Eyes across the room ........
When I joined RB in 2008, I was looking at groups to join I found the Six Word Story group, disbanded I fear, which started me on the writing experience…this poem started as a six word story in my mind but was unable to create the atmophere in just six words..so it grew, and now have developed a new passion other than photography, of writing…
I have collaborated with David Petranker and he very kindly agreed for me to use his picture; Always on My Mind to go along side this poem.
I welcome critical reviews of my work…please bubble me if you have any constructive comments….
Eyes across the room ........ belongs to the following groups:
! 100% !, ! Creative Writing & Poetry !, "Poetry and Beautiful Women" , All Around the Styles, All Out Emotion, All Things Poetic, Artistic, Philosophical, Creative, Talented, and Unknown, Everyday Life, Everyday Women, Freedom In Words & Art, Live, Love, Dream: , Masterpieces: Literary Workshop, Pleasure & Pain, The beauty of poetry, THE DIVINE FEMININE, The Word Tree, Up & Coming Writers, Who are YOU to Judge?, WMG and You're AcceptedI don’t want to be here it’s not my scene
The music is awful I’m not that keen
I don’t want to drink I’ve had enough
The conversation’s boring its really tough
I glance around to see who’s there
My eyes stop dead I sit and stare
A stranger appears across the room
Surrounded by people very soon
His eyes are smiling in my direction
With warm intense colourful affection
My eyes were transfixed, my breathing fast
Love at first sight, finally, at last
My heart is racing, excitement within
I can’t believe this is happening
I glance away into a smoky haze
He moves around to catch my gaze
Who is the man who wakes me up
Is this real, is this luck
His friend distracts him to the bar
Look all about he won’t be far
My eyes are searching all around
Keep looking but nowhere to be found
Look again he must be there
Its torture… it’s just not fair
Later I lay awake unable to sleep
The memory in my head I’ll keep
The face, the eyes and infectious smile
A dream all but for a short while
Mark Chapman
Another good one!
wigs replied
not quite sure where it came from… started as a 6 word story and got slighty too long for that group…
ChelseaBlue
Mmmmm ! . . . . very intense and thought provoking !
wigs replied
I try not and lay at night worrying about work… just little stories now!!
Asenna
This sounds like a good distraction from work.
wigs
puts my mind in a more relax state when I do sleep….
lazydaze
hahaha AWSOME !!! i LOVE poems that rhyme and are interesting !! urs is FANTASTIC !!! good work Wigs !! :)))
wigs replied
thank you ever so much… I’m in my early writing days and your feedback is hugely encouraging…
silverstrummer...
Hi Wigs – Beautifully versed and an enjoyment to read ….......... take me back to my younger days! A favourite for me! – David
wigs replied
Ah thank you David…. very much appreciated
phantomlimb
Beautiful poem my friend xx
wigs replied
thank you so much for taking the time to look at my work…
justwords
Beautiful poetry, enjoyed this immensly, thanks
wigs replied
thank you so much, I hope to have some more work ready soon…that I hope you will enjoy too…
Shoaib .
who is this mystery stranger at the end of the bar !! haha nice poem even if it was all just a dream
wigs replied
pure fiction but I did a collaboration with David Petranker called Always on My Mind….lovely portrait to go with the words….
DarKarsean
Beautiful poem
wigs replied
thanks much appreciated
oneperfectkiss
this is beautiful honey. xxx
wigs replied
thank you …... its a wonderful dream