Remember

MissA
Author: MissA
Word Count: 156
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They sat by the creek bed, thinking about the world. Thinking about water, dampness, dew. They longed for water, cool and wet. They remembered all the great times in the past.

“Remember,” said the girl.
“Remember,” said the boy.

They played with the sun and waves, waves of happiness. They talked to the fish swimming through their legs. The weeds tickled their toes. They had so much fun.

But that was before. This was then. They hadn’t seen water in a long while. They were terribly thirsty and food was extremely rationed.

The girl was a mermaid. The boy was a shark. They played tag away from the intense heat. Parents watched them from the house.
Then the world turned on them, bringing months of heat. There was no moisture. Nothing. They cried. They sobbed. They starved.

“Remember,” said the girl.
“Remember,” said the boy.

“Like we did Last Summer”

Remember

For a comp called “Like we did Last Summer”

Remember belongs to the following groups:

Flash Fiction, Rivers and Streams, Short stories - Spherical Scriptings and Twisted Tales
  • Louise Kuskovski

    Louise Kuskovski, 2 months ago

    This is beautiful. You’ve written it with great rhythm. I like the opening and closing use of “remember.”

    I think there is a typo in the third to the last paragraph…you wrote, “the world turned of (on) them,”

    Again, beautiful storyline.
    Louise

  • Tainia Finlay

    Tainia Finlay, 2 months ago

    Lovely MissA, you have a great ability to do this with words, Tai

  • MissA

    MissA in reply to Louise Kuskovski’s comment, 2 months ago

    Thanks Louise.
    I hadn’t noticed the typo!! I’ll fix it up!
    I appreciate it. =)
    Miss A

  • MissA

    MissA in reply to Tainia Finlay’s comment, 2 months ago

    Thanks Tai.
    I’m very glad you like it

  • Lehane

    Lehane, 2 months ago

    Thanks for taking the time and effort to enter the Like We Did Last Summer short story competition in the Twisted Tales group. You still need to add a link to it though in the forum here Best of luck!

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