Smooth down the jacket.

MuscularTeeth
Author: MuscularTeethVoted Most Helpful Bubbler
Word Count: 84
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Smooth down the jacket.

Carefully he adjusted his tie in the mirror.
Smooth jawline, clean-shaved back at him.
The curl of lips.
Tie done. Hands smooth down the jacket.
A quick all over with the eyes – immaculate.
Steps away from the mirror.
A quick turn around the room.
Stops at a picture. Moves over, adjusts it just – so.
Hands smooth down the jacket.
He stands in the center of the room.
One hand in pocket, pulls the bulk of it out.
Quickly to the temple and
Out.

  • PJ Ryan

    PJ Ryan

    whoaaa !

    succinct and powerful little piece .. well done.

  • MuscularTeethVoted Most Helpful Bubbler replied

    thank you PJ

  • Juilee Pryor

    Juilee Pryor

    this is awesome work… words really work wonders sometimes…..:)

  • MuscularTeethVoted Most Helpful Bubbler replied

    thanks JP. haha this is funny.
    i only need J and P so far to reply to my viewers.
    if anyone else says anything here – i cant thank you unless you are just a JP or a PJ. sorry ! outta letters.

  • rain-dogs

    rain-dogs

    interesting…really creates a moment very visual like the opening scene to movie..

  • MuscularTeethVoted Most Helpful Bubbler replied

    ...
    /points to above comment and mimes a respectful thankyou to raindogs but reminds him he has no J or P in his name

  • blamo

    blamo

    vey Swarve ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,MT i can hear the martini’s rattling

  • rain-dogs

    rain-dogs

    is all good as my real name happens to be jacaranda poodlebreath

  • Malkman

    Malkman

    cool little peice

  • MuscularTeethVoted Most Helpful Bubbler replied

    /waves

  • MuscularTeethVoted Most Helpful Bubbler replied

    very resevoir dogs.

  • Flic Manning

    Flic Manning

    A good opening to a CSI episode!

  • MuscularTeethVoted Most Helpful Bubbler replied

    thank you flic, i hear your a talented writer yourself..

  • Diesel Laws

    Diesel Laws

    Heavy!

  • MuscularTeethVoted Most Helpful Bubbler replied

    haha thanks D

  • dawndavies

    dawndavies

    very slick well done,dawnx

  • butchart

    butchart

    i’m glad he fixed the picture first…. by the way… i’ve changed my name to jp

  • MuscularTeethVoted Most Helpful Bubbler replied

    heya JP !
    :)

  • Juilee Pryor

    Juilee Pryor

    jacaranda poodlebeath!....LOL… that is just so funny…...:)

  • Tania Rose

    Tania Rose

    Oo! i see part of a filmclip

  • MuscularTeethVoted Most Helpful Bubbler replied

    AIR

  • flipteez

    flipteez

    Will ya reply if l’m wearing Pj’s ?
    Cassablanca eat ya heart out XXXXXX

  • cosimopiro

    cosimopiro

    Wow. That caught me by surprise! Great write.

  • MuscularTeethVoted Most Helpful Bubbler replied

    im really honored thank you.
    this is a little more serious than most of my other writings, where i prefer to just play with words.

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