“That time soon passed”
“yes, that time soon passed”
“very concerned, but it was all okay”
“all worked out for the best”
“one year old, crikey
that year flew by, seems like yesterday!”
“You remember when we met?”
“yes i remember, it was the day before yesterday
or was it the day before?”
“yeah”
“wow long time”
it seems has been ages”
“yes i know what you mean, you are now fed up with me it has gone on too long”
“No, I am not(smiling)”
“you can, you should”
I am never fed up with you, it has gone on too long”
“so you say!” (smile)
“You know i can’t”
“many do, many can!”
“Could you?”
“I can try, i will if you will”
“I won’t”
“you are interesting but, you keep on he he”
“I wouldn’t”
“you want to be married, you want kids!”
“Is that wrong?”
“No, not bad only bad for me”
“every woman wan’t that”
“I am a free spirit”
“so?”
“not wrong with the right person, I meant not right with the wrong person!”
“You think?”
“freedom, the open road. freedom to do as you wish!”
“You like that?”
“you know I love you a lot”
“so?”
“lots I love you, how much do i love you?”
“i love you too”
“maybe”
“we both love each other then whats else?”
“I don’t know!”
“maybe that is all there is”
“we will sort out that”
“will we?”
“yeah”
“aybe, maybe not”
“You know what I want?”
“what?”
“I wanna carry out a plan”
“Plan?”
“Yeah, like we did last summer!”
“he he”
“you forgot?”
“No!”
“Then?”
“Nothing”
“I want to carry out a plan, want to make the strategy of life, you remember! like we did last summer!”
“Yeah I remember”
“I want to spend some time with you this summer too, want to spend my life time loving you!”
“he he you can”
“I really love you and want to spend whole life with you, why you’re not taking me serious!”
“A problem a day helps you work, rest and play”
“huh”
“he he”*
(she walked away)
"Under The Bridge"
Short Story
Ozcloggie, 5 months ago
Wish she hadn’t!! (I don’t like unhappy endings!!) _But I enjoyed reading this very much.
Ushna Sardar in reply to Ozcloggie’s comment, 5 months ago
ThanksOzclonggie, appreciate your comments. I like happy ending too but thats life and it happens often in life, cause life is not about predicted things; life is all about unpredicted things so sometimes we have to be realistic. we have to face both weather in life whether its unhappy or happy, we face both ending in life, its not easy though but thats life all about. glad you enjoyed it :)
geraint, 4 months ago
Very creative and energetic dialogue. My internal monologues sound a bit like this!! lol
Ushna Sardar in reply to geraint’s comment, 4 months ago
Thanks geraint glad you liked it! appreciate your precious comment on my work! :)
Ryan Duclos, 4 months ago
I noticed this was in the competition for “Like we did last summer” and that phrase is missing I believe…I had to pull my story out b/c i couldn’t add this phrase i hope you are able to !
Tom Broderick, 4 months ago
very interesting peace of work. as you speak of love and you do not. i like it. tom
Gregory John O..., 4 months ago
Like it , Thanks
pheonixit, 4 months ago
You lost me on that one. I’ll try again later.
Joe
butchart, 4 months ago
Ushna… i just love your style… i always feel like i’m witnessing what you are writing and feeling…. you do beautiful things…........................ thank you….....b
SMiXX, 4 months ago
you tell a great story
the endding is true
thats why i loved
C’EST LA VIE
pheonixit, 4 months ago
sorry ,Ushna it is still going over my head still this morning.
Sally Omar, 4 months ago
Ushna, Fantastic dialogue… Sally xxoo
Ushna Sardar in reply to pheonixit’s comment, 4 months ago
thanks tom!
glad ya like!
Ushna Sardar in reply to Gregory John O'Flaherty’s comment, 4 months ago
thanks Gregory! appreciate your precious comments!
keep reading and keep in touch!
Ushna Sardar in reply to pheonixit’s comment, 4 months ago
Okay Joe!
take your time! :)
Ushna Sardar in reply to butchart’s comment, 4 months ago
thanks b!
thanks for kind words!
always good to hear from ya and always appreciate comments from ya!
glad ya like!
big bunny huggles! :)
Ushna Sardar in reply to SMiXX’s comment, 4 months ago
thanks smixx! glad ya liked!
appreciate your precious comments on work!
keep reading and keep in touch!
Ushna Sardar in reply to pheonixit’s comment, 4 months ago
Its okay Joe!
take your time!
relax and be good!
big bunny Huggles! :)
Ushna Sardar in reply to Sally Omar’s comment, 4 months ago
thanks sally!
glad ya like hunnie!
huggles! :)
Ushna Sardar in reply to Ryan Duclos’s comment, 4 months ago
thanks Ryan!
so nice of ya for letting me know bout phrase!
Now you could find there!
thank ya!
Huggles
Alison Pearce, 3 months ago
Wonderfully written story!
Ushna Sardar in reply to Alison Pearce’s comment, 3 months ago
thank you so much Alison! glad you like! :)
appreciate your precious comments!
keep reading and keep in touch!
barnsis, 3 months ago
“A problem a day helps you work, rest and play” That I like,! Actually I like all of it.
Jonathan Dower, 3 months ago
what an experiment that turned out well! I like it a lot. Featuring it on the Experimental homepage.
Ushna Sardar in reply to barnsis’s comment, 3 months ago
thanks byron my friend!
glad you liked it!
appreciate your precious comments!
huggles
Ushna Sardar in reply to Jonathan Dower’s comment, 3 months ago
thank you so much Jonathan for making my this post to feature writing on the Experimental’s homepage! it means a lot!
glad you liked!
huggles
Jonathan Dower, 3 months ago
even better, I’ve featured you now as an artist, as I think most of your stories are great! (I think Under the Bridge was removed for a while- sorry!
Ushna Sardar in reply to Jonathan Dower’s comment, 3 months ago
thank you so much Jonathan!
it means a lot!!
glad you choosen me! :)
Huggles