Have I been waiting long?

He comes not when summer is on the roses
he comes not when the roses were in full bloom
he comes not when I rang the bell and waited in the winter
(Have I been waiting long?)
he comes not when September had come and the leaves were starting to fall
he doesn’t feel a drop of rain
he comes not when I walked along with a spring in my step
he comes not when flowers were blooming in spring
he comes not when the first rays of morning sun disturbed their repose
he comes not when my eyes were bright and excited
he comes not when a bright morning shining with the sun
but when the moon landing
the floor was dappled with pale moonlight
by the light of the moon I could just make out shapes and outlines
in the moonlight
a light rain began to fall
when a thought flitted through my mind
he comes to me
the rain was falling steadily..
a smile flitted across his face
the rain poured down
he grabbed hold of me and wouldn’t let go

  • PJ Ryan

    PJ Ryan

    lovely !!

  • Ushna Sardar replied

    thanks Nicole! it means a lot hunnie huggles xoxoxoxox

  • Tom Broderick IPA

    Tom Broderick IPA

    very nice. tom

  • Ushna Sardar replied

    thanks tom! :)
    huggles my friend

  • barnsis

    barnsis

    I keep seeing an unnice person in this and yet it seems you have looked and looked for him. Maybe sometimes we don’t get what we wish for or think we are going to get?????

  • Ushna Sardar replied

    well said byron! sometimes we don’t get what we wish for!!
    appreciate your precious comments my friend!
    thank you!
    huggles

  • theyellowfury

    theyellowfury

    I’m liking this new personal direction from you Ushna.

  • Ushna Sardar replied

    thanks S! :)

    huggles my friend

  • Snoboardnlife

    Snoboardnlife

    Brilliant Ushna!

  • Ushna Sardar replied

    thanks my friend! :)
    huggles

  • mtda

    mtda

    Beautiful, haunting atmosphere that really pulled me in, nice work Ushna.

  • Ushna Sardar replied

    thank you so much mtda!
    glad you liked!
    huggles my friend

  • olawunmi

    olawunmi

    Well done Ushna, reflective piece!

  • Ushna Sardar replied

    thank you so much sweet Summayyah!
    it means a lot!
    huggles xoxoxoxox

  • olawunmi

    olawunmi

    Well done Ushna, reflective piece!

  • olawunmi

    olawunmi

    Well done Ushna, reflective piece!

  • KEITH  R. WILLIAMS

    KEITH R. WILL...

    BEAUTIFUL

  • Ushna Sardar replied

    thanks Keith! :)
    huggles my friend!

  • Antanas

    Antanas

    he doesn’t feel a drop of rain
    he comes not when I walked along with a spring in my step
    he comes not when flowers were blooming in spring
    he comes not when the first rays of morning sun disturbed their repose
    he comes not when my eyes were bright and excited
    he comes not when a bright morning shining with the sun
    but when the moon landing

  • Ushna Sardar replied

    thanks Antanas!

  • wendyL

    wendyL

    another brilliant writing by no other thank you!!!!

  • Ushna Sardar replied

    thanks hunnie!
    you are such a darling!
    huggles xoxoxox

  • Sally Omar

    Sally Omar

    Ushna, Definite fav…awesome!!!!! SAlly xxoo

  • Ushna Sardar replied

    thanks hunnie Sal! huggles xoxox

  • nkbellani

    nkbellani

    Simply superb!

  • Ushna Sardar replied

    thanks Kumar!
    huggles my friend!

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