from the comfort of a yacht into a gangland realm.

    Thank you for reading and commenting!

    – Bob Fox

  • Miri
    Miriover 6 years ago

    you’ve had a colourful life Robert :-)

    nice little story & good twist, weird how one always expects people to fight!….is this based on the Kerfuffle prompt as there’s a ruckus brewing?

    Also can you add to Twisted Tales Group? Cheers!

  • Perhaps the title should be Motor City Mayhem Ç;-) It’s a murderous, drugged out, lying, cheating, robbing, raping, thieving, pillaging place— and that’s just the mayor’s office!

    – Bob Fox

  • Natella2020
    Natella2020over 6 years ago

    Excellent tale, that ending was just perfect!

  • Thank you for reading and sharing a comment! Much appreciated.

    – Bob Fox

  • Micky McGuinness
    Micky McGuinnessover 6 years ago

    “Motor City Mayhem Ç;-) It’s a murderous, drugged out, lying, cheating, robbing, raping, thieving, pillaging place” and built in the image of it’s makers; The Automotive Industry!
    A nice story, which,.. like Miri, I’m guessing is based on the notion of this being a kerfuffle.

  • Yes, it’s a piece I believe fits the criteria of ‘kerfuffle’.

    The auto industry does have a long shadow, some of it very dark over Detroit. However, the trouble in Detroit in far greater than the auto industry. And it’s hard to tell the truth about Detroit; there is too fine a line between science and bigotry.

    – Bob Fox

  • Alison Pearce
    Alison Pearceover 6 years ago

    Very colourful and vivid storytelling!

  • Thank you, Alison!

    – Bob Fox

  • WanderingAuthor
    WanderingAuthorover 6 years ago

    Great reading, but I don’t think its an experience I’d enjoy living through. Although, if I ever find myself in such a spot, I hope someone’s there to remind me to get out of the way. LOL! (Is there a sequel planned, covering the rest of what happened that night? Or would that be too much, even for this bunch of twisted writers?)

  • Writing about the other events of that night is something I hadn’t considered. Feelings one does not want to be reminded of may make for some good reading! Thanx for the encouragement, Wan, I’ll let it stew…

    – Bob Fox

  • Natella2020
    Natella2020over 6 years ago

    Congrats on making third, Robert. This was my favorite, but I hadn’t entered, so I couldn’t vote.

  • I’m glad that you liked it and appreciate your comment!

    – Bob Fox

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