mariposa
the words… from mariposa
i hope this piece is the beginning of something that i can go back to later… prompted by flash fiction’s latest challenge, that i interpreted as being full of desperation, needing to say something and only having an envelope and a splash of ink to get the words out.
mariposa belongs to the following groups:
Flash Fiction, Graphic Scratch and WMGMariposa,
I bet no-one’s called you that since we lived in our shack by the sea with olive trees and peeling green shutters; when you twirled fire, I painted the sun and all we needed was lemons, salt, and Jose Cuervo.
I wouldn’t miss your launch.
Where was he today?
I don’t care about him.
Here I am.
Does he know you howl at quarter moons? Does he know you drew constellations in black ink on my skin? Do you remember us… cocooned in our chrysalis of tangled salty dreams and coffee-creamed skin?
Your words betray you, my love. Why is your book full of love letters to a girl who wears my middle name and has a scar along her jawline, just like me?
I know that when you come out to your car, you’ll search for this scrap of paper under your windscreen wipers. You’ll hate yourself for it but that’s what you’ll do.
Here I am.
copyright © 2008, Holly Ringland.
lianne
I left my longer comment on the image Holly but will say I love the fiction as well as the concept developed there. Brilliant work here – a captivating vignette. Good luck on the challenge!
Holly Ringland replied
lianne, you left two comments! goodness me, what you do to my spirit and heart, thank you so much. your encouragement is completely addictive xx
Yasemin Sumner
this is just stunning. the words themselves are so strong but the concept of it being a tangible piece makes the character and her pain so real I wish I could hug her. x
Holly Ringland replied
oh yas, this means everything… thank you so much.
Jessica Tremp
i’m spellbound and i want to know more…everything x
Holly Ringland replied
thank you jess… stay with me… the story’s brewing… x
mstrace
gorgeous writing, this is an AH-MAYZING piece!
Holly Ringland replied
i so love the way you do that… i always find myself reading your comments out loud trace, exactly as you mean them to sound and i am never without a smile as i do so. thank you for reading.
Schez id
Ah. Lovely.So descriptive. So evocative.
As a matter of interest why is this piece called Mariposa? ..
Holly Ringland replied
mariposa is the spanish word for butterfly...
thank you dearly for your response to my work.
ShadowDancer
i love the soft vulnerability of your words here, it paints a picture in my mind of activities, people, movement, with only your words of emotions… bravo
Holly Ringland replied
well, goodness, thank you so much shadow. soft vulnerability... i really like that because i guess the last place the narration wants to admit it’s coming from is vulnerability… but that’s the thing about wearing armour. you never want to expose the chinks :) thank you for reading and commenting. i curtsey deeply in response to your lovely feeback.
dearhonestyx
oh my gosh.
this is absolutley gorgeous.
Holly Ringland replied
hello miss jamie, thank you so much. i’m delighted you enjoyed my work.
Blueriddle8
you really drew me in, left with wanting to know more. splendid writing-beautiful analogies..
Holly Ringland
thank you blue, i’m humbled by your response to my work. is there anything more encouraging that knowing something you’ve created has drawn someone else into and left them wanting to take a look around and explore? thanks so much for reading.
PJ Ryan
Holly, this is so brilliant and moreish and soooo strong !! xx
Holly Ringland replied
eeeeeeeeek! you’re back! thank you for the beautiful bmail… i hope you’ve had an absolute ball my love. i’ve missed you so much. thank you for feeling this piece and loving this piece and just being you in general, really xxxx
PJ Ryan
you rock my world xx
Rachael Toia
This is eligant, with a hint of seduction.
To be honest, I read it twice to make sure I got the full effect :)
Lovely.
Katewah
Looking forward to getting some more of this – tops piece.