Schoolgirl Error

Miri
Author: Miri
Word Count: 1069
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‘You’ve got to be kidding?’

‘Oh come on Gwen, you said you did this sort of thing all the time back home.’

The accent and irritable tone were not a good mix. It got on her nerves. Gwen sighed, one more thing for the list. As if tanned beautiful bodies, stifling Queensland heat and mosquitoes weren’t enough. She wondered for the umpteenth time why her father had thought emigrating was a good idea.

‘Gwen…..’ Cajoling. Warning.

‘I just don’t see how you celebrate Halloween here. It’s not very…...Halloweeny,’ Gwen finished lamely.

‘Look you said you were a witch, that you’d contacted spirits, that you could do spells and stuff.’ Debbie’s eyes narrowed, daring her to contradict.

Gwen winced. She had implied that with her stories of moon dancing, standing stones and love potions. But she’d needed something interesting to say to these bright confident girls. She wasn’t like them with her midnight hair and white skin. And her Welsh accent completely confused them.

But she had intrigued Debbie. Debbie: the most popular girl at school. Debbie: surfer queen, beach goddess, jeep chick. Debbie wanted a Halloween so she would have a Halloween…..in April….in Australia.

‘Well I was more of a novice, you know, just learning everything…..’ She tailed off as a frown gathered across Debbie’s face.

Gwen swallowed, ‘I suppose we could try something but it might not work because there’s only me. I…..er…I…won’t have the power of my coven.’

Yes that was a great excuse! Gwen silently congratulated herself. She’d do the spells and when they didn’t work, well, not enough witches!

Debbie stared at her for a long moment, and slowly smiled.

‘Ok….Ok….Meet me on the beach at midnight, usual spot’

- – x – -

Gwen could see flickering lights in front of the dunes and a smile tugged at her cheeks. Pumpkins on the beach! Each grinning evilly as waves caressed the surrounding sand!

Then she saw the bats. Lines of them swinging in the breeze, attached to a couple of parasol poles, occasionally broken up with a ghoul or a witch.

She suppressed a bubble of laughter. Even if she could do any conjuring tonight, no self respecting spirit would be seen dead, or indeed undead, around this! She walked over as Debbie sketched a pentagram in the sand.

‘Isn’t this great, Gwen? I can feel the power! It’s so awesome!’

Gwen could only nod.

‘So what’s next? Do we do a spell? Or a séance? What?’

Gwen took a deep breath, ‘Well I’ve brought my….um….my sacred vessels. They belonged to my mother, and her mother, and her mother.’

That was at least true. She pulled out four earthenware eggcups from her pack and continued,

‘We….um…...fill these with the elements. Yes….that’s right…..you know…...earth, air, fire and water. And…..er….and place in the points of the pentagram.’

Debbie nodded eagerly, eyes bright with anticipation.

Gwen shoved two of the eggcups at her, ‘You get fire and water.’

Debbie dashed off to the sea, liberating a pumpkin tealight on the way.

Gwen allowed her grin a brief airing. This was so silly. She scooped up some sand. That would do for earth. An empty eggcup would suffice for air.

She placed them in two of the points as Debbie returned and did the same.

‘What do we put in the fifth point?’ Debbie asked.

Gwen had no idea. ‘Maybe…...Maybe something that would connect us with the spirits?’

‘Yes!’ Debbie breathed. ‘Yes…..what about blood?’

Gwen’s eyes widened a fraction.

‘Blood?’

‘Yes! Blood…...Your blood. Witch’s blood!’

Debbie grabbed a shell fragment and dragged Gwen to the fifth point.

‘It’ll only hurt for a minute!’ Debbie leered. She sliced Gwen’s forefinger and squeezed. Blood pooled and dropped, staining the sand black.

Gwen wrestled back her hand, sucked furiously at the cut and glared at Debbie.

Debbie ignored her, ‘Now what?’

Not caring anymore, Gwen turned away and plonked herself down on the sand.

‘We wait.’

- – x – -

Gwen’s chin had drifted onto her chest when she heard something. Glancing over her shoulder she saw Debbie on her knees, rocking and moaning with her eyes squeezed shut. Alarmed, Gwen leapt up and rushed over.

‘Gwen…..Gwen…....’ she murmured.

‘Gwen…..Gwen….’ Louder now. Debbie’s eyes snapped open.

Gwen gasped and stepped back. Black blood eyes met hers, accusing.

‘Debbie?’

‘Gwen, you left me….’

‘Debbie, are you ok?’

Horrified, she watched a trickle of blood gather at the corner of Debbie’s mouth and drip down her jaw.

‘…..you left me in that car….’

Gwen shook her head frantically, fear stealing her voice. It wasn’t possible.

‘You left me to die Gwen…...’

There was no way their ‘spell’ could work. Could it?

‘…..in that car….all alone…..to die…....’

‘No….!’ Gwen cried, ‘No…I….!’ Her voice strangled on a sob, ‘Mum I didn’t, I swear I didn’t.’

‘…..all alone….to die…..’

Gwen reached out and gripped Debbie’s shoulders looking straight into those terrifying eyes.

‘Mum, they held me back, I couldn’t get to you…..I tried…..’

A sob burst through and Gwen crumpled onto the sand.

A snicker of laughter became a full blown roar and Debbie collapsed beside her.

‘You should have seen your face!’ Debbie guffawed. ‘I never thought you’d fall for that. Look, contacts and fake blood! That was so funny!’

Gwen blinked. Contacts? Fake blood? What?

‘It was a classic….just wait till I tell everyone at school!’ Debbie clutched at her stomach as laughter erupted once more.

Slowly Gwen realised it had all been a setup. Something to show up the Welsh witch. Something else to make fun of.

She stood up, a little unsteady.

Immense rage filled her. Dark and bitter it broiled through her, singeing her lungs and scorching her heart. She felt power thicken within her, branding her soul. Shutting her eyes, she whispered a short chant. Black flames danced along her arms and she flung her hands to the sky in release.

‘Mum,’ she cried, ‘Are you really there?’

‘Of course darling, I’m never far away.’

‘Let’s get rid of this bitch!’

© 2008 R.Livesey

Schoolgirl Error

My first short story (eeekkk – be gentle!! tho constructive comments always welcome!!) inspired by the Spirit Walk / Samhain Challenge.
It was good fun :-)

Short Story Group Finalist and eventual Writing Runner Up for the Spirit Walk Challenge

Schoolgirl Error belongs to the following groups:

All Things Poetic, Prose, Philosophical., Short stories - Spherical Scriptings, Twisted Tales and Writers' Market
  • jcmontgomery

    jcmontgomery, 2 months ago

    Geez Miri…you scare(d) me….I was gonna ask where the heck this came from, but I’m kinda afraid to ask…LOL

    I can’t believe this is your first…seriously….nice job. You really had me going.

  • Miri

    Miri in reply to jcmontgomery’s comment, 2 months ago

    thanks jc! i found the idea of an Australian halloween quite funny hehe!
    Had no idea if it worked tho…was struggling with many aspects (word count, pace, balance…) & then just thought – bugger it – just post it!!! So thankyou for having a read!

  • Damian

    Damian, 2 months ago

    That’s really cool, LOL! Loved the ending :)

  • Miri

    Miri in reply to Damian’s comment, 2 months ago

    thanks very much! really appreciate it….found it quite hard so here’s hoping it gets easier over time!!!

  • sssshuknowwho

    sssshuknowwho, 2 months ago

    Congratulations Miri on winning the Short STory group Spirit Walks Challenge! Very worthy! :-)

  • Miri

    Miri in reply to sssshuknowwho’s comment, 2 months ago

    thankyou so much – i’m completely blown away – what a surprise!!
    Congrats to you too – loved your piece as well :-)

  • Gayla Drummond

    Gayla Drummond, 2 months ago

    Hey, super work, and congratz! =)

  • Chanel2

    Chanel2, 2 months ago

    A great story Miri, well done on winning the Spirits Walk challenge too :)

  • Miri

    Miri in reply to Gayla Drummond’s comment, 2 months ago

    thanks so much, i’m rather overwhelmed but what an awesome feeling!!! thanks for taking the time to read through!

  • Miri

    Miri in reply to Chanel2’s comment, 2 months ago

    thanks for dropping by Chanel & having a read – & thanks for the kind comments – appreciate it! greatly

  • TeriLee

    TeriLee, 2 months ago

    Fantastic writing…..congrats on the win!

  • Miri

    Miri in reply to TeriLee’s comment, 2 months ago

    Thanks so much TeriLee, appreciate you dropping by & having a read!

  • Alison Pearce

    Alison Pearce, 2 months ago

    Congrats on a well deserved win!

  • Miri

    Miri in reply to Alison Pearce’s comment, 2 months ago

    thanks Alison, i’m over the moon! wonderful surprise!

  • Melissa Sampson

    Melissa Sampson, 2 months ago

    Congrats! Wonderful story!

  • Miri

    Miri in reply to Melissa Sampson’s comment, 2 months ago

    thanks very much for dropping by & reading, i’m slowing coming down off the ceiling ;)

  • Midori Furze

    Midori Furze, 2 months ago

    Congratulations, Miri!
    I enjoyed your story!

  • Miri

    Miri in reply to Midori Furze’s comment, 2 months ago

    thanks very much! appreciate you stopping by & having a read!

  • Karirose

    Karirose, 2 months ago

    Very well written and a pleasure to read. Caught and kept my attention. I smiled at the ending. Congratulations are also in order. Good job.

  • Miri

    Miri in reply to Karirose’s comment, 2 months ago

    thankyou so much, appreciate your kind comments, & glad it made you smile, made me smile to write it!!

  • WanderingAuthor

    WanderingAuthor, 2 months ago

    I kept wondering what was going to happen, but I never expected your ending. It was quite funny, in a black sort of way.

  • Miri

    Miri in reply to WanderingAuthor’s comment, 2 months ago

    thanks very much for dropping by & commenting….it made me laugh to write it so glad that came through!

  • JaneAParis

    JaneAParis, 2 months ago

    I really liked your story…congrats on the win. Smiles from Jane:-)

  • Miri

    Miri in reply to JaneAParis’s comment, 2 months ago

    thanks Jane, glad you like it & thanks so much for dropping by & having a read! :-)

  • Zolton

    Zolton, 2 months ago

    Wow… I love teen revenge stories. Good job.

  • Miri

    Miri in reply to Zolton’s comment, 2 months ago

    thanks Zolton, so do I! thanks for dropping by & commenting!

  • CrapWriter

    CrapWriter, 2 months ago

    Congrats on the spirit walk honours. Well done.

  • Miri

    Miri in reply to CrapWriter’s comment, 2 months ago

    thanks very much – have just seen it, how exciting!!

  • Alison Pearce

    Alison Pearce, 2 months ago

    Congrats on your win Miri!!!

  • Miri

    Miri in reply to Alison Pearce’s comment, 2 months ago

    thanks so much Alison!

  • Timothy Goodwin

    Timothy Goodwin, about 1 month ago

    Well-crafted and even better the presentation, what a wonderful imagination; and the imagery was like silk on satin!!

  • Miri

    Miri in reply to Timothy Goodwin’s comment, about 1 month ago

    Timothy – what can i say to that! thanks very much, really appreciate it, you have a poet’s soul to create beautiful comments :-)

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