I will not wait at the window for my father.
He has forgotten to visit us
and tomorrow there will be another
sad
sorry
excuse
that is not a reason,
that is only an excuse.
I will not wait in the kitchen for my lover,
for unpredicted bad traffic to clear.
The same bad traffic as every day,
at this time,
like last time.
That is the reason.
Or was it an excuse?
I will not wait to make the same mistakes,
or to learn from my old mistakes,
because with some careful thought
this
time
will
be
different.
There’s no excuse
Angi Baker
Oh I love this Jo, excellent job…~
Marion Cullen
Very insightful.
Jason Moses
I needn’t ask if it’s “fact” or “fiction” because it doesn’t matter – it still rings true. The author deserves much better than bad traffic. =)
Paula Delley
Lovely… :)
Mummified
will ensure I have medicinal chocolate on hand when I see you next….
MissKristy
Geez…the emotion is so tangible..i could feel the disappointment..the doubts, the frustration, everything.
I hope you are pleasantly suprised soon.
WarOfTheRoses
ha nice. learning from mistakes is boring though, who does that :-P
Reiana
very neat, great structure
Paul Vanzella
wow – love the rhythm of tis piece… great words!
marcusjohn
Moving, encouraging, poignant, all of the above. It’s never nice to read others are feeling down and disappointment.. Don’t know you Jo but I hope your disappointments turn, keep believing.. Fantastic writing :)
Tony Elliott
Jo, you never fear to reveal your mind and you do it wonderfully. I agree with you too. Once bitten should never be twice shy.
The structure also gives the piece the tempo it deserves.
Bravo.
Lisa Defazio
Yep yep yep is all i can say.
Danielle Prowse
I can SO relate to this!! love it!!
bearhat
yeah, you tell them. no more excuses.
you have a rhythm that is powerful.
Gordon Merrick...
I don’t know why, but I felt like I heard Iris Dement singing it to me, and to me that’s about as beautiful as it gets.
red addiction
This is so sad and personal. Nicely put!
LocoCow
I too have been there… Hate FCKN excuses…
Shanna S.
Excuses, excuses the world is full of them it seems. Anyway I can relate to what you wrote here, it was really beautiful and it touched something deep in my soul. Im sure plenty of people can relate in one way or another.
PJ Ryan
well written Jo
don’t wait for anyone :)
(unless they’re worth it lol)
lolowe
Wow, I definitely feel with this piece. No more waiting, no more believing…I really like this.