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I Need To Knock You Say
There was no need to knock on the front door, it was my house too.
Your angry outcry could only signify the guilt upon your heavy shoulders.
My questions were not to arouse any more suspicion for the time being.
The answers were there when I smelled the after shave that I never wore.
The trail of the aroma that led me to the back door was only the beginning.
What a surprise that the door was opened in a neighborhood like ours.
Crime has been a problem, yet nothing was taken from our beautiful home.
And we have a tall fence in our backyard and our large dog was all tied up.
Our bed was warm, the sheets were stained, and you had night clothes on,
I always come home after six but on this day I was not feeling well at noon.
A set of plates were on the dinning table and I always took lunch to work,
The pretty evening dress was on the floor and the wedding rings were fingerless.
There was no need to knock on the front door, it was my house too.
You shouted at me that you need your privacy and the angry words were evil.
Don’t know why you shifted the blame on me as I read the words on the bottle,
The contents were poisonous and then I remembered the lunch tasting funny.
When I picked up the ringing telephone you got mad and told me it was for you,
I heard the insurance agent wanting to know why the sudden large up grades.
It hadn’t been but a year ago that we both had gone to make a few changes,
So he was inquiring because my voice on the phone had sounded a little strange.
Oh, I should have told you that after I took the first bite I went to see the doctor,
And he said that it was probably something I ate and he quickly took care of me.
Now let’s go over all the reasons you are so angry with me this afternoon,
But hurry, I need to make sure the police caught that naked man outside.
Copyright © Oscarelizondo Saturday March 6, 2010 11:54 AM
Comments
Superb.
POP’s
That’s means a lot to me pop, I know how your mind works, how it speaks the true meanings, I appreciate you stopping by to read and comment, thanks a million.
– oscarelizondo
OOOOOOOhhhhh I would of knocked her out hon! :) :) Okay back to the civil me lol ;) Whooooaaa there would of been no talking I would of kicked them both out the back door ;p … Great write hon!! I could picture it all … Had me ready to jump up and go off on someone lol :) Thats the rican in me (hotheaded) hahaha!! Much love to you my friend! :) xxx
I purposely wanted it to feel that way, you know, like you just saw a soap opera and wanted to put the finishing touch yourself, or couldn’t wait to the next chapter so you made up the ending, yeap, that way, and so your response is permitted, LOL, you have every right to get involved because I painted that picture in your mind, thats the kind of work I love to do. Okay, you fire plug, settled down and thank you so much for your outburst, I mean comment, yea, that’s what I meant. LOL
– oscarelizondo
wooow this is awesome! instant fav!!!
I was hoping to tickle the imagination as though you had just read a chapter of a book and wanted it to end on your terms, you know, knowing how you would want it to finish, yeap, that way, Thank you for your wonderful comment and expression, I really appreciate very much.
– oscarelizondo
Fab, Love this!!! Ingenious!
Wanted it to feel like you just read a book and didn’t get to read the last chapter, but you knew the outcome, or you could imagine it anyways. Thank you for stopping by to read and comment, I really appreicate it very much, have a great day.
– oscarelizondo
Really capturing, beautifully written, reminds me of a small excerpt from an amazing book. Great job
Thank you so much, it makes me smile that this came out this way, I really enjoyed your comment and I appreciate every word you wrote, thanks again.
– oscarelizondo
wow! First reading you… it’s a fave.
Thank you so much, and I hope my work will continue to be as good, but if not, I still thank you so much for stopping by and reading my work and commenting. I appreciate your views very much, have a great day.
– oscarelizondo
superb writing Oscar…. you had me on the edge of my seat….. i loved the ending
Thank you so much and nice to hear your voice, okay, words on the keyboard, and I needed something to get me going, being under the weather and so while I was laid out I wrote this to get me in the flow of being me. i want to say so much, and writing is so much fun for me, thank you for reading and commenting, glad you made it till the ending, I like my writings to have a little twist, makes you want to think you know what is going to happen, but then, I leave it up to the reader to finish it in their own minds. Have a great day.
– oscarelizondo
Excellent…..you drew me in, and drew a wonderful word picture….I like the first line There was no need to knock on the front door, it was my house too. Very well done:))
Yes, i wanted to open with something we can rely on, knowing we are part of it, you know, we belong, and living in the same house makes you partners. Anyway, just some humor, some events that happen around the world, and the ending kind of makes it for the imagination to dwell on the next chapter, ha, ha. Thank you so much for your comment, I appreciate so much.
– oscarelizondo
wow…I would be surprised but I expect great writing from you as always you have captured me and left me in awe!…great job! :)
Coming from such an inspiring writer, I am humbled to hear your wonderful comment. Your work is excellent and hearing the wonderful things you said really makes me very happy. I thank you so much, have a great day.
– oscarelizondo