Painful Love II
The follow on from the first Painful Love, as you can see. After deciding she is on the rise, she delves into thought of the relationship….there will be third, a work in progress, should be up soon, hope you enjoy this one though….
Painful Love II belongs to the following groups:
! 100% !, ! Creative Writing & Poetry !, All Around the Styles, All Out Emotion, All Things Poetic, Artistic, Philosophical, Creative, Talented, and Unknown, Freedom In Words & Art, Freedom to Shine, Shameless Self-Promotion and The Healing JourneyI have felt the darkness,
of your correcting palms,
for so long,
I forget to complain,
so long this loving pain.
I offered my eyes of love,
to take the hurt inside,
I just accepted cracking ribs,
was your only way to confide.
Before tomorrow comes,
another fight I failed to start,
more tears to stain this dress,
for my need to see your heart.
Selfish of me,
to change the dragon,
forgetting to use a shield,
but I remember the kiss,
where in, our love was sealed.
I sour in memories,
that kiss my cheek,
that make me weep,
in all the cruelness in your heart,
it once made me feel good,
that you made me weak.
I only want what you stole,
the love that paints your knuckles,
a promise you couldn’t keep,
maybe the man,
that stood by my side,
not the God who burst my mouth,
in a single well aimed leap.
In all fairness,
you had this coming.
You will reap the sorrow,
of the created.
You will feel,
a woman’s scorn,
baby feel the wounds,
so lovingly torn,
by your blessed hand,
by your righteous mind,
now in the morning,
it will be only death you’ll find.
Sleep tonight,
sleep in all your darkness so tight….
sleep well my little lamb,
sleep well my loving man…..
Elizium
An excellent continuation…an absorbing opening line and an intriguing closing line as well…
Again I look forward to the evolution of this work…Great stuff!!
Elizium x
Spraven replied
Thanxz Elizium, there will be one more to go with these, the final one, I think, I don’t want to rip the balls out of it and ruin them. But I’m glad you liked this friend, your comments are very much appreciated Elizium, Thanxz ; )
TearsCall
Excellent writing..full of emotions:)
Spraven replied
Thanxz TearsCall, just seeing it from the womans eyes, I wish I couldn’t though, Thanxz for the fav and the comment ; ) Appreciated!!
Shoaib .
I offered my eyes of love,
to take the hurt inside,
I just accepted cracking ribs,
was your only way to confide.
wow this is raw and awesome !
Spraven replied
Thanxz for reading Shoaib, and thanxz for the comment, I think we share a likeness in raw emotion ; )
Gregory John O...
Strong stuff Spraven… fear the foe you create…
Spraven replied
Especially if it’s a woman scorned ; )
Thanxz Gregory!!
imagineering
(...it was so memorable; that I had to edit it like this..!! and that’s the ultimate compliment.. with your permission. of course..)
You had this coming
Selfish of me,
I have felt the darkness
You had this coming
for so long,
I forget to complain
to change the dragon
that kiss my cheek,
that make me weep,
that you made me weak.
You had this coming
I only want what you stole,
a promise you couldn’t keep,
You had this coming
You will feel,
now in the morning,
by your blessed hand,
You will reap the sorrow,
You had this coming
Sleep tonight,
Sleep in all your darkness so tight
You had this coming
By your righteous mind,
It will be only death you’ll find
You had this coming….
..you have created an irresistible piece of work spraven…!!!! kudos…
Spraven replied
Excellent, that’s great, You should put that up, I really wouldn’t mind!!
Thanxz for your great compliment, I appreciate this ; )
Antek
That writing is Excellent!
Spraven replied
Thanxz Antek, I’m happy you think so ; )
Very much appreciated.
butchart
it once made me feel good,
that you made me weak.
it all comes from right there…... your insights into this dark passion play have me in awe…....... b
Spraven replied
Thanzx again butchart, writting being the woman is hard, being that I’m a manly man, you know, lol