Music Box Magic

Author: Miri
Word Count: 197
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Music Box Magic

Written for Star Twisters 13, Treasured Childhood Memories

Found this quite a hard one – thanks filfil for the challenge!!

Music Box Magic belongs to the following groups:

Twisted Tales

She was so special. Whenever I opened the intricate silver box she’d rise from red velvet to twirl and twinkle, arms spread wide in a comforting embrace. Her music cast a spell, surrounding me with light. I’d shut my eyes and escape, as it lifted me to peace.

I took her everywhere, used her anywhere.

The first time my father’s sneaking fingers reached for me, she welcomed me into oblivion. As my mother’s shrill voice reminded me of my worthlessness, she covered my ears. When my brother used me as a punch bag, she gave me strength.

People always remarked on how lucky I was, surviving the fire. And I knew as long as I carried her around I would be safe.

Reaching down into my desk drawer I pulled out the box.

Sacked for no reason? We’d see about that.

I opened the lid and let myself drift off as the first strains of music tinkled out.

And then there she was, my fairy godmother, anticipation glinting in her eyes. Flames danced excitedly down her wand as she enquired in her little old lady voice,

“So dear, who is it today?”

jcmontgomery

What a twist. Instead of a wicked step mother, it’s the fairy godmother! Toward the end I sort of got the feeling that she was getting a little “help”, but not like that. Good job.
Miri replied

thanks JC, i found this one sooo hard…it would not come all day & then i just found out i’ve got a job interview tomorrow (eekk!) and so have to do some prep and suddenly the end wrote itself!!! but yes i found it difficult to not show she was getting help along the way!
Damian

LOL, fantastic :)
Your own personal hitman in a box. I thought this was great :)
Miri replied

thanks very much & thanks for faving!
hitman in a box that made me laugh!!
becteri

Great job Miri! I thought it was a typical music box, but I love the twist! It was excellent!
Miri replied

thanks so much! it was a hard one to write this week, it wouldn’t come all day….i now know frustration!!!!
tkrosevear

beautiful answer to the challenge…;)
Miri replied

thanks very much! a hard one this week i think!
Zolton

Hee. Nice fairy godmother. Love the imagery from in the last few lines. Good job, Miri.
Miri replied

i want one like that!! tho i was thinking afterwards she probably doesn’t like being kept in a box…hmmm….will she escape?!
thanks Zolton
Sabbath

Ooo I wish I had a music box like this there are so many people that I want to….hehe nevermind =3
Miri replied

hahaha i’m with you! i want one too! i’d love to unleash the wrath of a fairy godmother on a few people LOL!!
Craig Mowat

Clues. So many clues, and yet you trick me. Well done Miri. I liked it a lot.
Miri replied

thanks Craig, i glad it worked! it was strange with this one, it didn’t want to come out! but i forced it LOL!
Bob Fox

I like the way you set the scene and fed us insights into her tortured soul before pulling the twist.
Miri replied

thanks Robert, I’m glad it worked…it was one where the twist wasn’t clear to me till fairly late on in the process! Was one of those frustrating ones!
Natella2020

I think Damian said it best,”hitman in a box”. You really led us away from the twist with the “sweetness” of the main character. I hope your job interview went well.
Miri replied

“hitman in a box” is great – i hadn’t thought of it like that LOL, glad it worked! Thanks Natella, job int is this afternoon so fingers crossed!
George Yesthal

This is fucking great. Great concept, great wording, GREAT twist. Captivating indeed.
Miri replied

hahaha!! glad you like it! thanks so much for dropping by & having a read!
Alison Pearce

Fabulous twist!! Really well written Bex. I enjoyed every word.
Miri replied

thanks Alison, glad it worked…was quite a hard one this time, you know how sometimes they just won’t come!!
filfil

Ha! That was great! It was so unexpected. Love it, Bex!
Miri replied

thanks filfil, have to say you really had me with this week’s challenge! found it so hard!!
Debbie Irwin

What a joy to read that final line :) Perfect!!
Miri replied

thanks Debbie! I could actually hear her say it too, it made me laugh!!
Chanel2

Ooh, nice turnaround Miri, the line, ‘as it lifted me to peace’, had me in a different direction till the ending.
Good one.
Miri replied

thanks very much, this one was a hard one, the ending was not coming!!
filfil

Congrats on the win! Can’t wait for your prompt!
Miri replied

thanks my dear!! i’ll think of something hard just for you ;)
only kidding, have got an idea in mind, it’ll be announced soon!
bookworm557

hahahaha
your twist made me laugh
i wish i had one of those :P
Miri replied

thanks very much, glad it made you giggle, yes i’d love one too!!!