In Passing
For Lina…...
In Passing belongs to the following groups:
! Creative Writing & Poetry !, Affection, All Things Poetic, Artistic, Philosophical, Art Inspired by Dreams, Live, Love, Dream: May you have a Blessed Christmas Season , Soul Mates, The Red Writing Room and Up & Coming WritersI went for a dream last night,
And ended up walking.
The sun and the moon
Were passing each other.
I was trying to say hello,
But they wouldn’t quit talking.
The sun had so many bright things to say.
Telling the moon all about her wonderful day.
The moon tilted his head
And listened intently.
While the sun spoke to the moon,
Daylight drifted gently.
Below the horizon to a place of slumber.
The stars began to sing,
First one,
Then two,
Then more than I can number.
As the moon said his goodbye,
The sun turned and gave him a wink.
I am not sure,
But I may have seen a tear in his eye.
As if it pained him just to think.
That big sky they do share,
But they will never be alone anywhere.
Their love is one to last the ages,
But to him,
The days and nights,
Are only cages.
He has so much affection,
He will never show.
To him, she is perfection.
He desires only the warmth of her glow.
He paces the sky, longing for her light.
Waiting for an end to another night.
Her rays begin to dance on the mountains tops.
The clouds turn into cotton candy and coral drops.
This usual morning display,
Has a simple message she wants to convey…
Although, they spend their days and nights apart,
He is never very far from her heart.
red addiction
Awwww! i love this! You gave them so much life!!
TeriLee replied
Thank you…I was gunna try to not rhyme…but I failed….lol
mychaelalchemy
the moon seems to depend upon the sun for its light and the earth benefits.
The moon, though, seemingly less important, is the reason for our seasons and tides.
I like how you reversed the imagery right at the beginning.
and, truly, they are like lovers never quite getting it together….
TeriLee replied
The moon is the perfect male role huh? Thank you :)
aspectsoftmk
my my terilee… this is a great story…realism in every form..trying to grasp but never quite there…i touches my emotions deeply…sometimes the time is just not right…i adore these lines..
Her rays begin to dance on the mountains tops.
The clouds turn into cotton candy and coral drops.
This usual morning display,
Has a simple message she wants to convey…
Although, they spend their days and nights apart,
He is never very far from her heart
excellent writing my friend…
TeriLee replied
Thank you so much Terri…the last two images Lina did of the sun and moon caught me…
helene ruiz
just beautiful
TeriLee replied
Thank you :)
KEITH R. WILL...
very beauitful terilee a wonderful creative peice of art simply amazing
TeriLee replied
Thanx so much Keith….a wonderful compliment :)
pinkyjain
This is wonderful TerlLee, so very beautiful
TeriLee replied
Thank you so much :)
salsbells69
Beautifully written. Its gorgeous and so true! Very descriptive and builds a picture that I have never envisaged before. Well done!
TeriLee replied
Thank you so much….what a fantastic compliment….as a writer, to take a reader where they have never been is quite an acomplishment….I am honored …..thank you again :)
LindaR
I absolutely loved this!! ~ I cannot do justice with words ~ so enchanting & wonder ~ full ~ a delight!!
xxx
TeriLee replied
Thank you so much Linda…always surrounded by so much inspiration:)
mychaelalchemy
but ,eclipsed by the sun
binjy
Hmm..It’s not only the moon with a tear in the eye …beautifully composed :)
lianne
Ahhh TeriLee how exquisite this is! Such a vivid word picture you paint here of a relationship that never quite flowers but which is so necessary each to the other. Very moving piece – beautifully written.
TeriLee replied
Thank you Lianna….I have always loved the “poetic” relationship of the sun and moon….Lina’s recent posts sparked something :)
linaji
Whoose..I feel the breeze and the passing of the two,.. I think I need more sleep as I am always up trying to see if I can help these two meet somehow.. lol, they are fine in their longing as I am in mine…Love you I do.. and Much Thanks for this honor you bestowe me.
TeriLee
Thank you so much Lina, my friend, I am so happy you like this one….your last two images were just so completely inspiring!
Antanas
Very beautiful words
poeticgenius
Instant FAVORITE
your work with words are pure delight
the imagery is plaster by every word i read
i love your poetry
Larasolnishko
Poetry is beauty of the soul. I wonder why this redbubble has so many females poetesses.
Why not many man try to talk and write there experiences in the poetic way. Great poem Teri..well done…
Anthony R. Pla...
I really like this Teri :) Very cool. I like how it flows and the pictures I see when I hear the words… very nice.
solareclips~Ju...
Holy smokes girl, this is really great!!! I love this piece so much, and it’s like a fairy tail for a childrens book!!!! You have such an amazing way with words, and are so gifted in the image department too, have you ever thought of writing a childrens book??? I think you’d be great at it!!!
justwords
Wonderful work, much enjoyed the read, thank you
TeriLee replied
Thank you so much…and for adding me to your watch list :)x
DarKarsean
absolutely, wonderfully, beautiful
beatak
Magnficient
TeriLee replied
Thanks! :)
joedonovan
wow amazing
TeriLee replied
Thank you Joe :)
gretchen .
so lovely TeriLee, the way you present balance, dependence, and appreciation of one another is just divine.
TeriLee replied
Thank you so much Gretchen…i really appreciate that! So glad you enjoyed :)
gemini63
Two lovers that pass each other at sunrise and sunset sad but beautiful at the same time :))
paulakerr
Wow this literally made my heart so prominent in my chest, the joy and the pain were one!