Caramel
inspired by derek shockey’s incredible the black rider – a portrait of tom waits that got under my skin.
Caramel belongs to the following groups:
Graphic Scratch, Melbourne & Victoria, Short stories - Spherical Scriptings and WMGA dark figure cut through the humid steam of the summer night, stealing across the wet street in pin-sharp stilettos.
Heat permeated the brick walls of the city and the cobbled stones of the alleyways.
The sky melted and dripped in inky drops down the surface of the smoking moon into pools in the gutters.
The air was thick with whispers of restless heartbeats, aching skin and notes bleeding malted whiskey sounds.
Her blue-black hair shimmered under the street lights, a glittery waist-coat that covered her shoulders in a silken charcoal sheath to her hipbones.
Her eyes downcast, she sashayed in her stilettos around stinking dumpsters, over steam grates in the sidewalk, under ladders that black cats rubbed their spines against for the burning comfort and pleasure.
Swollen clouds peeled away from the moon and spears of quartz light fell across her path, her eyes flashing violet under fringes of midnight lashes.
She faltered, stiletto’s silenced, her skin of snow shrinking from the sudden shafts of metallic light.
She tilted her ear to the sky studded with silver scars and waited to feel the sticky trendrils and sugary vines of musical tethers wind and bind again around her wrists and ankles.
She’d already been fed.
Five times over in fact.
Her thighs were still tingling.
Afterwards, exhausted, she had fallen into a slumber of lascivious dreams, of circling ravens and ripe storms when the treacle streams of caramel wrapped her limbs in honeyed notes from his pied pipe of toffee and seedy sweetness.
Prowling beasts stirred, lionesses circled and wolves howled at the moon.
The magnetism of her calves bent the moonlight out of shape as she cut through the damp shadows.
She threw her curtain of blackcurrant hair over her shoulder, snarled her grape-glossed lips and pierced each beckoning butterscotch note with the staccato rhythm of her sharp heels.
She was hungry.
She had been woken.
She had a renewed sweet tooth.
And then suddenly around a corner, there he was; candy on a crate under a street light.
Plumes of blue smoke spiralled from his lips in thick feathery ribbons.
The pipe glittered in the case by his feet, the last of his lingering honeyed notes binding her to his fingertips.
The veins in her wrists ached.
He wiped his sweat on his arm sleeve.
She licked her lips tasting sweetness and salt.
He sucked hard on his cigarette.
She bit her lip at the sight of his Adam’s apple, sliding under the pale milky skin of his throat like a sweet boiled candy.
She dug her nails into her thighs, breathing hard as she waited for the damp clouds to cover the sky.
Her eyes caught amethyst in the dying moonlight.
Her tongue swelled in anticipation.
He threw his cigarette butt into the gutter and reached for his pied pipe.
He shook with expectation, his spine prickling with pins and burrs.
He lifted the flute to his lips, closed his eyes and blew a web of honeyed caramel into the inky night.
copyright © 2008, Holly Ringland.
PJ Ryan
oh my caramel malted milkshake !!
your luscious words quench the perfect thirst
brilliant holly !!
xx
Holly Ringland replied
...and i know how much you love your caramel malted milkshakes! ooooh nix, thank you for this delicious comment, i’m all tingly and happy that you enjoyed the read xx
jcmontgomery
I never was one for caramel. But I think…no, I know, I’ve been converted because if this is what it looks like, tastes like, reads like, I have been denying myself an exotic pleasure beyond description. Thank you for awakening me to this new sensation. Yummy!
Holly Ringland replied
goodness, a conversion!
hmmm, i know the magnitude of what this is asking, but jo next time you’re going for your vanilla latte hit, maybe you should feed your inner femme fatale and order caramel. and maybe throw a pair of stilettos on for good measure – you never know when your black rider might be around the corner with his pipe :)
thank you for your feedback, jc – i do so value your responses to my work.
shaktipat
‘notes bleeding malted whiskey sounds’ – pardon my terminology but that sh*t is HOT girl!!
Holly Ringland replied
sister miss, i love your terminology! thank you for making me smile and for reading my words.
kalaryder
“The sky melted and dripped in ink drops down the surface of the smoky moon into pools in the gutters.” The imagery in this phrase and throughout the entire writing is outstanding.
Holly Ringland replied
thank you so very much for your response to this piece kr, the blue and sultry tones of derek’s work spun dark sugar in my head and thankfully, my muse decided to co-operate when i boiled the caramel down into words. i really appreciate you reading and leaving your feedback behind. thank you.
markgb
Just brilliant!
Holly Ringland replied
thanks so much mark! i’m genuinely so happy you enjoyed the read. it was my first piece motivated by pulp noir and i’d been blown away by derek’s ‘the black rider’ a while ago so when i saw it was part of the group’s artwork, i kind of sat back and just watched as the candy man went to work in my imagination :)
Matthew Dalton
Wow Holly.
And before my eyes there was a seedy back street on an inky black night, a Femme fatale and the blues.
Wonderful writing.
Holly Ringland replied
hey matthew. thank you so much – that’s always what a writer wants to hear isn’t it? that what was before my eyes when i was writing transcended to the scene in front of yours as you read. it felt really great (thanks for the prompt pulp noir!) to stretch my writing into different shades of darkness and light and loved the darkness i could play off between ms femme fatale and the black pied piper :) i’m so glad you enjoyed the read.
KMFalcon
Oh so sensual. He does look like a honey, and your words…luscious. Thoroughly enjoyable read.
Holly Ringland replied
oh but doesn’t he? after i stared at derek’s portrait of tom waits for a while, all things sweet, seedy and honey filled my head and the story kind of just poured out of my fingertips in sticky sugary streams. thanks so much for reading and leaving such positive feedback behind. i really appreciate it.
Paul Rees-Jones
Wow…I read three times…whew…excellent.
Holly Ringland replied
hi paul. sheesh, three times? you must have had a tooth ache afterwards! thanks for reading and for your comment, i’m so pleased you enjoyed the read the first time, it warranted two more returns :)
Shanina Conway
Fantastic read, I had to go back and savour the words again;)
Holly Ringland replied
thank you very much shanina, i felt like a bit of a dessert glutton writing this! i’m really glad you enjoyed it :)
mstrace
Fabulous, dreamy, succulent piece of thickly sensual writing. I was caught up in it, like reading words that were pouring down my throat and filling my gullet with the best culinary dessert this bit of pulp could offer.
savoring
savoring
savoring
Holly Ringland replied
hello beautiful woman, thank you for this comment – you’ve made me feel like a chef sitting back and seeing their work for the first time through someone else’s palate! i’m so pleased you enjoyed this, and always appreciate and value your responses so so much. thank you trace x
Holly Ringland
thank you, keiran. the red and scarlet and blood velvet blooms are beautiful today.
Luke Downes
I think Tom Waits would approve…it’s that good…
Holly Ringland replied
luke, you’re too kind. thank you so much.
yt sumner
Damn fine film noir sashay you have going here, Holly. She is a greedy little thing indeed. In fact I think you encapsulated Greed, Gluttony and Lust all in the one character here. Saucy little minx, isn’t she?
Holly Ringland replied
you made me laugh, saucy little minx indeed. and clearly confused. can’t get her sins straight… she wants them all i s’pose. greedy little vixen. thanks yas, this was a lovely little treat to start off my day.