Trapped

RoughDiamond
Author: RoughDiamond
Word Count: 65
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I entered and I could not leave
you took me and I could not breathe
it spoke of love
and felt of hate
moving along the walls
finding the door
forgotten flowers
abandonned words
who should listen to this
why is there nothing
..............
trapped
..............

Trapped

  • demon

    demon, 11 months ago

    Hmmm thought you said you don’t write RD…this goes so well with the pic…well done..

  • RoughDiamond

    RoughDiamond, 11 months ago

    You think so?

  • demon

    demon, 11 months ago

    Yes I do think…

    sometimes…

  • Lumineux

    Lumineux, 11 months ago

    Very powerful RD, your words really hit home.

  • RoughDiamond

    RoughDiamond, 11 months ago

    thank you Lumi … your comments mean a lot to me.

  • mlgkats

    mlgkats, 11 months ago

    this is really heart felt , well written .i really think some of us feel this way some times
    well done

  • RoughDiamond

    RoughDiamond, 11 months ago

    thanks mig

  • nikspix

    nikspix, 11 months ago

    Nice poetry. Very poignant (SP??)

  • Meach

    Meach, 11 months ago

    Heh Rough you have hidden talents – well they wee hidden until you unleashed this bit of emotion on the the world stage.
    Excellent my friend XXX

  • RoughDiamond

    RoughDiamond, 11 months ago

    Thanks Nix and Meach :) x

  • hpzworkz

    hpzworkz, 10 months ago

    definitely gives the feeling of entrapment, great words

  • RoughDiamond

    RoughDiamond, 10 months ago

    thanks hpz :) x

  • justloveme21

    justloveme21, 9 months ago

    it makes me think and thats what i like….perfect words for a terrible feeling…

  • Alex Moir

    Alex Moir, 9 months ago

    I feel like a little kid exploring a cave or a dark house… scared, just by reading your words. Wonderful. I applaud. Also, I suddenly empathize with the claustrophobic…

  • RoughDiamond

    RoughDiamond in reply to Alex Moir’s comment, 9 months ago

    Thanks Alex … it doesn’t happen often, but every now and then I get a brilliant flash!

  • LMRE

    LMRE, 7 months ago

    beauitful.

  • LMRE

    LMRE, 7 months ago

    makes you feel that you were trapped and by reading that your let free

  • RoughDiamond

    RoughDiamond in reply to LMRE’s comment, 7 months ago

    Thanks Krista :) x

  • deliriousgirl

    deliriousgirl, 6 months ago

    OH JFC! This is totally stunning, I don’t quite know whether to sob or just to fucking melt to the floor in a tiny warm puddle!

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