Hating Your Absence [8-11-08]
Hating Your Absence [8-11-08] belongs to the following groups:
All Things Poetic, Artistic, Philosophical, Blue Room, Crime Time, Mad Hatters, Monsters Ink, Nine Inch Nails Fans & Art, Pulp Noir, THE DARK CELL and Up & Coming WritersThe moon is my clock, and when it is full, it will be time to see you again. My head has been full of confusion and the sky of spaceships. The bugs splatter across my windshield like rain and I wish it was my brains on the pavement. The pain in my chest has spread; I can feel it in my thighs, arms, throat. I hope I see you before it reaches my head, or at least before the steel barrel of my gun does. Razors can’t seem to be sharp enough, can’t seem to cut deep enough, I feel like my blood is too hidden to reach. I couldn’t feel it slicing my skin open, but then again, I can’t make it hurt like you can. I’m sure I’ll never be able to feel anything again. I know that even razor wire and cement walls couldn’t keep us apart, so why do I feel so far away?
Elizium
“I feel like my blood is too hidden to reach.”..........Stunning line!!
Emotive writing…
MissAlexis replied
Thanks. It was a very very different place in my head when I wrote this, sometimes I’m jealous of my own writing, it’s hard to imitate a style of language I only have when I’m upset.
Denis Dalby
Hate to think of you being upset, but you write like an angel when you are.
MissAlexis replied
Your compliments have made me smile. Thank you. I love reading your replies to my writing, you always brighten my day.
ShadowDancer
ah yes, the pain of longing, of distance… of heated need… i feel each letter in this piece!
MissAlexis replied
“Heated need”; a perfect way to describe it. I don’t think I could have said it better myself.
ryan munson
wow. well done. very thought provoking.
MissAlexis replied
Your words are very flattering, thank you so much.
Straysod
Right to the bone, nice writing!
MissAlexis replied
I’m glad you enjoy this piece, I only regret not writing more, while I was in that place in my head. It turned out to be quite a piece of work.