Sonnet no.1 Nectars naked honey Buzzed.

Nectar naked honey buzzed
To sweeten love’s desire
Honeycombed that moment
In summers sunshine’s fire
Sweet the scented roses white
Petal clouds from puffing trains
Captured dew drops diamond dew
In colours pale restrained
Our love it turned the corner
It’s crisp green shoots fade
In the shadows of the mountain
Where it’s green grass garden made
A nest of loves sunshine
Laid on a mossy carpet that natures magic laid.

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part of writing exercise the class one by one had to make 3 rules for a line of a poem when then one by one we read them out and voted for one to keep still not knowing where it was going teacher then lined up each rule to be applied to each line of sonnet
these were the rules
1. line must have the word honey
2.line must embody wish or desire
3. must have strong image
4. line must have hint of sunshine
5.smell of perfume
6. image of steam train.
7. should have one word repeated
8.must have a colour
9should echo movement , journey time passing
10.have one adjective
11.should be grounded in place
12. must contain alliteration
13must contain emotion
14 line must begin and end in the same word.

now you have 15 mins to write sonnet applying each rule to each line as you write.

Comments

  • Rhenastarr
    Rhenastarrover 3 years ago

    Fabulous my friend. Shall have to try my hand at this one.

  • looking forward the diversity of poems was amazing from not being able to find marmalade in the morning to this rhyme is not required

    – timbuckley

  • Catherine Berger
    Catherine Bergerover 3 years ago

    Lovely imagery Tim – see fields of flowers with the bees buzzing round, the sound of a horn in the distance, a glance in its direction and a cloud appears, disappears, only to reappear several feet away … but always sitting atop the distant grasses, there’s laughter, a couple clings and dances, falls to the ground in a loving embrace. That’s what I see.

  • you sure you weren’t in my head when i wrote this

    – timbuckley

  • sandra .
    sandra .over 3 years ago
    a neat exercise Tim…I like the idea of a formula directing your thoughts…sometimes

    Sandra

  • yea its funny the rules kinda freed you up thanks as always now have a go

    – timbuckley

  • vampvamp
    vampvampover 3 years ago

    cute

  • I write the greatest sonnet ever written since shakespeare and all you can say is cute , you know Iam joking thanks for the very short comment 2nd joke or was it.

    – timbuckley

  • LisaMM
    LisaMMover 3 years ago

    Beautiful poetry and what a wonderful exercise…so challenging but you rose to it with such aplomb.

  • thanks I was teachers pet after that

    – timbuckley

  • vampvamp
    vampvampover 3 years ago

    dude, hilarious! don’t make me feel bad now! :)
    i thought it was a poignant exercise, one i should try myself! see if i can do better than you! ;P (jokes)
    you can drizzle more of that honey all over me thanks! :) hehehe

  • forget the better bit just have a go its not the drizzle i enjoy but the licking it off now that would look well with your lastest post.

    – timbuckley

  • vampvamp
    vampvampover 3 years ago

    not a latest post my dear, an old one if you’re reffing the visitor. haven’t written anything dodgy for a while now. ;]

  • no the one i am referring to is your digital painting licked lol

    – timbuckley

  • vampvamp
    vampvampover 3 years ago

    yes i see that, high five! ;) hehe

  • rjcolby
    rjcolbyover 3 years ago

    That does seem a very good exercise Tim. Much better that waiting forever for the words to come to you. Kind of gets the thought process moving again.
    Dick

  • thanks its amazing the more the rules the greater the freedom kinda a contradiction but true

    – timbuckley

  • Agnes McGuinness
    Agnes McGuinnessover 3 years ago

    Beautiful, evocative sonnet, Tim. x

  • Thank you agnes

    – timbuckley

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