She dances with the sun beams.

The sun motes sway and bend around her, all light does, reflecting off her beautifully pale skin, blue skies make her eyes seem endless like the pure cold blueness of glacial water and red makes her lips seem fuller.
So superior to me in almost every way, yet she lowers herself down to my level by saying “I love you.” No one can make my heart and soul burn with words like she can. No one can make me say those words back and mean it with every part of me.
She makes me want to grow years older in a second in hope that I’d be mature enough to get over all the shit that’s getting in my way and just live as myself, leave behind the school yard putdowns, the condescending parents and “friends” and just be our selves and be comfortable with that.
I want to be able to lie beside her and not feel the sickly hot tendrils of desire sweep through my brain and embed themselves deeply, creeping deeper and deeper into my self control.
She smiles a lot, but it doesn’t often reach her eyes, but when it does it makes me want to be a better person and make the world a better place for her, because this smile tells me the one thing I’ve always wanted to hear better then words ever could.
“You are my world”

  • Lisa  Jewell

    Lisa Jewell

    For one so young you surely do write like a wise soul….I fell head into this piece of love.

  • Steve Strodder... replied

    thank you lisa

  • Steve Strodder... replied

    I didn’t do what you said justice really, it’s just that i was lost for words, thank you so much for such a comment it makes me feel maybe im not as hopeless as i fear

  • Solar Zorra

    Solar Zorra

    This piece melts like warm butter, it spreads and soothes. Your heart is amazing. :) Solar

  • Steve Strodder... replied

    just mine? or hearts in general?
    thanks solar

  • Solar Zorra

    Solar Zorra

    No…......you…....your heart is amazing Cal. :)

  • Steve Strodder... replied

    wow thanks…what makes you say this?

  • Affimation

    Affimation

    This is beautifully written Steve.

  • Steve Strodder... replied

    thank you

  • Shoaib .

    Shoaib .

    i will say you def seem to write very mature for your age… the imagery is crisp and the thoughts are of true emotion… this is awesome

  • JaneSolomon

    JaneSolomon

    Beautiful! xx

  • Steve Strodder... replied

    as I said in the most recent thing I wrote, i love simple but beautiful things…like this comment

  • Kitty Schul
  • Steve Strodder... replied

    !!! thanks so much for the feature, maybe I’m onto something now.

  • SashaC

    SashaC

    I don’t know why you hate this, you really shouldn’t.
    I totally understand where you’re coming from, and you took me back to that place that I love so much. I love this feeling you’ve written about.
    (I really really wish I could say more, but I feel like I’d just screw this up, so I’ll just leave it)

    I just think it’s perfect. You and your girlfriend are very talented and I think i’m in love with both of you (figuratively, of course)

  • Steve Strodder... replied

    again…about the other girl…i hate it cause even though we’d pretty much broken up i still fet like that…

  • SashaC

    SashaC

    Okay, I’m in love with your work, seeing as I don’t know either of you personally…

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