A long journey home
A collaboration and poem inspired by this image by Artmonger named Hinton Station.
I tried to portray it through the eyes of a child left behind, no one he knows around him as they all left, nothing he knows and everything he feels. Hope you all enjoy it!
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Thank you so much to everyone that reads and features of favorites this poem! It really means alot!
A long journey home belongs to the following groups:
! 100% !, ! Creative Writing & Poetry !, All Around the Styles, All Things Poetic, Artistic, Philosophical, Bubblettes, Everyday Life, First Things, Friends of RedBubble, If it doesn't belong, New Zealand Made, On Youth, Outsiders, Safe Haven, Shameless Self-Promotion, The beauty of poetry, The true beauty, The Word Tree, Two Beings Group and Who are YOU to Judge?Little feet patter down the line
Big conductor man yells
“One at a time”
People push to get on board
Lives at stake in times of war
Bags and possessions left strewn all over
What do they matter in times of darkness?
Look after yourself thats all that matters
The greed of men left unmeasured.
Fall through the cracks are the most vulnerable
Separated in such chaotic times
Tearful emotions filling up inside
Watch mother from the window
“Shes forgotten me!”
She sits composed, none the wiser.
Double take.
Small child standing on the platform alone
She makes a move
Spurts of steam
Nothing to hear but inaudible screams
Shes at the door
Train starts moving
Child runs
“Mother im coming!”
Grasping her fingers
World starts blurring
Feelings of defeat suddenly grip
Things happen
Child trips
When things clear hes all alone
Wondering when mother will come to take him home.
Uncle Artmonger
Wonderful writing Mika. As I said, I could see this unfold as I read.
Mika replied
Thanks Levi! Glad you like it!
Tracy Faught
So sad…OMG. Just like Levi, I too could see it all taking place! Beautiful writiing and a beautiful photograph!
Mika replied
Thank you so much Tracy! Im glad you like it!
And the beautiful photo!
Love it
KNGodin
Beautifully done, Mika!
Mika replied
Ah thank you so much!
And thank you for reading through it
hirere
Taku aroha ki te tamaiti ra!
Mika replied
omg! I panui koe i tetahi o aku mea?!
I pai koe ki tenei?
Woo!
p.s. eliot
this piece is great mika. i love the ideas you come up. i seem to have lost all my new ideas although i guess i’ve come up with uhundreds so i can’t be greedy and i did say i wanted to quit anyway…..lol
did “john brown” that dylan song float through your mind at all when you wrote this?
hope you’re well and all that. peace out. hika eliot….lol
Mika replied
Aw thanks Eliot! I have no idea where they stem from either!
Its a strange thing but i love it!
I think find something to make you think, look at all the detail, let your eyes wander the image or page and bamb! Itll knock you sooner or later!
Erika .
When things clear hes all alone
Wondering when mother will come to take him home......so heart wrenching…Incredible writing Mika. xx
Mika replied
Aw thanks Erika! Im glad you read it!
This poem came about at the most randomest time!