Air

I float here in my suit, and the important gauge reads a tank 40 percent full of air.

Another gauge tells me im losing air faster than I’m actually using up just by merely breathing.
It estimates roughly 15 minutes of air left.
The suit is smart – it has sensors attached to parts of my body to measure heartbeat and respiration and calculates the air usage based on that.

If i can slow my breathing and calm down that figure of 15 minutes would raise higher. Panic and watch it drop fast.

15 minutes with a 40 percent tank full, even with my accelerated heartbeat and rapid breathing means bad news.

It means that somewhere I have a slight leak. Perhaps due to a tiny tiny scratch somewhere.
Or more probably the abrasive effects of being pushed against the spaceship’s hull -perhaps a layer or two of the suit has worn off and osmosis is leaking precious air away from me.

I can see the white smudge marks where i was hurled across the wall and it had worn away part of my suit layers.

It is chaos where I float – all around me is debris of a world gone mad. The spaceship was meant to spin, thus giving it a centrifugal gravity. But with the accident that spinning effect stopped and gravity also ceased.

Everything conveivable floats and has its own tradjectory. A miniture galaxy of metal, plastic, clothing, food, people and just .. bits of everything that made a spaceship.

I can see a space suit coming towards me slowly, but steadily, and I carefully brace my feet on an opposite wall and watch him as he glides into me. We tumble backwards and hit the wall opposite. A bit of scrabbling and re-orientating, and we are facing one another, embracing each other so we dont float away from the other.

He gestures, I nod and we place our helmet plates against one another – visor to visor.

I can now see its Jorgen, and he looks terrible; a large cut above his left eye, a bloody mouth and it appears he has been sick inside the suit. I dont envy him, but I dont envy me either.

We can’t hear one another through the vacuum, but I can see he is shouting something and he has a terribly glazed look in his eyes.

We stay like this for a minute – him trying to shout to me and me being unable to understand a single thing he is trying to say.
His eyes are bulging now, and each time he shouts his tongue looks more distended, purple and swollen.. then the inside of his visor goes blood red as his suit also bursts from whatever happened to it.

I let go of his body and let it drift away. He was a good bloke.

As I said the suit is pretty smart, and even though it has no radio, it still has speakers and I am able to play some of my music collection. I choose something from my childhood.

I push off against the wall and head for a hole in the spaceships hull. Within moments i am outside the ship. There isnt really anything recognisable about it.

But I’m outside now. I push against the hull, gentle, and carefully (i dont want to spin) and suddenly I am irrevocably leaving the wreckage behind me…

Heading further out into space.

Its beautiful.

  • reflector

    reflector

    A great read Mr Teeth ! It automatically invoked images in the mind and it engages the readers attention.
    Hello too !

  • shanghaiwu

    shanghaiwu

    oh teeth

    you have style

    I was worried for a moment that you would not surface

  • margpie

    margpie

    Brilliant, very captivating

  • gypsycaster

    gypsycaster

    Very visual really. Well written and really cool idea.
    ...I kinda hope he finds a spare tank or something.

  • pinkyjain

    pinkyjain

    Wowwww. Awesome writing Mr. Teeth. Really captivating.

  • Karin  Taylor

    Karin Taylorcommunity helper

    ... beautiful ….
    i don’t have words

  • flower68

    flower68

    wow.reading that was like watching a very intense short film…with a great ending.well done MT

  • Empress

    Empress

    seriously – send this!

  • MuscularTeethVoted Most Helpful Bubbler replied

    hey its not that good, but send me link again and i will.

  • Danny

    Danny

    Quite a good read
    I was picturing it with some relevant music (my secret) right to the end.
    I see a nice shortshort film here.

  • MuscularTeethVoted Most Helpful Bubbler replied

    tell me the music ! thanks for reading it too !

  • Danny

    Danny

    staralfur by sigur ros

  • MuscularTeethVoted Most Helpful Bubbler replied

    i am unfamiliar with what yuo are saying.
    should i find this book and read it?

  • Danny

    Danny

    Listen here
    it’s music, once you hear it, you’ll get the drift :)

  • Danny

    Danny

    The more I think about it
    Maybe Olsen Olsen is more apt
    Listen here fourth on list

  • MuscularTeethVoted Most Helpful Bubbler replied

    CHEERS DUDE !

  • Damian

    Damian

    Well done, this is a great read.

  • Karin  Taylor

    Karin Taylorcommunity helper

    congratulations on this piece of writing being featured MT!
    am so proud of you!! this writing is sensational…

  • AlexMac

    AlexMacGreeter

    OH WOW this is wonderful, It was very intense, I want a sequel :0)

  • bearpaw

    bearpaw

    simply awesome MT.

  • salsbells69

    salsbells69

    Congratulations Mr T. Well written as it puts the reader right there..Fantastic writing. Well done.

  • Chanel2

    Chanel2

    Great read, hooked me right in. Well done.

  • journey360

    journey360

    oh wow i really enjoyed this it was very thrilling

  • Gary Grant

    Gary Grant

    Very Kool space dude gg

  • Wayne Leon Learmond

    Wayne Leon Lea...

    Fantastic piece of work this. I like the imagery this provoked in my mind. The atmosphere too was superb. Well done indeed.

    Dark
    Wishes
    Wayne Leon

  • becteri

    becteri

    I really enjoyed reading this, the ending kind of reminded me of the ending to the movie Space Cowboys. When Tommy Lee Jones gets them to send him to the moon. It’s kind of sad really.

  • AritusZainan
  • MuscularTeethVoted Most Helpful Bubbler replied

    lol thank you. i hope you enjoyed it.
    australianreader.com are going to use this piece at some stage…

  • Maureen Bloesch

    Maureen Bloesch

    This was a very well written story….kudos kiddo:>))

  • rain-dogs

    rain-dogs

    a great read love the tension you create and the exit….Heading further out into space
    Its beautiful…...cheers

  • rubyjo

    rubyjo

    i was there, at least i felt i was there.

  • MuscularTeethVoted Most Helpful Bubbler replied

    aah man thats really nice thing to say. i was feeling rather demoralised by my writing of late, but with your comments i think ill get back at it and try again. the owner of teh publishing company seemed to look down on me without reading my work yet… so i was sorta like – bah why bother…. but now ill finish this damn thing, give it to the editors and let them decide.. i wont worry about the owner..

  • Vicki Ferrari

    Vicki Ferrari

    I could feel myself floating about, feel the terror and not being able to understand or be understood…. I think I would also prefer to float away than remain like that…. Keep writing MT, your words are a mode of transport and escape!!! (and remember how many times Harry Potter got rejected!! and look where the author is now! Just remember us here on the Bubble Planet OK?!!)

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