Breaking Up.

Paul Rees-Jones
Author: Paul Rees-Jones
Word Count: 677
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Breaking Up.

Breaking Up. belongs to the following groups:

Live, Love, Dream: , Short stories - Spherical Scriptings, Twisted Tales and WMG

Severe, that was all she could think. The way he left was just so hurtful. She had invested so much of herself, her time, her heart and her money. He used her and she felt so betrayed. She sat looking at the letter, tears streaming down her face.

“What a bastard,” she whispered to herself.

Every line of the letter ripped her apart. Old cliches used to lessen the blow. Was he such an idiot? Who wrote down “this hurts me more than it hurts you.” It was almost enough to make her chuckle, almost. She placed the letter down on the table, absently smoothing out the wrinkles made by her tense hands. Standing up she took 3 deep breaths, meant to calm.

She was with him for 6 years. He had gone through 7 business ventures, all failing miserably. Each one chiseled a piece of her savings down, until she had nothing left. That was when he decided to write the letter. She had been so wrong about him. She wanted to believe that he was different than everyone else in this world, but he wasn’t.

She lost friends because of him. Lost relationships with family members. All of these people close to her had warned her off this man. She was a woman in love and nothing would curb those feelings. Soon all she had was him, nothing else. Perhaps this is what he wanted, no interruptions to his schemes. She felt like a fool.

She wandered through the rooms of her house, looking at different items bought by her tormentor. She realized everything he had bought her she had bought herself. He had no money other than hers and that is what he used for these “thoughtful” gifts. She wandered up to a lovely Chinese vase. He had purchased this when they spent the day in China town last year. It turned out the lovely outing was an excuse to discuss business with an importer he had met on line.

She picked up the vase and threw it against the wall. It made a lovely loud crash as it exploded into hundreds of pieces. She was surprised at how much better she felt. She went to a frame of her and him, such stupid smiling faces. She threw it. It smashed and it felt good. Within a half an hour, there was quite a mess around the house as a result of her efforts to feel better. She wandered up the stairs to continue her therapy.

She had collapsed on the bed and slept. Now she slowly awoke to darkness. She didn’t remember falling asleep, but shock does work in funny ways. She made her way back to the kitchen. She didn’t turn on any lights; she knew the way and enough moonlight shined through the windows to illuminate her way a bit. It was still there, the letter. She sat in front of it. Tears started again, she felt then running down her cheeks.

The knives were still out, laid on the table waiting. She had had a difficult time picking the right one. She knew she shouldn’t let him get to her this way, but he did. She picked up a large knife, ran the flat cold of the blade against her cheek. It was large and could do a lot of damage quickly. In her other hand she held her razor sharp cleaver.

“Time to end this,” she said softly to no one.

She stood and steadied herself. The cleaver was left on the table. Her decision was made. The large carving knife was raised above her head. She brought it down fast; it dug deep into the flesh and hit bone. She waited for the pain, but it didn’t come. Maybe he was right. Maybe it did hurt him more than it hurt her. She picked up the cleaver and finished cutting off the arm of the man she once loved. He was too heavy to carry out in one piece. She had to break him up.

  • Naylor

    Naylor

    WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    This had my attention right from the start and I thought that I kinda knew how this would end but …. WOW great storyteller … you have rendered me speechless !!! Bravo ((HUG))

  • Paul Rees-Jones replied

    aww thanks your highness!!

  • jcmontgomery

    jcmontgomery

    “She had to break him up.” Great ending and a marvelous way to work in the title.

    Like I’ve said before…you can really scare the hell out of me sometimes hon….but in a good way. I think? Hmmmm

    LOL

    PS…I am sending a couple of things I saw that you may wish to look at….hehe…you know how I am.

  • Paul Rees-Jones replied

    Hmm…I think? Not too encouraging….lol…thanks for the proof!

  • jcmontgomery

    jcmontgomery

    Oh, I know your scariness is borne of fantasy and creativity….not reality….just teasin’....hehe

    Muah!

  • Debbie Irwin

    Debbie Irwin

    Oh, this is excellent!!

  • Paul Rees-Jones replied

    thanks so much.

  • GarBut

    GarBut

    Why not rename it BREAKING UP IS HARD TO DO and enter it in the “Twisted Karaoke” comp?

  • Paul Rees-Jones replied

    Thanks,
    I think you can only have one entry…

  • GarBut

    GarBut

    Good point.

    Strange, though, that the guy who wrote “I ONLY HAVE EYES FOR YOU” chose a decidedly cyclopean avatar…

  • Paul Rees-Jones replied

    LOL!!!

  • Miri

    Miri

    jeez – ouch!! that one was viscious! had me going til the end, great story & i love the title & the last line

  • Paul Rees-Jones replied

    Yes ouch indeed….Thanks for reading!!

  • WanderingAuthor

    WanderingAuthor

    I didn’t see that one coming at all. I kept waiting for the twist, and then – zap! Even after I knew she killed him, I still felt sympathy for her – it takes good writing and good characterisation to have that effect on me.

  • Paul Rees-Jones replied

    Thanks alot WA…definately appreciate the compliment. Made my day!

  • Arie

    Arie

    Wow…a new Roald Dahl story! Very fine job…I love a twist at the end, yours is fabulous!!

  • Paul Rees-Jones

    Paul Rees-Jones

    Maybe it is a welsh thing…lol.
    Thanks Arie.

  • saleire

    saleire

    Wel…..it defintely hurt him more :o) Great story!

  • Valerie

    Valerie

    Wow. I loved it. Nice job!

  • Paul Rees-Jones replied

    thanks Valerie!

    : { )}

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