Histories
A unpoetic, badly written, awkward piece of poetry – a suitable style for a suitably unpoetic existance
Documenting, discovering, uncovering, analysing, realising, criticising, hoping
She held my hand
She kissed my skin
She wanted to be with me forever
She loved me
and I hated her
and how she was a better person than me
sometimes it’s too late to learn
He yanked my hair out
He burned my back
He rubbed me against blood stained carpet
He loved me
and I hated me
and I kept on going back
sometimes it takes a long time to learn
She cooked my meals
She bathed my wounds
She reminded me of my mother more and more
She loved me
and I hated her love
and I hated what she reminded me of
sometimes learning is inevitable
He knew me intimately
He shared his world
He made the most of every moment
He loved me
and I pitied him
and we wanted different things in life
sometimes learning hurts
He forgets me
He walks away
He forgets that ‘we’ are special
He loves me
and I love him
and I stay
will I ever learn?
Jeff Burns
I think it is very well done. No rules in Poetry!!!
Very well done Jo
Faizan Qureshi
You know… it sounds more like a song!
Lisa Jewell
Jo, I think this is written very well….
This gives such huge insight into you…..
The learning process of the heart is tough to learn…..
Michael Alesich
Very poetic, well written piece.
It’s raw and touching.
Melissa Vowell
Did what I think inspire this inspire it? Your existence is much more than poetic Jo. You are much more than poetic xx
Jo O'Brien
Melissa, I’m still staying if you’re implying what I think you’re implying
Charlie
Deep and raw Jo…very poetic and well written! Life’s leesons are painful and baffleing at times. Peace my friend!!
LostBoy1
It feels like it flowed out of you with very little resistance…it is an excellent piece Jo.
Proud
Paul Vanzella
massive piece of prose Jo – compelling!
Darryl A
Lots of life-learning in so few words. Amazing.
You dish out wisdom like potato salad.
MissKristy
Dear Jo, this is raw and real and beautiful.
For me..one word resonates most in your description, ‘Hoping’..
keep hoping…
love to you xox
loramae
I have asked myself the “learn” question more times than I want to admit…hugs to you…poignant write.
Christina Norwood
Being human – hoping, learning. Take care.
RichardV
Very ‘strong and deep’ . Nice work Jo.
Suzanne German
Jo – what a wildly deep piece you’ve composed here! This (for me) is the best thing I have seen your name beside – honeslty – (ok my preference for writing comes out here)...but gee woman -
YOU CAN WRITE!
love it – more please!
Suzanne
Suzanne German
...actually…love to see some in our group…please?!
cheers
SG
brummieboy
Very powerfully written …....
transmute
What is it about love that causes us to torture ourselves? We always grab the rose by thorns
taraa
very raw, very powerful
wasy35
i know some of these relationships, tough.