Unhip
A short monologue from a disappointed lady.
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! Creative Writing & Poetry !, "Poetry and Beautiful Women" , All Around the Styles, All Out Emotion, All Things Poetic, Artistic, Philosophical, Anger Management, Avant-Garde, Creative, Talented, and Unknown, Feminine Intent (LIMIT TWO IMAGES PER DAY), Freedom to Shine, Graphic Scratch, Masterpieces: Literary Workshop, Midnight Ramblers, Shameless Self-Promotion, Something To Say, The New Beat Generation, The Patchwork , The Red Writing Room, The true beauty, The Word Tree, Up & Coming Writers, Verses Dark, Vibration in Art and Verse - VAVoom! and WMG“While tracing with a fingertip
the outline of my thigh and hip,
he seductively began to strip
and said that it would be a trip
to navigate a sailing-ship
by stars at night and radar-blip
and gave me some champagne to sip.
All the data in the micro-chip
can’t emulate the truly hip.
He said the test of true friendship
was forgiving any little slip.
It was sunshine, surf and skinny-dip
until, one day, he lost his grip
like icebergs only show a tip.
I’m dancing while he cracks the whip,
with teeth that grind and teeth that nip,
and I’m complaining with a swollen lip,
“But how could he be so unhip?”
Richard G Witham
This is beautiful! The imagery is awesome, and the rhythm flows wonderfully. Well done!
nancyames replied
Thanks, Richard – glad to meet you.
Solomon Walker
wow! its lovely – very contemporary, youthful…
nancyames replied
Thanks, Solomon.
James Watson
Wow very well written It sucks you in then slaps you at the end just like in the story it tells.
nancyames replied
Thanks very much and I’m glad you like it.