Defying Gravity

Author: Natella2020
Word Count: 156
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Defying Gravity

My interpretation of the Zero Gravity prompt of Flash Fiction’s August challenge. I hope it’s not too much of a stretch.

All feedback is welcome, of course.

Defying Gravity belongs to the following groups:

Flash Fiction and WMG

“Mikey, I’m scared,” Sandy panted. She stumbled on the hem of her tattered skirt.

“We’ve got to keep moving, Sandy. Come on.” Mikey pulled his sister to her feet and urged her onward.

“Mikey—,” Sandy was on the verge of panic.

“Just stay close, all right?” He led the way up the stairs.

“They’re on the roof! There’s no way out now!” The bullies’ cruel laughter echoed behind them.

The two searched frantically for an escape route. They turned as the rooftop door clunked against the wall.

“You shouldn’t have come up here,” the ruthless leader taunted. “You should have known that, if we didn’t get you, gravity would.”

Mikey pulled Sandy’s arms around his waist and jumped. The clothesline broke from their combined weights, but they reached the fire escape unharmed. Mikey yelled back to the shocked faces of his enemies.

“Mikey and Sandy, one. Gravity, zero.”

lianne

Might be a stretch Natella but it’s a great one! I like it very much – caught me right there at the end with that unexpected ending.
Natella2020 replied

Thanks for the reassurance, Lianne. That takes a load off, and I’m glad you liked it.
Amber Elizabet...

I so love your stories Natella they are wonderful many many hugsss to you!!!!!! my firend:)
Natella2020 replied

Thank you so much, Amber. You are a very sweet person.
Anne van Alkemade

Love the punchline. Well done Nat.
Natella2020 replied

Thanks for reading, Anne. I appreciate your comments.
jcmontgomery

I liked this, great ending!!
Natella2020 replied

Thanks, JC. The entire plot was pretty cliche, but I thought it might be a creative twist of the prompt, even if it does stretch it out.
Amber Elizabet...

So are you my firend and always welcome always :):)
Natella2020 replied

:D
MuscularTeeth

take that evil bully !
pow ! kabaam !
Natella2020 replied

Thanks for reading Muscular Teeth, and for contributing a “pow! kabam!” to the battle. ;o)
Miri

i love the way you’ve used the prompt! great work!
& many congrats on being featured on the writing home page :-)
Natella2020 replied

Thanks so much, Miri! I’m glad you liked it, being featured was a big surprise for me.
jcmontgomery

CONGRATS! I just saw the feature. I am sooooooo happy for you!
Natella2020 replied

Thank you! It was a huge surprise, I was not expecting that at all!
filfil

All I can say is:Cool!
Natella2020 replied

Thanks, filfil, for reading and leaving a nice comment.
WanderingAuthor

This was an excellent story, with enough suspense to get me gnawing my lip, a near-tragic ending, then humour and relief at the end. Great!
Natella2020 replied

Thanks, WA. I think the reason you experience all these aspects of a story is because you’re a perceptive reader. Everyone appreciates an attentive audience, so thanks!
Chanel2

Well written with a nice finish.
Natella2020 replied

Thank you, Chanel, for your nice comment.
anaisnais

Brief and to the point but makes a great read – enjoyable length.
Natella2020 replied

Thanks so much! I find Flash Fiction to be an enjoyable length also.
AngelArtist

I’m not good at grasping the significance of writing, but this looks really good. at least I can imagine that they somehow found a way to get into space =) far away from the Bullies.
Natella2020 replied

That’s the interesting thing about Flash Fiction. Its brevity leaves room for the reader to fill in the details. I’m glad you can imagine it that way, Angela. You’ve brought a new perspective to the story. Thanks for reading and leaving an insightful comment.
Alison Pearce

Fabulous story Natella! I held my breath all the way through and finished with a smile!!!
Natella2020 replied

Thanks so much, Alison. You’ve really made me smile. :o)
PJ Ryan

well done Nat !!
Natella2020 replied

Thanks fo reading, Nicole.
RuthFroehlinger

What an enjoyable story and the ending…....
Natella2020 replied

Thanks so much Ruth!
jcmontgomery

Congratulations on placing third in the challenge !!! Well done !!!
Natella2020 replied

Thanks a lot, JC. It was a huge surprise.
Jen Wahl

Fantastic, Natella! That last line is brilliant.
Rheenie

Ahhh this is fantastic i cant stop laughin…..is it ok if i repeat the last line like qall day lol