How To Breathe

Author: Vivian F
Word Count: 134
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How To Breathe

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I am a miniature sailboat made of foil and paper
Closed up in a glass bottle, lost in a soundless dream
The world is dropping like an anchor, a lump of sugar,
Dissolving from my sights until there’s nothing left
But your hands like seaweed tickle the surface of my skin
And the fireworks of water and the night begins to flood in
Your alkaline kisses teach me how to breathe again.
When the bottle rattles and the cork loosens,
I find the hollow spaces that I have been longing
Infinite and hazy veils lurk close above the sea
To cloud the murmur of our growing song
But your arms like waves carry me away
And the bodies that stir with no sound become alive
Your voice teaches me how to breathe again.

Shoaib .

wow… you are a really awesome writer… this one just blew me away
Vivian F replied

Thanks!
Erika .

This is definitely one of your best….I love it!
Vivian F replied

Oh, you think so? Well, thank you. :)
colorblind

this is what i’m talking bout
this gave me a sail and i was well on my way went a smile
thank you for this wonderful piece
it is something i can relate to
Vivian F replied

Thank you. I’m glad you could relate.
oneperfectkiss

this is lovely….strangely comforting too! xx
Vivian F replied

Yes, writing it was slightly comforting as well. :) Thank you.
Leda D

wow this is fantastic writing!!
Vivian F replied

Thanks so much.
natapee

sheesh, I think I just held my breath whilst reading that, which I always do when something really blows me away. Definitely my favourite of your writing so far, loved every word. x
Vivian F replied

Oh, I’m glad! Thanks so much for reading.
mimi yoon

i hear you…. this is a beautiful writing vivian… : )
Vivian F replied

Thank you very much. I really appreciate it. :)
skinnyman

this is passionate stuff WTS. really love it. :)
Vivian F replied

Thanks so much. Your comments are always greatly appreciated.
poeticsoul

wow very vivid and passionate really well written
Vivian F replied

Thank you.
Shoaib .
Vivian F replied

Awesome. Thanks so much!
colorblind

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colorblind
Vivian F replied

Thank you very much! I’m honored.
Kristin Reynolds

Beautiful, loved it; a very vivid introspection. Kristin
Vivian F replied

Thank you.
meng

when I think of tiny boats inside bottles I aslo thinik of tiny builders putting them together. this is a great poem ;0)
Vivian F replied

Haha, tiny builders? Yeah, I could see that. Thanks for reading. :)
Jaybe

Incredible….
Vivian F replied

Thank you very much.
discomb

well put! love how this piece takes you back and forth from the literal to the metaphoric.
Vivian F replied

Thanks! Glad you liked it.
RosaCobos

Blissful waves…
soundless dreams…
tin foil sails..
for northern realms…
what it was…will be…
as soon as someone
will take you home…
when home is love in love`s sea.
Rosa (precious poem… from the begining to the end..moments of joyful metaphors…. and images clear and poetic)
Vivian F replied

Thank you very much. xx
RosaCobos

Because your contact with love is an explossion of sensoriality and communication with the elements…..and you know how to express it with poetry and intention…this poem deserves it.
Rosa
Vivian F replied

Oh, featured? Wow, thanks so much!!
Cassey

Absolutely gorgeous writing and use of metaphor. Stunning really.
Vivian F replied

Thank you very much.
mikeyartscape

how beautiful a soul hears you – these words are sublime :)
Vivian F replied

Thank you so much for reading. :)