The Sound Of Heaven

Melissa Vowell
Author: Melissa Vowell
Word Count: 312
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The Sound Of Heaven

The Sound Of Heaven belongs to the following groups:

All Things Poetic, Artistic, Philosophical, Bubblettes and WMG

I’ve carried you this far, my Love, watched your colours fade… I lay you down upon the grass as seas below us rage. Your hand falls gently across your stomach to your waist, your head tilted ever so slightly to the sun, highlighting the tiny golden rivers that stain your face.

I kneel beside you, take your hands in mine and place them upon my knee. I lick my lips and taste the salt that’s come to rest there. The wind blows strong about us and my heart beats in time with the waves that lap and crash at the rock formations below.

We wait a long while in silence as I gaze upon your face, unable to tear myself away from the neverending blue of your eyes. Your still, emotionless, distant blue eyes.

I bend down to lift your arm and drape it across my shoulders, placing one of my own under your knees and the other under your shoulder blades, I carefully lift you from the ground.

In my arms your body grows colder by the second and it’s almost time to let go. I stand with you at the edge of the cliff as we watch and wait calmly for the fading sun to meet the horizon… for the sound of heaven’s door.

I swear to myself that you are my last.

I promise you, my Love, there will be no more.

Feintly off in the distance, as the sun casts it’s own dying rays across your lifeless face, I hear the Angels unbolt your door and with one last glance at your eyes I let you fall.

As I once again witness water become wine, watching what’s left of your body tossed and beaten against jagged rocks by an unforgiving sea, I remind myself I’ve made that promise before.

- Melissa Vowell

  • roybarry

    roybarry

    Mel, I know the chances are “slim” but never let me enter a relationship with you…..........

    Great Work from the Blonde Serial Killer!

  • Lorraine Creagh

    Lorraine Creagh

    Wow Mel, well done!

  • Suzanne German

    Suzanne German

    Melissa…this is a lover’s pact isn’t it? ohhhhh what a tremendous amount of generosity of spirit and depth in this….has me gripped by the heart!....It’s tenderness softens the tragedy.
    wonderful Melissa – wonderful! xsox

  • Scott Ruhs

    Scott Ruhs

    OMG, Mel! This is awesome, powerful, thought-provoking! Your talent seems never-ending. Wow!

  • anaisnais

    anaisnais

    Gosh how terribly sad, and to have been there before – oh my! You hold the right pace throughout to keep suspense and interest, something I know comes with experience of writings trials and errors. Well done!

  • Crockpot

    Crockpot

    Powerful!! Passionately sick. Love it!

  • langstonmartine

    langstonmartine

    you black widow praying mantis lady of super sexy doom
    great concept
    you must write more
    i love the tears
    great imagery

  • Lisa  Jewell

    Lisa Jewell

    Mel, this piece evokes a typhoon of emotions….

    Your talent is breathtaking…

  • Paul Louis Villani

    Paul Louis Vil...

    You have a beautiful way of expressing something that is very heart wrenching and painful. Death is so final. Such a hard experience to recover from. Kudos to you for such strong work! :D

  • MissKristy

    MissKristy

    God save me…this has done me in. Fav for sure.

  • Melissa Vowell

    Melissa Vowell

    I love how two people took it as something competely different.. Suzanne took it as a lovers pact and Roybarry took it as a murder by a serial killer. I love that they just felt it how they wanted it. Great work guys, I wanted that!

    Thankyou to everyone for your encouraging comments :)

  • Che01

    Che01

    Well written and nicely ambiguous. It’s like reading the end of a book but not the beginning.

  • Trish Cooper

    Trish Cooper

    Simply mind blowing work Melissa….amazing!!!

  • Anne van Alkemade

    Anne van Alkemade

    Beautiful written – almost poetry. Very romantic.

  • Chris Richards

    Chris Richards

    Mel! This is wonderful, as you already know, and very well written =)

    The work really portrays a great part of the human condition in regards to love and relationships, and also suffering and sacrifice. The way that the person who remains in the end has “made that promise before.” makes it kind of known that even though this suffering is so unbearable, it’s as if they’ll last eternity, and the human drive and tendancy to be drawn to eachother and find a partner or better half to share the experience with will eventually overcome the amount of pain that is felt form the seperation of the previous engagement, and the whole cycle will begin again.

    I like this. I think it speaks strongly about us as people and shows one of our many weaknesses as human beings. Amazingly wonderufl work, as usual =) Keep up the awesome job, Mel. This really goes deep.

    R.

  • Jen Whyte

    Jen Whyte

    You have taken my breath away!

  • ladyb

    ladyb

    Beautiful. x

  • scarletmoon

    scarletmoon

    woah…

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