(with) relish this dream
I am getting lost
in your understory
(with) relish this dream belongs to the following groups:
! Creative Writing & Poetry !, Midnight Ramblers, The beauty of poetry, The Red Writing Room, The Sensual Word, Up & Coming Writers and Vibration in Art and Verse - VAVoom!I am getting lost
in your understory
this beautiful drag
of an orangutan dream
I’m hanging around your
heights between the canopy
and losing sight
of the forest floor
a little deeper
I’m going each time you
ask me a question
with your verdant eyes
at this rainforest counter
I’m choosing
all things on the menu
with one simple side
orange, in quarters
juicy and ripe
for picking
amongst these
trees we’re now climbing
gently guiding me with your arms
to another
piece of
deliciously
citrusy
stolen time
if you don’t mind
how I am relishing
your relish
combined and entwined
like the trees
along their spines
murmuring mouths
droning basses
are tangling at the wind
I’m tasting this orange
light
smooth with a little bite
at the
corners of my tongue
and you know
I think the dust is
listening and deciding to
stay outside of this forest
so that we can remain suspended
in this enchanted time
Holly Ringland
i have little bits of orange pip stuck to my lips and the insides of my heart.
this is every inch beautiful sticky sweetness with the perfect amount of tang and tart.
gods nat, it is such joy to encounter your words… and having the little view backstage that i do, this absolutely makes me feel stomping-in-puddles kind of joy xxx
natapee replied
that way you devour my tangy words with such delight makes me so utterly happy Holly. I share your stomping-in-puddles kind of joy. I’m there with you in rainy England and together we’re singing in the rain. xx
markgb
I’m hanging around your heights between the canopy and losing sight of the forest floorWhat a cool phrase!
I love this piece and the way it flows.
natapee replied
thank you Mark!
erich biemer
this puts me in a chutney state of mind…..
natapee replied
I hope it was tangy and that you relished it : )
linaji
Holy Cow.. this is filled to the brim.. I have read it 3 times.. I feel good and full and excited.. what a moment to experience!
natapee replied
sounds like you shared the feeling I had when I wrote this. yay!
Genevieve Robey
Oh those ‘stolen’ and ‘enchanted’ times … “so that we can remain suspended” mmm… and “how I am relishing your relish” is very cute indeed. A gorgeous piece.
natapee replied
oh thank you lovely, means alot. x
gretchen .
i love the way you story-tell inside your poems, such a unique and beautiful gift. x o x
natapee replied
what a beautiful thing to say : ) thank you lovely girl, I’m thrilled that you think so. x
hsien-ku
to remain suspended inside your beautiful words would be all anyone could desire. what a rich and exotic fare you have offered up today!
natapee replied
suspended in my words! you are too kind! so pleased you like the piece, really appreciate you commenting. so glad I’ve found you on here. x
girlinthestars
awesome piece! wow, love your words!
natapee replied
thanks lovely x
ArcadiaTempest
I am suspended in this…..your making tasting verse addictive in this wonderful writing….ApplaudingXXX
natapee replied
oh Arcadia…I am blushing. And happy : ) thank you (takes a little curtsy) xxx
JaneSolomon
enchanting reading Nat..beautiful! xxx
natapee replied
thanks gorgeous, so good to see you again. x
aglaia b
it took me away…...
thank you.
beautiful writing.
;-) xox
natapee replied
thanks lovely, I’m glad it did x
Steve Strodder...
this is really very beautiful nat :) i got lost inside of it…
natapee replied
thats wonderful Steve. And thanks for the add to your watchlist too. Look forward to reading more of your work.
Mark Ramstead
I suspect you are a unique brand of dustdevil, a whirlwind of love.
natapee replied
I can’t take all the credit, it takes two to make a quiet storm of love. Thanks for wonderful comment Mark, my mind is spinning again in imagery. : )
ShadowDancer
this is deliciously delightful, i’m so glad i came across your writing, such a whimsical and luscious style.