the meadow

natapee
Author: natapee
Word Count: 135
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the meadow

After I realise your promise
of a sunflower meadow,
existing just over the hilltop,
is only a tease, I feel
flattened, like the trodden grass
beneath my red shoes.

Its difficult to keep these
slippers skipping along
humming to my internal song
optimistic,
these shadows cast
a long sigh,
but I keep on walking.

Beyond the bare meadow
I find something
unexpected,
rusted birdcages, a place
blooming, with weeds
there’s whispers
of spring picnics, once
delighted and tunes of
parrots, they dare to make
my leaves stand up
once more and hum.

Should I start with a cage,
uncover it,
let the life return, for
underneath this meadow
flowers may still bloom, the sun
is not yet shining, my love,
did you simply send me
to this place of promises
that bring, too soon?

  • Jessica  Tremp

    Jessica Tremp

    absolutely gorgeous…love the bird cages

  • natapee replied

    thank you Jessica. I dreamt about the bird cages the other night, will write more about them soon me thinks.

  • PJ Ryan

    PJ Ryan

    how stunning ..

    they dare to make
    my leaves stand up
    once more and hum

    love that line so much

  • natapee replied

    thanks PJ x

  • shaktipat

    shaktipat

    beautiful writing. i like the inquisitive, open-ended style.

  • natapee replied

    reflecting my never ending quest, with so few answers!

  • markgb

    markgb

    Wonderful writing, I especially love the first verse.

  • natapee replied

    thanks Mark

  • girlinthestars

    girlinthestars

    i love this, completely. gorgeous!

  • natapee replied

    xx

  • ufosIsee

    ufosIsee

    Sometimes cages can be the trap, or waiting 4 glimmers of hope.
    Well written like it alot..

  • natapee replied

    thank you and I like those two interpretations could go either way!

  • ufosIsee

    ufosIsee

    Ur welcome….....Looking 4ward 2 more of ur work soon.

  • VelvetGirl

    VelvetGirl

    I like the first bit, I often feel like that! t’s full of hidden meanings and I love it. x

  • LeaLoo

    LeaLoo

    The last stanza is really pretty sounding.

  • natapee replied

    thank you!

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