Surgery of a Soul.

Jessica Tremp, 8 months ago

Paul, wonderful intricate and delicate words put together here…you never seem to lay down your distinct senistivity

Lisadee, 8 months ago

Hmm Been there. Well put Paul as always.

Susan Zohn, 8 months ago

Paul, I can read this one over and over again and get several meanings. It is very deep and very good. I love it.

Melissa Vowell, 8 months ago

:) I know this one

Kristy Lee, 8 months ago

Paul, I love this -

“I’ve been stolen,
Stripped and sold for parts.
I continue on unroadworthy.
Hoping no-one will notice”

Well-worded indeed. That will stick with me.
Love the concept. Fantastic piece of writing.

StacyLee, 8 months ago

Beautiful words Paul.

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

Thank you Jessica.
It’s amazing what you can see through words, I feel a little exposed and vulnerable but am at ease with your summation!
.
Hey there Lisadee, glad you could connect! Thanks!

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

Thank you so very much for your kind and generous comments!
Melissa, SusanZ, MissKristy and StaceyLee! :D

Crokus Label, 8 months ago

Well, this poem sure is worth saving, for I can see that there is much more than what meets the eye here…
I see that there is genuine enough inside of you to have touched me with your poetry…
I love this work… To me, it means much… :)

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

Thank you Crokus, I’m happy there was something here that you could connect to, hopefully in a positive way! :D

Chris White, 8 months ago

I love the metaphor at the centre of this Paul. Aren’t we all just a sum of our parts, forever falling apart and being put together again?

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

That’s the perfect way of describing the reason behind writting this piece Chris. How many times we are dealt a hand that you think that there is no way back form this situatuion… yet we keep coming back for more!
Thanks mate!

LisaG, 8 months ago

Paul, I’ve seen your smile, your spirit and believe me this is genuine…I’ve heard your voice caress the lyrics of your heart and mind, believe me this is genuine….I’ve seen your eye take beauty…believe me this is genuine..

Something things – the essence of an individual is worth keeping…

This poem is wonderfully evoking….

micmac, 8 months ago

I think words are the tiny little instruments and that you use them with such care not only for you but to repair others souls as well…..Thank you P.L.V.

Hermosa Lee Kwan, 8 months ago

amazing words,paul

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

LisaG you have a beautiful way of expressing what you see and feel.
Thank you for making me feel so uplifted spiritually! :D
Micmac, you too have a generosity that i truly admire!
Hermosa, thank you kindly and thanks too for the wonderful bubblemails!! :D

Mark German, 8 months ago

Some things just aren’t worth saving

And somethings, are worth far more then can be priced.
Beautiful soul-work, mate.

marieancolie, 8 months ago

I resume my first feeling there , Behind the wolf is the lamb.
I may not express myself correctly, but as some friends have already said,
I feel sensitivity and your soul is as a musical instrument.
It has to be listened and not kept in a box or a cupboard..
Today it’s playing a soft piece of life.

Michael Douglass, 8 months ago

strong links to the metaphor, well done plv. like how you’ve achieved such sensitivity while comparing yourself to a car!

Crokus Label, 8 months ago

Sure was in a positive way Paul Louis… :)

googa, 8 months ago

This is just F###### BRILLIANT!! well done mate, well done !

alistair mcbride, 8 months ago

Well done Paul.

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

Wow, thanks guys, I’m amazed at your kind and thoughtful comments!
I will be honest and tell you guys a secret (shhhh, don’t tell everyone! ;p! ) most of you have all so eloquently pointed out that you see my inner self coming through in my words and you are right. I draw alot from lifes experiences (as most of us would) but I’ve got to tell you the dilema I have when it comes to posting a piece of writing is almost comical! I’ll type in the text, the extract, the description, the tags and let the mouse hover over the enter button… and there it will wait. I sometimes delete everything fearing what will be thought of me only to come back the next day and go throught the process again! if you are laughing I’m laughing along with you! Posted images are easier, they reflect my artistic drive but perhaps not so much of my hidden soul / persona. I guess because I see words as a reflection of my true inner self, I’m kind of scared of letting you in. I’m sure you know what I mean.
Sorry for blabbering.
Peace, love and hugs to you all!
Thanks heaps to Mark, Marieancolie, stranger street, Crokus and Googa! :D

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

Thank you kindly Alistair! :D

LostBoy1, 8 months ago

Sounds like a Rat-Rod of a poem!

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

Now there’s a language I’m yet to understand!!
I’m hoping Rat-Rod is a good thing LostBoy1? !! LOL!
Thanks mate!

Helene Kippert, 8 months ago

Wonderful poem Paul – I really like it!

Emma Anderson, 8 months ago

This is brilliant Paul, but it makes me sad to think a person could feel empty and broken, of course that’s my interpretation.

LostBoy1, 8 months ago

You betcha!...Rat-Rods are Hot rods put together with bits and pieces from anything that gets the job done…(tractor parts-old aircraft parts)...

some don`t even look road worthy (nor are they)...but people aren`t afraid to use them…they look rough and shag-nasty…rust and primer abound…(bullet holes are highly prized)

A Rat-Rod can be built on the cheap…and turn more heads than some…$50 thousand dollar trailer queen…old skool is COOL!!!

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

Thank you so very much Helene and Alterego!
Broken, battered, bruised, all emotionally speaking.

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

Now, that’s something i gotta see! A Rat-Rod with tractor parts selling for $50,000 I’m impressed!! I’d love to tear up Sydney Rd in one of those! hehehe!
Thanks for wording me up LostBoy1!

Antoine Dagobert, 8 months ago

Beautiful words Paul!

AndyCampbell, 8 months ago

and some things are worht saving, thanks Paul enjoyed this

Catalin Soare, 8 months ago

So sad my friend and yet so powerfull! You are a winner…remember this when you are down for a moment!!!!!!!!!!

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

Thank you so much for your kindness! Antoine, Andy and Catalin! :D

Julie Langford, 8 months ago

Wonderful words Paul. Very thought inspiring

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

Thank you kindly Julie! :D

Melody, 8 months ago

whoa…..Paul….Im speechless!

alexa70, 8 months ago

This is Beautiful Paul, you have an amazing way with words, thanks for writing from within your soul, it is truly beautiful ; )

Steve Axford, 8 months ago

Perfect composition, great use of colour.
Sounds like you need to do your own rebuilding, lots of good parts there . To hell with the mechanic, he’ll just build you like all the other cars. Make yourself a rat-rod

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

Thank you for taking the time to stop by and comment! I’m deeply touched!
Melody and alexa70! :D

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

That’s the best piece of advice i believe I’ve ever recieved!! LOL!
Good on ya Steve! Thanks for stopping by! :D

LittleHelen, 8 months ago

In my car yard
You would be a classic
I would tend to you
With my oil can
Hold your downcast face in my hands
Talk to you
Tell you how beautiful I think you are
Will you to peel back the rust
You cover yourself with
And you would…
And the rest of the world would see
What I have always known
That inside…
You fucking rev!
You light up the world
You light up me.

Love xx ;)

imageworld, 8 months ago

A great liteary work, sum’s up the day to day exsitence of modern life, penned really well

PhotogeniquE IPA, 8 months ago

briliant word. such feeling

PS – you are worth saving!

PhotogeniquE IPA, 8 months ago

opps – words

Brett Foster, 8 months ago

Mate! Mate….Mate!
So cool.

ps. These days I’ve got a spare tyre if you need one.

RachJayn, 8 months ago

Wow I like this alot, great depth… having gone through some difficulties recently I have had to remind myself that just because i don’t feel like I used to doesn’t mean I am not back to “normal” as though somehow I am “abnormal”... some normals just change. This is a new normal. I can relate to the feelings that you have expressed. thank you>

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

LittleHelen, I’m blown away!
My jaw has hit the floor and I’m not picking it up!
You are a true gem and I treasure your heartfelt words so tenderly! :D
Thanks so very much to photogenique, imageworld, PhotoBloke (hey Brett, thanks for the spare tyre mate but I’ve got a few of my own! LOL!! ;p) and RachJayn (you make a great statement here and I truely understand and appreciate your words) :D

WolfAtLarge, 8 months ago

I sung this to the tune of “King of the Road” and was cheered immensely

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

LOL!!
Never thought of doing that mate!! Good on ya WolfAtLarge! :D

Jodi Webb, 8 months ago

They say a picture paints a thousand words, but this paints such a deep and intrinsic picture. PLV, to express yourself like this is truly wonderful, and I’m so glad you pushed the submit button! Thank you for sharing your soul! It’s a beautiful one.

Danny, 8 months ago

This is quite good Paul
simple but really effective
If it’s true
It’s very sad

Ruben Flanagan..., 8 months ago

great words to ponder, wonderfully writen

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

Thank you for your kind and generous words Jodi, Danny and Ruben! :D

banditart, 8 months ago

lap it up buddy thats life get used to it
thx fa sharing your a legend

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

Spot on Banditart. Never wanted to get used to it but as you said, we’ve got no choice!
Not sure about my legend status mate but if ever i get to circumnavigate the globe on the back of my art I promise to stop by your place and help you build the biggest, nastiest and nosiest Rat-Rod you’ve ever seen! Even LostBoy1 will be impressed! :D

cdwork, 8 months ago

Sensitive thought invoking words

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

Thank you cdwork! :D

SweetButterfly624, 8 months ago

I like the poem, you can feel the poem its said sadness,worry,disappiont too.

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

Thank you so very much SweetButterfly624! :D

Jewd, 8 months ago

Lost for words…Just feeling yours with tenderness…in gratitude..jewd x

mick8585, 8 months ago

Like this Paul. I share the experience. Where did you put the canary ?

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

Jewd, your express yourself so beautifully! Thank you.

Hello mick8585, Ha! Somehow that old model got picked up remodelled and made roadworthy. The test run went fine and now the long term planning is in action! :D

loramae, 8 months ago

I can only shake my head and say that you might as well have went through the last bit of my time…with me…Unbelievably went straight to my heart…thank you.

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

I understand Loramae, Thank you kindly! :D

N8TURESGRAFFITI, 8 months ago

I think everything is worth saving if they so choose to believe! Excellent wording but youre too bright not to have faith to know especially a soul such as yours is worth saving!

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

What a wonderful thing to say! Put a big smile on my face! Thanks so much N8TURESGRAFFITI! :D

Carmen Cilliers, 8 months ago

Well, this is one of those things that is worth saving! Beautiful poem.

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

Thank you so very kindly Carmen! :D

Trish Cooper, 8 months ago

I swear hon god must have decided that an angel on earth would be a good thing
for us…......you inspire, and compassionately relate to soooo many! love ya! Trish

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

Oh Trish!
That is much to kind of a gesture!! blush
Angel? LOL! Not likely!
Trish, if i can make one person smile or inspire someone to want to be creative, then I’ve succeeded in finding happiness for that day.

HaRaKiRi, 8 months ago

I understand just what you are saying here

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

Thank you kindly HaRaKiRi! :D

sweetmiseryxx, 8 months ago

I just wanna reach out to this lost soul and let them know I’ve felt this way too
the last line made my jaw drop.
very touching, I truly felt this one.
mission accomplished, congrats.

xo

Paul Louis Vil..., 8 months ago

Thank you so much for your very kind and generous comment sweetmiseryxx! :D

missalyshachri..., 7 months ago

I love this one.
:)
youve got such a talent

Paul Louis Vil..., 7 months ago

Thank you so much missalyshachristine! :D

binjy, 7 months ago

nods quietly :)

Paul Louis Vil..., 7 months ago

Thanks you loudly! :D

gabryshak, 7 months ago

wow ~ love the imagery created by being sold for parts and the spirit mechanic ~ so visionary

Paul Louis Vil..., 7 months ago

You are very kind! Thank you gabryshak! :D

Wendy Slee KMA, 7 months ago

very well written and profound…..
love the metaphor…

Paul Louis Vil..., 7 months ago

Thanks so much Wendy! :D

Suzanne German, 7 months ago

hey Doc – this is lovely!

suzanne x

Paul Louis Vil..., 7 months ago

LOL!
Thanks Suzanne! :D

Anne van Alkemade, 6 months ago

When it comes to the soul
it’s always worth saving
even for that faintest breath
of you.

I like the mechanic analogy and I can see why this piece got such a huge response PL. It’s crying out for something. I won’t say salvation as I’m not that way inclined at all but maybe one of those floaty ring things. (sorry, not very poetic, it’s late and I can’t think what the buggers are called).

:o)

Back to the mechanic – I can see him in his white greasy overalls, wings strapped back out of the way, scratching his head and saying he’d have to send away for the parts. LOL.

Paul Louis Vil..., 6 months ago

That’s a wonderful comment Anne, thank you for being so open and expressive! :D

Anne van Alkemade, 6 months ago

You’re welcome PLV. By the way, the floaty ring thing I believe is called a Life Buoy! (titter)

Leon Walker, 6 months ago

I really like this piece. Thank you.

Paul Louis Vil..., 6 months ago

LOL!! Thank you so very kindly Anne and lawalker! D

wrabbit, 5 months ago

Powerful and resonant!

Paul Louis Vil..., 5 months ago

Thank you kindly wrabbit! :D

Russell Holder, 5 months ago

You make yourself out to be a run of the mill ‘Valiant,’ with push-button controls but you’re a “46” Boat-tailed Roadster. A great analogy to the human condition though… as most of us feel the same way. Write on, Paul, and dare not to hit the delete… as you can’t share your chrome bumpers or dents in the hub-caps with us if you do!

Paul Louis Vil..., 5 months ago

LOL! What a fantastic comment! Now, just to be honest I googled a “46 Boat Tailed Roadster” just to find out exactly what it was and wow…. I’m very much liking that comparison!! Thanks so very much Russell! :D

maka1967, 5 months ago

beautiful work. thought-provoking.

Paul Louis Vil..., 5 months ago

Thank you very kindly maka1967! :D

alex5, 5 months ago

Raw and intense no WD40 to your repair its the sandpaper truth.

Paul Louis Vil..., 5 months ago

Wow, well put! Thanks Alexander Art! :D

bloodpoet13, 5 months ago

beautiful words. i loved this. this was a well put poem. i loved it. i really connected with it.

Paul Louis Vil..., 5 months ago

That’s very kind of you, thanks bloodpoet13! :D

Rachael Hope, 3 months ago

This is so real! I love it. I felt it the whole way through. thanks so much for sharing this!

Metamorphosis, 2 months ago

Paul, the spirit mechanic upon seeing your soul will not despair… might say it needs a ‘touch up’ but it still shines true… very brilliantly written and heart touching…

Paul Louis Vil..., 2 months ago

Thank you very kindly Rachael and Metamorphosis (it was a pleasure to meet you at the Writers Meet!! :D) !

Jazzyjane, 2 months ago

Like the line of a song “he sang as if he knew me…” powerful stuff

Paul Louis Vil..., 2 months ago

Thank you kindly Jazzyjane! :D

Nicole Ryan, about 1 month ago

ripped apart a little ..

this is great !