Independence from a Balcony

moorefaith
Author: moorefaith
Word Count: 224
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Independence from a Balcony

This was one of those times I felt fully awake and fully present, aware of everything around me. I tried to capture it as best I could.

Tonight is light and dark;
sound and silence;
color and faded monotones.

I wonder what it would be like
up in a plane, looking down to see
the earth exploding in shining multi-colored bursts –
red, blue, green, gold, white, purple.

Curious, how we celebrate freedom
with the sounds of war:
boom of cannon fire, crackle of machine gun,
and the undertone –
the hissing sizzle, as if
even this display of power has protesters.

Above and below me,
the light show not made in China:
stars and their summer counterparts,
lightning bugs, winking at each other
in some cosmic Morse code,
as if to say, “This too shall pass.”

I hear the disembodied cheers of neighbors
victorious in their lawn chairs
and fat from burgers and rocket-shaped popsicles.

The wind is rushing the trees nowhere,
they are black charcoal smudges
against a navy blue-washed sky,
illuminated inconsistently.
They nod their appreciation to each other,
somehow in time to the music floating over the water.

I sense more than see
the bats sweeping around me,
silent custodians removing the clutter of mosquitos.
Blade-thin wings slicing their piece
of summer’s insect feast.

I am glad my friends are gone,
that I can stand alone on the roof
to watch and think,
uncompelled to murmur my admiration.
Instead, writing this in my head.

  • becky323

    becky323

    Really nice visuals from this piece. I love the descriptions of the bats as “silent custodians”. We seem to have a similar style.

  • andrewdavidking

    andrewdavidking

    This is a very strong piece—you should consider seeking publication for it in a journal, if you haven’t already.

  • Michael Douglass

    Michael Douglass

    Great piece, great thoughts.

  • moorefaith

    moorefaith

    thanks to you all for your kind words and encouragement. you all made my monday! :)

  • TarrandDeV

    TarrandDeV

    Well done, tight poem solid imagery.

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