School Yard Rant

satsumagirl
Author: satsumagirl
Word Count: 117
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Carrie, Carrie
Quite contrary
Too many times
She popped her cherry

Shame, shame
Double shame
Can’t recall
Her boyfriend’s name

Twas Friday the 13th
She arose in the night
To a clatter
Ran down the stairs
To see what was the matter

Alas she found and saw
Her precious rep
Shattered and flawed

Oh what will I do?
Oh what will I do?

Too late
Too bad honey
You’ve become the new
Playboy bunny

Took you too long to figure
Should have waited
Till your chest was bigger

Be wary of boys who boast
Find out the fare
Before you rollercoast

Some tickets just ain’t worth payin’
Careful which bed you lay in.

School Yard Rant

I was a little hesitant to submit this piece as my first piece of writing on Red Bubble.

I originally wrote this when I was 14 years old. A girl who rode my school bus told everyone how she had lost her virginity on Friday the 13th.

This is the only poem I’ve ever written that I am able to recite.

  • SoxyFleming

    SoxyFleming, 2 months ago

    I like it. in particular the line you have used to get in the readers…it’s a sad dilemma…whether to be wary or trusty

  • satsumagirl

    satsumagirl, 2 months ago

    Thank you Soxy. Yes these kind of double standards for men and women are very sad. Particularly in the town I grew up.

  • ajax

    ajax, about 1 month ago

    oh so very true so many young ones are confused. I’m afraid there are too many double standards. You’ve put this together very well. {>:

  • Jaybe

    Jaybe, about 1 month ago

    An extremely good ‘cautionary’ tale. Excellent first piece.

  • satsumagirl

    satsumagirl in reply to ajax’s comment, about 1 month ago

    Thank you ajax! Thanks for reading.

  • satsumagirl

    satsumagirl in reply to Jaybe’s comment, about 1 month ago

    Thank you for your comment Jaybe.

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