The Trip!
My entry for the Twisted Tales
Weekly Star Twister Challenge
based on the prompt “Trust me”.
Also Posted as: The Perfect Day
The Trip! belongs to the following groups:
All Things Poetic, Artistic, Philosophical, Everyday Life, Graphic Scratch, Twisted Tales and WMGHave you ever woke to that perfect day?
The one where everything beforehand has been tediously planned, all the details scrutinized, checked off and gone over thrice! The only thing left to do the night before is relax, chat about the upcoming events and get a good nights rest, for the trip ahead.
Trust me, this was “That” day. We woke to the smell of the timed coffee, the birds calling their splendor to the new dawn. The sun, just starting to rise over the lake. Suddenly the alarm breaks the stillness with the Neil Young, put in to listen, as we rolled around last night.
Signaled, we rise and prepare for the day ahead.
Ambling downstairs, I think of last minute details, such as the windows and doors locked up, all the powered electronics off’ed and phone calls to the others to see if there is anything, anything at all we could have possibly forgotten. Quickly the bagels go into the toaster and the cream cheese taken out to soften. Wallet is found, purse set to the ready.
Ah! Toilet paper!
Everything! just as planned.
All the little miscellaneous little do-dads gathered in our arms, we head outside and dump the burdens on the front seat. After an observant walk around, we both Jump in and ready for this, so needed getaway.
Buckled up and all set, I turn the key.
The alarm goes off!
Raining hard,..... and Like a Hurricane, is Blaring across the Airwaves
jcmontgomery
Yeah, of course. Had to be a dream. For only in a perfect world are we ever 100% prepared for anything….hehe…nicely done O!
Outdoors2 replied
Hey, If we forgot it ! Buy it huh? haha
Thanks JC
sastro
Oh dear! This is a far too familiar scenario.. usually the night before exams. I like it . (Well, no-one likes to think that they are suffering without company, do they?!)
Outdoors2 replied
Proof that nothing truly is “perfect”. An impossible dream
MaKayla Songer
Ha, ha, nice! I usually dream that I’ve somehow messed the trip up though, not that it goes perfectly. But then, I’m not one for having good dreams. O.o
Outdoors2 replied
Ha, All dreams are good, whether they are good bad ones or great good ones. That means your minds working. When they stop theres trouble. lol
Thanks for reading…;)
adgray
hahahahahaha
and did you go anyway? lol
Love the descriptive detail you are lulled into a false sence of security for sure! then
click ### BLEEEP BLEEEP BLEEEP BLEEEP.......... !!!!
“Good morning It’s Radio 4QN bringing you the news … weather warning heavy rain with expected hurricane winds, more in the weather bulletin on the hour.”
ggggggrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr !!! lol
Could be worse it could be
“GROUND HOG DAY!!!!! lol :o)
Chookas! :o)
Outdoors2 replied
I’m not one to let foul weather spoil things. But a week of rain can be testing.
Thanks…;)
Miri
very good! was getting swept away by that day! & for some reason was thinking car bomb – obviously spending far too much time reading dark things! didn’t see the ‘it’s a dream’ thing coming which is a hard thing to do – think it’s cos all the little details are so well placed & grounded, well done!
Outdoors2 replied
Ha, I set it up so you “woke” and went on with it. I guess it worked…;)
Thanks
Alison Pearce
Excellent write!
Outdoors2 replied
Thank you so much. It was churned up in an instant. I was baffled for a bit and clink there it was…;)
deliriousgirl
You know I just love a man who’s always prepared! You never even for get the TP!!! And I guess you never forget to set the coffeemaker at night either, jeeeeeeezeeeee!!!!!
deliriousgirl
Love Neil Young too!!! Good story!!!!
Outdoors2 replied
I spend to much time out and about, not to have something to use and No I hate damn timers, I added it for effect…;)
Neil Rocks !!!! Mr.Soul…
deliriousgirl
Hey, I’m not through yet.
Outdoors2 replied
Whats next then ?
deliriousgirl
I’m thinking, hon.
Outdoors2 replied
Oh goodie “GD’s” I love your thoughts
Zolton
Aw.. thinking about toilet paper in rain showers makes me… fall apart. An unexpected twist on a perfect day. Fun piece of writing.
Outdoors2 replied
You nut ! It was fun thinking and writing, knowing the outcome.
Thanks Z…;)
Sabbath
Nicely written
DBALehane
Elements of Raymond Carver in this. Nicely detailed and amusing. Thanks for sharing this with us in Twisted Tales
WanderingAuthor
This was amusing and well-detailed. I’m not usually a fan of “it was all a dream” endings, but this one was well-managed and not a cop-out as most such endings are.
juice
great creative writing in this one…a real twist to this story indeed….great description and relative links to the normality until the very end….I’m wondering what happens next…keep up the driving and go
Micky McGuinness
I can hear the music, I can smell the coffee… but you had to wake me up! great story