Breathing Deeply,
Drowning slowly.
Seen by all,
Heard by none
Her call
A lullaby in a storm
The sea couldn’t charm
The sky can’t hold
Im have no fear
I embrace the dark
Breathing Deeply,
Drowning slowly.
Seen by all,
Heard by none
Her call
A lullaby in a storm
The sea couldn’t charm
The sky can’t hold
Im have no fear
I embrace the dark
mlgkats
nicely written
Madeline M Allen
Very lovely , well done !
Craig Shillington
Beautiful Kelly, reminds me of a sunset!!
Graham Dean
I enjoy reading every line, and a brilliant image to accompany.
Sean Farragher
well done
Cynthia Washin...
this poem is wonderful, it’s my type of writing
Matt Roberts
Great. But why did I read the last line as ‘I dark the embrace’ – think I have dyslexia… lol.
Martin Derksema
One of your most impressive pictures and a beautiful poem.
Max Gatrell
Nice.
bonesisgreat
Know just how you feel
Ben Ruskin
absolutely fantastic..
oscarelizondo
A brave way to hide behind begin afraid. I just loved it.
oscarelizondo
A brave way to hide behind begin afraid. I just loved it.
delbertnagel
very deep, loe in the dark do we see the light
delbertnagel
i didn’t know 35 words could say so much
moquitako
breathing, seeing, calling … all giving back less than breathed, seen, called : calling becoming a lullaby, there is restless, quietless air … breathing, becoming suffocation, again air darkness instead of life giving sought after essences … This is very beautiful, for the poem incorporates our being not with what we are forced to accept but with what we agree to be become .. to see through it, to know it because we have embraced what it really is, become wise and alive. This is just very good. Written with effortless flair of a real poet.
Melody Elizabeth B-R
i really like reading this. it gives me hope for the yet to come.
9TyLeRAuStIN9
my perspective is you are sad, that makes me feel sad, but i like your work it is very good to me
WitheringMoon
Wow thanx all – such wonderful comments was my first ever attempt at writting and will probably be my last !!! thanx all xx
bubblegumPOP
So poetic, its very beautiful..
I could read it a million times and never get sick of it =]
WitheringMoon
Thank you bubblexx
byebye
Beautiful, this was written very well.
Ushna Sardar
awesome!
Shanna S.
I like this poem alot. Don’t stop writing… these words touch me.
WitheringMoon
Thanx byebye,Ushna & Shanna x
andreamcarroll
i love this.
it’s very well written.
WitheringMoon
thankyou andream
EricSimmons
nice very abstarct and dark…
dogpriest
really good, i enjoyed this poem. keep it up.
Maureen Bloesch
sadness inside, well written, touched a soft part of my heart…
How did you get your photo on the side?
Rob Smith
Love
it
.
Raven088
I could not help but read the words over and over again.. Deep and beautiful.
Dave Legere
I like the simplicity! very good.
KEITH R. WILL...
very well written
Bradley S. Har...
Has the feel of a rainbow caught at dusk as the many colors start to lose their brilliance. Very well written.
WitheringMoon
Thank you x