When your lighter runs out of fluid, staring into space
(flick) grinding skin against metal that won’t…
react. You recall an easy spark. Sudden heat.
You laugh at what reminds you… instruments of heart strings.
Do you remember me?
There’s a sudden concern
realizing all that excites is the chance to…
(tell) Reveal sweets enticing me
to ears that can’t hear… sensation-less fingers
explore an outline, inside this apparent desert…
pouring rain.
What if you said…
Mattering can be so…
(light) translucent
aside the abundance of your
silent declarations. What I choose not to
hear. Loud as bombs.
Maybe we might be…
Stronger. Your sharp eyes see…
steps (away) back to the
understanding there’s…
(more.) More than the idea of
me. More than clock ticks and…
… what if’s.
Lisa Jewell
the heart strings that spark a fire,
I’m swooning
the what if’s should be sealed away for all time in my humble opinion.
beautiful writing, Gretchen x x x
gretchen . replied
i am beaming at your reaction and understanding beautiful Lisa… how truly right you are… thank you for feeling me sister girl… such a unique, warm feel you always bring… x o x o
butchart
call me a fool… i choose fire… what ifs are moments we waste… and maybes too often are should bes…....... love your style….....b
gretchen . replied
i love your insights! ... fire remains my attraction as well … i never shy from impulse … too much to gain! xox
ArcadiaTempest
Ohh me thinks I choose fire too often….and the singes prove this. I am trying to temper my reactive impulses to let my emotions spark for it has repercussion me thinks that if I had looked more deeply at what is me and will that be nourished in the flame or get a little crispy ;) .... some frying pans hold their heat much longer than others…. XXX Love this….
gretchen . replied
lol, i am definitely a little crispy ;) ... your thought on frying pans is brilliant … how i adore your reactions to the sense i try to make of what surrounds … thank you beautiful. xox
Normaje
Your wordings I do love…...Keep it uo….....Cheers
gretchen . replied
your words always leave me in smiles :-) thank you normaje! xox
exposedbutloved
“What If” is my most hated combination of words in the english language.. its is too haunting and terrifing for me to handle
gretchen . replied
i agree… it’s right next to ‘should’ ... i think that’s the worst word ever … xox
Trenchtownrock
You are such a terrific writer that always take me into your world..truly good work.
gretchen . replied
i love that you always come along! thank you my friend, i find such pleasure in the trips i take within your words as well. xox
Wordslinger
Gretchen, friggin’ terrific. I really admire the way you put words together so dramatically.
gretchen . replied
what a wonderful thing to say… people like your gorgeous self that feel the words i choose and appreciate the way i build them are the best part about writing … thank you so much. xox
exposedbutloved
noooo hope is the worst individual word i think =P
Cassidy JK (Ra...
This is masterful writing!
Luke Brannon
I like the disjointed nature of this. The asides create a manic feeling for me, an intense contention.
Rhenastarr
Brilliant word mastery.
hsien-ku 26 days ago
oh! – What I choose not to hear. Loud as bombs.
i know how that song goes. but, nevertheless, i would choose the fire every time! I have the scars to prove it :) because nothing reminds you that you’re alive like burning – and what is love anyway if it doesn’t involve the flames?
JaneSolomon 26 days ago
hate ‘what ifs’ and ‘maybes’ ..... love this…. it lit my fire. xx
roza50 15 days ago
What if’s never got me anywhere, but this poem is food foor thought. Nice one, Roza50