Never was such a Euphmenism Spun to Deceive,
As the one about Adam, the Serpent and Eve.
In this Epic Fable, they have tried to Construe,
that the Great Race of man was Spawned just by Two.
Figuratively speaking, twould be Folly to Say,
that the First of our kind was Begot in a Day.
By using our Brains and the Knowledge we Seek,
It’s Doubtless that ALL was Formed in a Week.
In the Garden of God, lived Man and his Mate,
They Roamed around Naked, an Ecstatic State.
More Cherished they were than the Rarest of Flower,
above all the Beasts they Shared Supreme Power.
Until came the Day when Eve spoke with a Snake,
who Promised her Wisdom from the Fruit if she’d take.
With the Apple consumed, Eve Gained our Free Will,
the Original Sin was Committed for Real.
By initiating this, she inadvertently had,
engendered a Difference between Good and Bad.
Due to this act the pair were then Banished,
our Delicate Balance would Forever be Vanished.
Scattered they were like Dust to the Wind,
the Safety they’d known was now in Rescind.
By the Elements Grace they lived in Despair,
Forced in a Cave to Serve as their Lair.
After Dwelling in Squalor, Two sons were Conceived,
one a Good Shepherd, whilst the other Deceived.
Into the Country walked Abel and Cain,
out of Sheer envy his Brother was Slain.
Cain’s Greedy Hands now Covered in Blood,
The Sound of it Shed, Cried up from the Mud.
The Lord Heard this wail, so Punished was Cain,
To wander the Earth Forever in Pain.
As for the Snake, whom Eve he thus Led,
was Cursed with the Heel to Strike at his Head.
Squashed like a Beetle at any such Cost,
because of his Play in Paradise Lost.
(Copyright (©) 2008. All rights reserved)
The Divine Euphemism
Still Another update…
Gregory John O..., about 1 month ago
Well written Max…............... I think the whole Creation Story is, and was meant as metaphore
Sally Omar, about 1 month ago
Max, Absolutely amazing…you really ROCK!!!!! Sally xxoo
dynamopiev, about 1 month ago
really well structured, how are you so prolific?
Max Gatrell in reply to dynamopiev’s comment, about 1 month ago
Thanks man, these few are actually updates, my newest one (penned today) is titled ‘Getting Old’
M
Max Gatrell in reply to Gregory John O'Flaherty’s comment, about 1 month ago
Totally man, the stuff’s that’s allegorical has been taken literally and visa versa…still a nice story though ;)
M
Max Gatrell in reply to Sally Omar’s comment, about 1 month ago
Many Thanks Sally, you’re far too kind ;)
Rock on!
M
Jen Wahl, about 1 month ago
Ingenious work, Max. Beautiful and lucid…
Max Gatrell in reply to Jen Wahl’s comment, about 1 month ago
Cheers Jen, I had extremely good material to work with ;)
M
coolart, about 1 month ago
Well written sorry I have been so busy to come read your work, now I see you inside you and am warm and yet Cool Brilliant
valzart, about 1 month ago
Oh this is a beautiful poem… so wonderfully written… ;) Val
Max Gatrell in reply to coolart’s comment, about 1 month ago
Thankyou so much, worry not, there’s plenty of time to read what you wish ;)
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Max Gatrell in reply to valzart’s comment, about 1 month ago
Many thanks Val, although it’s nothing compared to the incredible images you have created ;)
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valzart, about 1 month ago
I disagree ..where would we be without our wonderful writers…the moving pen having writ..moves on.. ;) Val
Max Gatrell in reply to valzart’s comment, about 1 month ago
I don’t know, if the truth be known i’d rather be able to paint than write, I guess it’s because images are far more challenging than words, in addition the mind will always see pictures in different ways, perception being subjective and all that ;)
M
coolart, about 1 month ago
Well Max this for me is extremely moving and I must say you have cracked it knocked it on the head like a true poet should your gift is pure for I see through it all your endeavor to discover the real creation and downfall of Eve and Adam. so Bravo nothing to add you are I believe one hundered percent right kiss your hand Coolart hugs xx
Max Gatrell in reply to coolart’s comment, about 1 month ago
Thanks ;)
The creation story is a powerful one, it begts to be manifested into various mediums of art, my favourite example of this is easily Paradise lost, to which I offer homage in the last line, i’m simply tredding over old ground…
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journey360, about 1 month ago
that was good max, you put a lot into that
nice control
Max Gatrell in reply to journey360’s comment, about 1 month ago
Cheers 360, control is crucial in my opinion ;)-
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IvyLeague, about 1 month ago
OMG! WOW! How long have I’ve been gone, you totally snapped. Lovin’ it.
Max Gatrell in reply to IvyLeague’s comment, about 1 month ago
you’ve been gone too long!
this was actually one of the first poems I penned,
it has however changed over time to it’s present state,
glad you enjoyed it ;)
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Vacancy, about 1 month ago
you have such a way with words….I don’t think I’ve ever heard that story told so eloquently…and with a such rhythm and rhyme…Fabulous writing!! : )
Max Gatrell in reply to Vacancy’s comment, about 1 month ago
Thankyou so much (blushing here)
this story has been told far more eloqunetly,
than I could ever dream to tell, and more than once.
Check ‘Paradise Lost’ for starters ;)-
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dogpriest, about 1 month ago
lol, fucking very well written Max, i liked the end, well done!
dogpriest
Max Gatrell in reply to dogpriest’s comment, about 1 month ago
Cheers for taking the time to read it,
so glad you appreciated this piece.
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dimarie, about 1 month ago
this rocks!
I’ve always said the bible was just a novel marketed really really well….
Max Gatrell in reply to dimarie’s comment, about 1 month ago
Cheers Dimarie, someone once told me the BIble,
was written a Desert survival manual, letting us know what
to avoid and what to embrace accordingly, more so than the Bible,
this poem’s inspired by the marvellous ‘Paradise Lost’
M