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Smack of jellyfish
Although I grimace,
shiver, throb and ache like a
quiver of cobras
I hear your plaintive
voice like trembling sorrow; the
sympathy of doves.
I would like to fly,
free from fear and hope, like an
aerie of eagles.
But your charisma
weighs on my aloneness; the
charm of hummingbirds.
Perhaps I would hit
you for insolence, like a
smack of jellyfish.
Disdain is pretence,
officious and fussy, the
parliament of owls.
However I sigh,
I cannot deny you’re a
warren of wombats.
My name is Deborah,
so I choose instead to gain
the zeal of zebras.
Smack of jellyfish by msdebbie
I love collective nouns – this is a quick attempt to put some of my favourites from list below into a haiku series:
rabble of butterflies
quiver of cobras
piteousness of doves (changed to sympathy in haiku for syllable purposes)
aerie of eagles
fesnying of ferrets
implausability of gnus
charm of hummingbirds
smack of jellyfish
parliament of owls
warren of wombats
Please share your own favs
I’ll defer to Anna Quindlen, of The New York Times: “People who are knowledgeable about poetry sometimes discuss it in that knowing, rather hateful way in which oenophiles talk about wine: robust, delicate, muscular. This has nothing to do with how most of us experience it, the heart coming around the corner and unexpectedly running into the mind. Of all the words that have stuck to the ribs of my soul, poetry has been the most filling.”
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Pretty, I love your word and language choices. :)
Thanks so much RunningBear :D
– msdebbie
wooohooo !! love this girl !! really fabulous write, perhaps my most favourite of yours. x
hahaha – always good to hear such a lovely comment from one of my own favourite writers! You have so many I love, doubt I could pick such a thing though Nic xxx
– msdebbie
Thanks Holly and LLD.
– msdebbie
You really do rock,
just too cool for school xxx
Hehehe Lisa – I thought you’d get something out of this one. Wordplay is always good for the soul methinks!
– msdebbie
Happy Days…Well Done!
Thanks Mark
– msdebbie
clever and great fun to read… will explore more myself… ‘parliament of owls’, what a great visual that is. ‘A cacophony of galahs’ popped into my head. xoxo
I could write about these all day – such terrific images like you say Cos!
Good one remembering A cacophony of galahs
Bet we have some great ones for Australian animals. Need to look up echidna and emu too xxx
– msdebbie
perfect
Thanks Mark!
– msdebbie
Thanks MM and Juicy x
– msdebbie