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For This Moment, I Won't Agree

For This Moment, I Won’t Agree

When I walked into her apartment something seemed way out of place.
On the kitchen table there was an arrangement of roses in a lovely vase.
On the counter was a box of sweet chocolate candies of the best kind.
Then recollections came to me of not sending them as I listened to my mind.

The aroma of a delicious meal being cooked on the stove I could surely tell.
On her freshly bathe body a scent of a sensual perfume my nose could smell.
On her beautiful slim figured structure was clothing for romantic night in.
However; my wonderful lovely girlfriend of 5 years seemed capable of a sin.

The lights were dimmed and the glow from the candles was even very low.
On her fingers she held the match as the flame smoked as her lips did the blow.
On her lips the lipstick exceeded the amount she wore when we went on a date.
And I knew she wasn’t expecting me knowing that I would be working very late.

Suddenly a knock on the door so I hid in the closet while she went to open up.
On her tipsy toes she walked as I watched without making noise to disrupt.
On came the soft music from the stereo as she greeted a man right at her door.
I saw the face of a stranger and as he kissed her I just fell down to the floor.

The noise startled the hugging couple as they ran outside holding hands.
On their cell phones they shouted to the police that in the apartment was a man.
On my knees I was when I ran to the door and locked it before the police came.
And I slipped out the back door without ever knowing what was his name.

She confessed to me later that a stranger had come to her door one creepy night.
On her lips I could feel the guilty emotions as I knew all her story wasn’t right.
On that evening she swore that she would never see another man other than me.
And I know I should tell her too, but for just this moment I won’t even agree.

Copyright © Oscarelizondo Wednesday February 03, 2010 3:40 PM

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A girlfriend learns a hard lesson and maybe you might agree with what the boyfriend didn’t confess.

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  • linmarie
    linmarieover 4 years ago

    oooooooooooh, ahhhhhhhhhhhh,, the plot thickens,, she is a little vixen,, but he is even more than that for hiding and not bringing out the truth, this is the story of lovers scorn,, neither tells the truth,, hiding behind closed doors, sneaking, hiding, showing up when not expected, now comes reading the mail, checking her cell phone lists of numbers, calling and pretending he is someone else in hopes of finding out who the secret lover is coming too his house. This is a good movie write,, but I see it everyday around me in real life,, will not mention any names,, not me,, but is happening too ones close to me, power in honesty love them and let go if can not be true.. it becomes an obsession if not done otherwise. with obsession is danger in every corner,, what kind of life or love exists in shadows with blown out candle light?

  • oscarelizondo
    oscarelizondoover 4 years ago

    I always have to leave a part of suspense in my writes without telling it all because I know this young lady, her name is linmarie, and she loves to look deep into the situation and get involve and find an ending, love this girl, she is smart and clever, sweet and kind, devoted and honestly, she’s my angel, well enough about her, thanks for reading this and commenting, now about that other lady I was speaking about, oops, can’t talk about her, it’s our secret. LOL.

  • Oh, I just back , it’s after midnight, I am catching up on your story about Rebecca and write when it is fresh in your memory, the corrections and grammar can later be edited, then you can go back without forgetting the details that were fresh, when you are done, then you can add to it, extent the chapters, add more details that will inspire your readers to continue writing, and when you remember more things to write, keep them in a special place and write what chapter they are meant to be added, this way you don’t repeat yourself in another chapter, when the time is right, explore how it would sound better, delete words that are said too often, find other words in a dictionary that can be used but still have the same meaning, listen to your heart, it will speak to you and keep adding the new ideas to your notes and what you want to say with them. Sometimes we forget what was really meant, so make sure you put a discription of what the new material was really about , when you are finished, relax, rest, then begin the process of reading to someone without telling them what you meant, listen to what they heard, and if it is not want you wanted, then edit again. I will get back to you tomorrow after I carefully read the new chapters, I am really in need of rest. Love that story, so be patient with me also, thanks my angel.

    – oscarelizondo

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