pleasure and pain
I’m not even going to try explaining this one, it’ll just come out bad. It makes no sense in the context of who I am.
pleasure and pain belongs to the following groups:
All Out Emotion and Pleasure & Painmade love to a man once with my eyes’
motivation well disguised
wrapped my words around the point
with tiny snares I stole his mind
blinded his reason
and veiled his sight with lies
he cries
for me
for what’s mine;
bare breasts and
solid, shapely thighs
that illicit, fleshy fare
sumptuous, divine
our clandestine affair…
in just one night
over a bong
and a bottle of wine
I charmed him;
played the “mystery chick”
with hips so welcome-wide
and skin so slick
a figure shaped by devilish design
and magic tricks to play
upon his weeping dick
while he lay rapt, supine…
I harmed him
left him weak
and sick
and took my pleasure
from his pain
his loss:
my gain.
my way
to make my power plain.
George Lenz
well written….very erotic….
nnimus3 replied
cheers for that
canaali
Jesus…
That’s intense.
That’s the kind of evil I like…
nnimus3 replied
pity i’m not so self assured in real life
canaali
well you should be :-)
nnimus3 replied
no. there’s no malice in my soul, and i prefer myself this way.
making up evil stories isn’t the same as doing evil things.
canaali
Sorry I meant you should be so self assured, not evil…
There’d be nothing wrong with it if you did have malice in your soul; we don’t get to choose the way we are. I think everyone has malice in them somewhere!
As you point out it’s what we do that’s important
nnimus3 replied
self-assured, fair enough.
I definitely think there’s something wrong with being malicious though.
canaali
There is but there’s a big difference between malicious thoughts and malicious acts.
Just in case you’re in any doubt I’m trying to be complementary here
nnimus3 replied
no doubt :-)
I appreciate the feedback, naturally. Posting this was hard work- I’m so proud of it and yet somewhat disgusted by myself for even conceiving of it. So I supposed I’m inclined to be a little defensive of it.
nnimus3 replied
for malicious, try http://www.redbubble.com/people/nnimus3/writing/1524258-before-i
Graham Farquhar
My favourite line – “that illicit, fleshy fare”.
nnimus3 replied
I like ‘hips so welcome-wide’
for all I’m a bit queasy about it, I really enjoyed certain aspects of writing this. I’ve not to my memory written anything this explicit before, and certainly not so publicly, nor so nastily. The positive response I’ve had has come as quite a surprise.
canaali
You should be pround of it.
I understand the defensiveness in as much as it does take guts to post something so provocative… Not everyone would have the guts so well done and thank you!
And you shouldn’t be disgusted with yourself AT ALL.
Don’t you realise how many other people have the same kind of thought process?
You do have the internet don’t you?
Anyway, some people enjoy being treated like the guy in your story.
Hell, a LOT of people like being treated that way.
Why do you think I’m taking such an interest?
nnimus3 replied
Maybe I should make clear here that the harm I’m doing to this person (in my alter-world of whimsy, which doesn’t actually exist) is purely spiritual. Dunno if that came across clearly enough in my writing…
are you implying that there’s a market for spiritual torment? cos that’s some crazy shit…
3XEternity
I love this. Wow I’m a good poetry writer myself and never found a poem that I couldn’t edit it’s flow untill I read this one. Awsome job :)
nnimus3 replied
cheers
canaali
Any kind of torment you can imagine there’s a market for it.
Lots of crazy people out there!
Everyone I know is crazy and everyone I don’t know well enough to know if they are, well I rather suspect that they are too
nnimus3 replied
I had a debate with a friend the other night about the nature of humanity. He claims we’re all flawed. I can’t take that standpoint, because if we’re all flawed then what’s the flaw but a typical charactaristic?
same stands for crazy, I guess. Either only some of us are nutbars, or we all are in which case it’s totally acceptable and… I don’t really know where I’m going with this. Been awake for days…
DarKarsean
oh yes – well written – love the words
fullcirclemand...
This is fabulous darl! You should be very proud of this writing!
nnimus3 replied
in a strange way I am
MissAlexis
Perfection.
nnimus3 replied
in expression, not sentiment, I hope!
thanks
x
George Yesthal
Wow! What a brilliant and talented young writer. Why have I not come across you sooner?
nnimus3 replied
discovery is half the fun
HeatherTS
mhmm thats how its done, i think…that in a relationship, it is very healthy for a woman to have a strong understanding that she holds the power in the bedroom. while one may be the bread winner, the other is the one that makes the bed that the money earned bought…that much more enjoyable to sleep in. (i.e. fuck on)
of course im a whore and thnk its empowering to fuck a man and ignore all his phone calls afterwards :o) so what do i know? hahaha
nnimus3 replied
well it’s a fantasy, I suppose. The inspiration for this sure didn’t come out of my past!
I can see where you’re coming from, in the sense of the empowerment you describe, but it’s not for me except in my writing… more power to you with your steely reserve!
Selkie
You’re a keeper, my dear…:)
nnimus3 replied
Cheers Selkie
Astoreth
i’m taking notes like mad here….. ;-) x
nnimus3 replied
don’t go hurting anyone :-S
maybe I should write an epilogue where the bitch in the poem gets hit by a bus (cos it’s what’s coming to her if she goes around spreading bad karma like that…)
Astoreth
hmph…. i agree…i also hate hurting people…. bad karma comes back and spits venom in your eye! x
Sebastiaan Koenen
Great writing Nnimus! Totally agree with the last speaker, though the time karma takes to hit back sometimes differs and it sometimes may look the good karma has some cartroubles when finding it’s way back….
Peter Searle (...
You write with such openness. It’s staggering! Be it fantasy or not as I’m unsure, you’ve either lived or seen, and you can spin a visible reality with your words
ArcadiaTempest
I know of this power your words have spoken so well about….you wrote of this so vividly….It felt like it was a statement about how power can be so potent….I have had this power used on me….but then again I allowed it to be so. Hmmm so does it mean that power like this can only work if their is the silent agreement?? Well I digress….dam fine writing…got the emotions going so kudos’ to you. :)) XX
EdelPankhurst
wow. awesome. . your pretty awesome
Sidewinder
that was great… very vivid… good work
TheWanderingBoo
intensely erotic…