There's a Dalmatian in my Lunchbox
A short poem just for kids – would love to turn it into a picture book one day
Thank you so much for all the feedback – I am feeling very humble and very touched so many of you have taken the time to both read and comment – Thank you!
Now available as a poster
There's a Dalmatian in my Lunchbox belongs to the following groups:
All Things Poetic, Artistic, Philosophical, Art and Stories Made For Children, Childhood, Humour Captured, Our K9 Friend 1 image a day (Dogs only), Pets Are Us ~ 2 per day, The Word Tree and Up & Coming WritersThere’s a dalmatian in my lunchbox
And he’s got me hopping mad
Cos when I checked this morning
There was only bread and jam!
He’s squashed my nice banana
And melted all my cheese
He’s licked up all my yoghurt
And my biscuits now have fleas!
Now he’s sitting there grinning
Just wagging his white tail
Doesn’t he know he’s a sandwich thief
Who should go straight to jail?
He doesn’t seem to understand
This is no place for a dog
Amongst my cheese and yoghurt
And Mum’s homemade honey log!
I’m so perplexed, I don’t know how
There suddenly came to be
A dalmatian in my lunchbox
Smiling up at me!
Karin Taylor
hahaaaa!
what a great light-hearted read!!!
i really enjoyed this Michelle!!
Michelle Whennan replied
I enjoyed writing it – glad it gave you a smile
Anne van Alkemade
hahahha – wow, of the Dalmation hadn’t eaten it, your lunch would have been awesome.
Great poem. Love it. Maybe there’s a Redbubble artist somewhere who would love to illustrate it for a poster!!!!
Michelle Whennan replied
Thank you Anne – glad you enjoyed it. Might have to find myself an artist or try some things out myself
MissKristy
I plan on reading this aloud to my kelpie…no doubt she will love it and create much madness as a loving reminder also :)
Michelle Whennan replied
I hope your kelpie loves it as much as my kids did! My dalmatian is insensed and doesn’t find it amusing at all whereas my Rottweiler thinks it’s hilarious!
aglaia b
so cute, it’s srceaming for a short childrens book! ;-) xox
Michelle Whennan replied
I think so too Aglaia – I feel a follow up in the works
jemimalovesbigted
very sweet indeed =D
Michelle Whennan replied
Glad you liked it
hilarydougill
wonderfully well written, and so very visual, it would be wonderful for a child’s story book., because unless it is illustrated it must be VERY visual, as this is. well done. hugs
Michelle Whennan replied
Thank you Hilary – I had a lot of fun writing it and would very much like to convert it – fingers crossed
roybarry
Absolute perfection-seriously, this has got “hit” all over it.
You need an illustrator!
Michelle Whennan replied
Thank you Roy – I am starting to feel very humbled by all this feedback
Natella2020
I smiled from the first verse, and my smile became more pronounced all the way to the end. This is so delightful and funny. Excellent work.
Michelle Whennan replied
I am so glad you enjoyed it Natella
Sherrianne Talon
Just wonderful! I agree.. get an illustrator and get this published!
Michelle Whennan replied
Thank you Sherri – I will have to see what I can do.
georgiegirl
ha ha ha !!!! Brilliantly written!!!
Michelle Whennan replied
Glad you like it – thanks for your comments
David Stuart
Made me smile, lovely poem.
Michelle Whennan replied
Thanks David, glad you liked it
Karen Cougan
classic….....let me know when the book is out
xkc
Michelle Whennan replied
A signed copy coming your way!! I will have to make some enquiries and try and get ot off the ground
Virginia McGowan
oooh this is just brlliant! Michelle, Jakk01 has a Dalmation she takes pics and also paints, I paint too, but I don’t have any Dalmations to draw from actually she has some on here .
Michelle Whennan replied
Thanks ginnymac – I will definitely have a look at her work
Virginia McGowan
got the name a bit wrong jakkio
Jakki“
Karen Cougan
to get books happening
try
www.lulu.com
www.blurb.com
see how you go
xkc
Michelle Whennan replied
Karen -You’re wonderful! Will check them out – wasn’t sure what the next step would be!
Jakki O
What a great verse!
Perfectly matching the Dalmatian personality me thinks :)
I love “just wagging his white tail” and the last line “Smiling up at me!”
That’s exactly what my Dalî does :D
Jak
Michelle Whennan replied
Thanks Jak – my Dalmatian is the same I must admit – they just grin through every naughty adventure! Looking forward to having a look at your work. :o)
Karirose
What an absolutely fun read! Well done. :)
Michelle Whennan replied
Thanks Karirose glad you enjoyed it
Evelyn Howard
I can picture the poor dalmatian looking up feeling really really sorry for something he did (maybe didn’t) do!
Fun read. Thanks.
Michelle Whennan replied
Thanks Evelyn – dalmatians ALWAYS have that look on their faces! Glad you enjoyed it
elle2231
very creative
Michelle Whennan replied
Thanks Elle
KEITH R. WILL...
these are the type of poems my mother would write so beautiful
Michelle Whennan replied
I am so glad I could take you back to something pleasant – glad you liked it
Tania Rose
A great story book for children. It’s so vivid in it’s imagery
Michelle Whennan replied
Thanks Tania – glad you liked it
krafty
Hilarious..I loved this..it certainly brought a smile to my face..well written..very well done.
Michelle Whennan replied
Thank you Cynthia
Wayne Leon Lea...
I like this a lot. I like the rhyme and the flow of the piece. Well done my friend.
Dark
Wishes
Wayne Leon
Michelle Whennan replied
Thank you Wayne
Wayne Leon Lea...
You are very welcome for sure, Michelle.
Dark
Wishes
Wayne Leon
JRobin Whitley
I love this! Especially after having dogs all my life I could see this happening!
Michelle Whennan replied
Thank you very much – glad you liked it
amarica
Thanks for a great smile…well done Michelle…Congratulations on being featured in the Up & Coming Writers group!!!
Michelle Whennan replied
Thank you so much!