The Gate - Nailed

MickyMc
Author: MickyMc
Word Count: 246
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“Where have you been? I’ve been frantic; I’ve been looking all over the place for Brian. I asked Pam next door if she’d seen him, I’ve knocked at Betty’s, and I’ve been ringing YOU on your mobile for the last hour.”

“I’ve been stuck in traffic. There’s a big pile up on the motorway, traffic’s backed up to junction 37. I had to go miles up the road and then drive back down the motorway for our turn off.
There’s loads of white cladding type stuff all over the road; traffic cop said it was caravan; it’d more or less disintegrated. Apparently it flipped over taking the car with it; a big artic just wiped it out; another twenty vehicles involved; so he said.
Recons a dog had got onto the motorway; and the car towing the caravan had braked hard to try and stop.
You know some people should take more care of their animals. I hope that they can sleep at night after knowing they’ve caused all that.

I can’t believe you couldn’t hear all of the sirens from here; it’s only just over the back field; down the embankment.
You know we’ll have to tell Jack to be careful on the field when he’s throwing Brian’s ball for him; there’s loads of holes in that fence.

Janet why are you crying?
I know it’s terrible and all that, but it’s not like we know these people”.

“YOU LEFT THE BACK GATE OPEN”.

The Gate - Nailed

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The Gate - Nailed belongs to the following groups:

Atheism, Bits and Pieces , Hardcore Punk, Short stories - Spherical Scriptings, Twisted Tales and Writers' Market
  • faithart

    faithart, 2 months ago

    Poor Brian! Nice story. Nasty twist. Rather too true to life…..

  • MickyMc

    MickyMc in reply to faithart’s comment, 2 months ago

    Thank you; I did feel a bit like I’d killed poor Brian : (

  • WanderingAuthor

    WanderingAuthor, 2 months ago

    Poor Brian… It is a good story, though, even if you had to sacrifice an innocent dog to get it. :-) Whew! I did not see that coming. When I read the last line, my heart sank – it was almost as if I’d been the one to leave the gate open.

  • MickyMc

    MickyMc in reply to WanderingAuthor’s comment, 2 months ago

    I’m feeling bad about Brian now!
    Perhaps I should expand it into a longer story where he come bounding back through the open gate Lassie style ; )

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