surrender

the sky is grand above
flat backed to the ground.

i surrender to my imagination,
and become buried.

it is so calm up there
up there, it is so quiet,
from down here.

i can trace the journeys
of old holidays,
such golden memories,
i can see them all,
up there, from here.

it is like work never happened,
or ever even mattered,
as the dew punctures the cloth
and cools my skin.

i surrender to the weight of words,
and become buried.

let the others fret, and never rest,
this is the place i know best,
with the sky so grand above
and my whole self flat backed
to the ground,

surrendered into the arms i love,
and never to let go again.

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Comments

  • Donna19
    Donna19over 2 years ago

    I know this too friend. Without words and creativity I would not grow or survive. I just love the freedom in that. This is my favorite work of yours so far. Just perfect and how I feel. xx

  • thank you donna. its good to know the feeling is shared. :)

    – uncleblack

  • Maraia
    Maraiaover 2 years ago

    I like your poem very much, specially how some elements and parts of it are recaptured in a new light (the second stanza and the second line, which when reused intertwines the notion of the sky and yourself in such a beautiful way). Well… I hope you appreciate this kind of comment and i don’t sound too “mental” about poetry :)

  • hi maraia i certainly do appreciate the comment, it is great to hear peoples views, and helps me read in a new way too. thank you

    – uncleblack

  • kenroome
    kenroomeover 2 years ago

    Surrender is one of my treasure words…and you have done it beautifully.

  • im really glad you like it ken. many many thanks

    – uncleblack

  • lucin
    lucinover 2 years ago

    Is there another here? I go there. A grand peace piece.

  • many many thanks lucin :))

    – uncleblack

  • Tuliptree
    Tuliptreeover 2 years ago

    Congratulations on observing the detail of feeling and congratulations on having this featured in Creative Writing and Poetry on 29th July 2012!

  • thats great, thank you tuliptree, much appreciated

    – uncleblack

  • Vesna *
    Vesna *over 2 years ago

    beautiful, I love the lightness and the wisdom of your poem ub

  • glad you enjoyed it vesna, thank you :)

    – uncleblack

  • msdebbie
    msdebbieover 2 years ago

  • thanks for featuring, glad you liked it

    – uncleblack

  • Magenta32
    Magenta32over 2 years ago

    Love your poem. Are you talking about heaven? This poem speaks a lot of love. I would give you 6 stars, cause 5 isn’t enough. :)

  • thank you magenta..im really pleased you enjoyed it…it may be about heaven, but a heaven on earth..it relates to a favourite place of mine, just laying watching the sky..and being reminded of the things/people i love..

    – uncleblack

  • RuthFroehlinger
    RuthFroehlingeralmost 2 years ago

    a very moving Piece,

  • thank you ruth, that is much appreciated

    – uncleblack

  • linaji
    linajiabout 1 year ago

    beauty work UB, gives me a feeling of speaking to my better half of me

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