That was raining when
we were standing under the tree
you hold my hand quietly
you were enough close t me at that moment
I felt warmth
I felt your breathe on my face
you were looking into my eyes
and no body saw
you kissed me!!
under the tree, in the rain
I heard your whisper
you say my name in the evening
a sweet whisper that i could never forget
I felt the magic at that moment
that was mesmerizing really
if any one’s seen us together
No body’s saying so
I look into your eyes and it seems
you have fallen in love with me!
I was waiting for to hear some more sweet words
but you didn’t say a lot
so it was love!
I was thinking then you left my hand
It seems you wanted to run away
I didn’t say anything and you were walking away
no body saw you left my hand
no body saw my tears in the darkness
It was still raining
no body saw I was crying
Under the tree, In the rain
chasingsooz, 6 months ago
You truly are a gifted wordsmith.
I love the journey that you take us on in this piece and the emotive imagery that you create with your words.
Ushna Sardar in reply to chasingsooz’s comment, 6 months ago
thanks chasing! :)
glad ya liked!
appreciate your precious comments! :)
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butchart, 6 months ago
another beautiful piece ushna….. i am ready for a happy one…:)
Ushna Sardar in reply to butchart’s comment, 6 months ago
thanks b! want that one too! hope it could come out of me soon :)
glad ya liked! appreciate your precious comments b! Huggles
Gregory John O..., 6 months ago
Love sucks !!! Thanks for sharing
Ushna Sardar in reply to Gregory John O'Flaherty’s comment, 6 months ago
true! thanks for reading Gregory!
kindly read the another collabration writing with keith williams hope you must like! :)
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bellerjeau, 6 months ago
well done getting it all cleans the soul and voices what we wish to say. again another triumph.
bellerjeau
Tom Broderick IPA, 6 months ago
great words. tom
pheonixit, 6 months ago
Lovely
Ushna Sardar in reply to bellerjeau’s comment, 6 months ago
thank you so much bellerjeau! *:):)
glad ya liked hunnie!
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Ushna Sardar in reply to Tom Broderick IPA’s comment, 6 months ago
long time Tom! glad to hear from ya :)
thanks!
Ushna Sardar in reply to pheonixit’s comment, 6 months ago
thanks Joe! :)
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Roscoe Davis III, 6 months ago
I really like your poetry. Another well done piece. Good job.
Ushna Sardar in reply to Roscoe Davis III’s comment, 6 months ago
thank you so much Roscoe!
glad you liked mate! :)
appreciated you.
bellerjeau, 6 months ago
anytime just keep on writing!
Ushna Sardar in reply to bellerjeau’s comment, 6 months ago
will do hunnie- Huggles xXx
Rella, 6 months ago
Very sweet little expose :)
Ushna Sardar in reply to Rella’s comment, 6 months ago
thanks Reela!
glad ya liked :)
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Rocketchook, 6 months ago
Excellence , we need more of this in life. ( hope he ran back ).
Ushna Sardar in reply to Rocketchook’s comment, 6 months ago
thanks Rock! glad you liked!
appreciate your precious comments!
keep reading and keep in touch!
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Peace Mitchell, 6 months ago
I really like this! Great writing so much emotion.
Ushna Sardar in reply to Peace Mitchell’s comment, 6 months ago
thanks peace! glad you liked!
appreciate your precious comments :)
keep reading and keep in touch!
JaneAParis, 6 months ago
Very pretty, touching, and sad piece Ushna. You are a lovely writer. Smiles from Jane.
Mary Campbell, 6 months ago
Yes, so real and so wonderful
Ushna Sardar in reply to Mary Campbell’s comment, 6 months ago
thanks Mary! :)
glad you liked hunnie- big bunny huggles
Ushna Sardar in reply to JaneAParis’s comment, 6 months ago
thanks Jane! so r u!
thanks you so much for reading appreciate your precious comments hunnie! huggles x