A heavy darkness suppresses
her as she falls
through empty coils of time..
memories rush by,
echoes of life itself,
desperately trying to grasp onto
the slippery
brink of her mind.
Darkness
Less of a poem than a short burst of pain. Just an anxious little ditty.
Damian, 11 months ago
A cool piece for an anxious little ditty! Feels like a real loss of control of situations! I really like it!
Rhana Griffin, 11 months ago
hugs
Very eloquent MissKristy.
LisaG, 11 months ago
Kristy, this really conveys anxiety….very well written…
Pepper, 11 months ago
MissK, wonderful. VERY VERY tense. You can feel the tension in the words in your lines. A “last dance” perhaps for someone who may be at the edge of reality. Great poem. Love it. (as usual….bowing down to you)
demon, 11 months ago
I hope she found her mind and treasures the good memories.
nicely written MissKristy
Kristy Lee, 11 months ago
Damian..thankyou kindly. I was sure no-one would respond to this one and yet you were quick to. You’re a sweetheart :)
My T babes…thankyou girlies…I loves you.
Pepper…yes, when I wrote this..and when I read it back..I picture myself on the edge of a cliff..not really in much control over whether I fall or take a step back and save myself.
Demon…thankyou kindly. I think it’s a constant struggle but her mind is still in tact :)
David Cortez, 11 months ago
That is a great poem… you should put a picture with it to sell it
Kristy Lee, 11 months ago
Thankyou David!
I am not a photographer at all but I did used to like to sketch and paint and create ..though I never considered I had a talent for that either. But I am thinking of getting back into it and combining the poetry with visual art.
I also have a few friends who have offered to create art for some of my writing so I will hopefully have some up soon. Thanks again for the feedback..I really appreciate it.
Louise Cooke, 11 months ago
Wow MissK…short and powerful..so clever!!
Biswajit Pandey, 11 months ago
Imaginative, expressive.
Jessica Tremp, 11 months ago
i can so empathize with this, beautiful words
MtnMan, 11 months ago
Brink of her mind. I can relate to that.
Dani Di Cesare, 11 months ago
the slippery brink of her mind ... I hear ya.
MissKristy, I hope the “short bursts of pain” are few and far between.
Very expressive: I like it :)
MtnMan, 10 months ago
It is only recently that I have been able to understand just what the slippery brink of my mind might feel like…