Please click on “SHOW FULL DESCRIPTION” to read my Short Story “Her Bright Future”© 2012, Ellen Hecht. I wrote the story based on this image I shot towards dusk in California, with a Nikon Coolpix point & shoot camera. PLEASE jump down past the Features to read “HER BRIGHT FUTURE.” below.

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SHORT STORY:

Her Bright Future
by Ellen Hecht © 2012 All Rights Reserved

People from the city think they know about country life. They think country people are a bunch of hayseeds with no education, no idea about the world and – no hope. They think, that just like the little towns they come from – the ones Route 66 made into mini-boom towns (and years later, the freeways turned into ghost towns) they lead lonely, drab lives.

Well as much as those country folk hate to say it, those city folk are right.
There isn’t a god damn thing to do in the Midwest and those families who went West looking for a better life took their hopelessness with them. They packed it all up and tied it to the tops of their cars and the backs of their pick ups and drove – out of Oklahoma, through the panhandle, Texas, New Mexico, Arizona, all the way out to Cali-forn-eye-aye. When they got to the desert foothills, they unpacked. They’d run out of money, gas and possibilities. And that’s where the next generation of no-education, nothing-to-do and no hope planted their roots and grew up.

Natalie Hutchens thought she might do better. By some miracle, the rickety-boned genes of her mother’s side of the family and the gaunt, wire-y genes of her father’s side mutated and performed a random act of kindness. Natalie was lovely.

Her sister had died at birth. She ’d weighed 2 lbs. and was born without a lower intestine, the doctors said. Her older brother never could put on any weight and was born with his pinky toes missing. So everyone was surprised when Natalie was born, plump, pink and glowing with health. She had blue eyes the color of nothing anyone there had ever seen and blonde hair; real blonde, not that dirty-blonde color that looks like somebody hadn’t washed it ever. She was pretty-much perfect; a real beauty. If her ma hadn’t known better she would have thought maybe there was a mistake and she’d have to give that baby back.

But it was no mistake and as Natalie grew older, she only got more beautiful. It was nearly an embarrassment to her family. People always wanted to ask if she had been adopted. But they didn’t. You’d have to be real stupid not to know that only the rich could buy a baby and the Hutchens were share croppers. During the depression, folks had enough trouble feeding the mouths that belonged to them, much less looking for more mouths to feed.

Not only was life hard, it moved slower than anywhere else – anywhere else where there were things to do, entertainment – things to distract a body. Everything there was to do to earn a living, would crack your skin, peel your lips and make your body ache when it got up in the morning.

But again, Natalie proved to be the exception. Must have been looking in the mirror each day gave her a lift, because she had what people called a sunny disposition. Somehow, that little glimpse in the mirror in the morning seemed to give her the kind of hope that everyone in her family, and those like them, had buried somewhere along the dusty roadside between Oklahoma and where they ran out of gas.

And just the way a flower works its way out of the dirt, drawn to the sun, Natalie was meant for better things. And the very best that Barstow had to offer was the fruit and nut stand next to the only gas station for miles. The picking and packing was for those girls who were genetically less fortunate. Natalie got a job meeting the public. Some folks would stop even if they didn’t need gas or fruit, just to get a closer look at Natalie’s smile. There was nothing like her for miles. Some folks coming back from the coast would say she should get out of there – that there were places where they made silent films and the best looking actresses would pale next to Natalie’s good looks. But the road didn’t go any farther than Barstow for the Hutchens family. Everything west of Barstow just plain didn’t exist. It wasn’t until the rest of the world began to show up that Natalie got a taste of what the rest of the world had to offer.

One afternoon, a glamorous-looking couple driving an open topped roadster stopped for gas. The man got out and struggled to put the top up. Newly deposited sand and dust coated the sleek new touring car. A goddess of a woman had covered herself with a hat and scarf and could be heard complaining dramatically about her hair. A greeting committee of three or four mongrel dogs crept out from under a tar paper covered shack, their tails between their legs. They were looking for handouts but were skittish and ready to run if given the boot.

The teenager who ran the pump came over to help him. The goddess stayed in the car, applying a fresh coat of paint to her face. Once the top was up and the tank was filled, she insisted she wanted to buy some oranges. To Natalie, the two might as well have been a king and queen. She was tongue tied but the man was a smooth talker and all she had to do was smile and he was smitten. He eyed her naturally blonde hair and curvy figure and, in a low voice, said some flattering words to her. Sensing competition from the hick beauty, the woman gave the man a glare and off they went in their sophisticated machine, leaving behind a cloud of dust and the scent of the woman’s perfume.

That night, Natalie lay in bed with visions of that man in her head. She thought about his slicked back hair and perfectly trimmed mustache. By comparison, the local boys with their chin stubble and cowlicks were as different from him as his sleek convertible was to their gritty, rust-bucket trucks.

Her heart would pound every time a plume of dirt rose into the air behind vehicles approaching from the west. She had a fantasy that he would come back for her someday – that she would be the woman in the passenger seat of the touring car and he would motor her away to Hollywood where she would become a silent screen actress.

Just a week after those two left she caught a ride into town on her day off and bought a magazine with film personalities on the cover and a lipstick to experiment with on her own virgin lips. Flipping through the pages she recognized the couple as John Gilbert and Greta Garbo. There was gossip that they would marry. Natalie smeared the lipstick from her lips with the back of her hand, got into bed and turned her face to the wall.

The following Saturday evening, Buck Davenport invited her to go out walking. He didn’t show up until almost dark. She reached up and lit the kerosene lamp hanging above her head on the front porch. In its light, he looked a little like that gent John Gilbert. He’d shaved his stubble for their date and slicked back his hair although it didn’t look that clean. They’d been out walking before. The other guys knew Buck was sweet on her and pretty much kept their distance from Natalie. You didn’t want to cross Buck.

As they walked, he draped a proprietary arm around her shoulders. Around back of the tar paper shack there were some scraggly trees, a water trough and some old farming equipment left to rust. A cluster of windmills were bent over some, all leaning in the same direction from years of getting beat by the desert wind. Just about in the middle of the windmills there was an old mattress and they lay down side by side and looked up at the stars.

Nothing was said between them for a few minutes and then Buck rolled over on top of Natalie and fondled her. She took the only attention she’d had since the moving pictures fella had flirted with her at the fruit stand. After he’d had his way with her, Buck zipped up his pants and said his good nights. He left Natalie there looking up at the stars, listening to the sound of the windmills’ blades turn, creaking and rasping, like a bunch of towering grasshoppers.

Wasn’t long before she found she was knocked up. The doctor told her he was sure.

From that day Natalie’s hair began to lose its shine. Her skin took on the rough texture of the Barstow earth. She stopped looking in the mirror. She didn’t want to see how her lips had become dry and cracked.

The Mojave that surrounds the gas station stretches away for hundreds of miles with nothing but scrub, coyotes, snakes and centipedes.

Folks tell it that Natalie just walked out into the desert and never came back.

Local Indian legend says the ghost of a young woman can sometimes be seen after dark, along the bank of the Mojave River and they can hear her wail.

White people have heard it too. But they say it’s just the wind.

The End

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE TAKE A MINUTE AND LEAVE ME A COMMENT. THANKS FOR READING THE STORY. ; ) Cordially, Ellen

I am a photographer and a writer. If you enjoy odd, short stories, I have a folder in my RB portfolio titled “Short Stories / Writing.”

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Comments

  • linmarie
    linmariealmost 4 years ago

    “WOW”
    what a fabulous find this shot is, love the angle of it, peace and love linmarie

  • Hi Linmarie – Thank you for being such a great RB friend. Please tell me how you are able to frame the photos – I have as yet not figured out how to do that! (smile) Cordially, Ellen (waddleudo)

    – waddleudo

  • trish725
    trish725almost 4 years ago

  • FEATURED! I still can’t believe my photos are being included among some of the best photographic work. I am in awe of the talent on RB! Thank you and thank you againa!

    – waddleudo

  • byronbackyard
    byronbackyardalmost 4 years ago

    Great shot, love the angle!

  • Thank you so much! This was a great week for photo ops! I’m happy!
    Ellen

    – waddleudo

  • Evita
    Evitaalmost 4 years ago

    Beautiful work!!! Congratulations Black & White Photo Of The Week Editors Choice
    The World As We See It , or as we missed it Group

  • Hello Evita:
    I looked at the excellent work by the other photographers who have also had their photo selected. Wow, I’m in very good company! I am new to redbubble. Just one month. So I really don’t know the difference between an Editor and a Host. I am proud to be selected for this – and I would like to know how a person’s work is selected and what it means! Can I ask you or is there somewhere on redbubble I can get educated in this process? I do know that it is an honor. Thank you for including the image I shot in Photo of the Week. Cordially, Ellen (waddleudo)

    – waddleudo

  • Chris Armytage™
    Chris Armytage™almost 4 years ago

    Great capture, congratulations!

  • Oh thank you! This was a great find, a great day. (The winter sun making the angle of shadows dramatic.) I decided to remove the color because the shapes themselves were so striking. This is probably my best photo. Thanks for looking and the nice comment. Cordially, Ellen (waddleudo)

    – waddleudo

  • Debbie Robbins
    Debbie Robbinsalmost 4 years ago

    CONGRATS on this fab image…. well deserved!!!! love it. :))

  • Now I’m worried I’ll never get a shot better than this one. What if I’ve “peaked” this early in my photographic ‘career’! Oh, NO!!!! Heh.

    – waddleudo

  • Ell-on-Wheels
    Ell-on-Wheelsalmost 4 years ago

    Superb windmills Ellen!! :o) Fave for me! :o)))

  • I can’t believe how well this turned out. What if I never get a shot as good as this ever again???

    – waddleudo

  • Thank you! Can I join “Tone it Down?”

    – waddleudo

  • Thanks again very much for accepting “Windmills Noir” into “Tone it Down.” And thank you for co-hosting this excellent group.
    Cordially, Ellen (waddleudo)

    – waddleudo

  • Peter Denness
    Peter Dennessalmost 4 years ago

    I like this one, it works excellently in mono

  • Thank you for the compliment, Peter. It means a lot coming from a talent such as yours!
    Cordially, Ellen (waddleudo)

    – waddleudo

  • Kate Towers IPA
    Kate Towers IPAalmost 4 years ago

    good shot :))

  • Thank you so much! The photographers who comment on my work are of such a high caliber, it is especially an honor!
    Thank you for looking and commenting.
    Cordially, Ellen (waddleudo)

    – waddleudo

  • Mariann Kovats
    Mariann Kovatsalmost 4 years ago

    Stunning work! I love it in b&w!

  • Thank you so much. One of my favorite shots (she says of her own work, modestly!)
    Ellen

    – waddleudo

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