Drown Me part 2
The response to part 1 spurred me to write the rest of the story
Drown Me part 2 belongs to the following groups:
All Things Poetic, Artistic, Philosophical and BubblettesShe stared into my eyes for a full minute before standing up and walking out.
In the distance I could hear the delicious confirmation of the water against metal.
My 16 year old saviour.
I walked to the bathroom and found her sitting fully clothed in the filled bath.
I got in and laid my head in her lap. With her wet hands she took the tears from her own cheeks and drew them on mine.
I know this isn’t how you mean it…. But this is all I have to drown you with. Water, myself and my tears. Close your eyes and don’t open them til you understand that you’re alive.
I closed my eyes and she held me under before I could reply.
MattT
Hope it wasn’t a bubble bath.
Lisa Jewell
I’ve multiple goosebumps…..
You’ve painted such a scene of love…..
Fucking Brilliant….
Mark German
Beautiful, Mel – too beautiful to describe.
Melissa Vowell
:) and we still love
pauldrobertson
oh, babe… such a beautiful fucked up scene. such love and inevitable tragedy…
there is some resonance here; for me.
i wrote one of my first songs around that age. drunk of course but…
‘there’sa girl asleep on my window-ledge.
she must be cold. and while she sleeps she cries.
i leaned against the glass
ravens’ wings
beating the backs of my eye.
for the space of a cigarette
i came inside and found her
in a blue dress in my bath
filled with black water
and clover.’
some kinship?
x
paul
Melissa Vowell
It’s a beautiful song :)
some kinship indeed. You should talk to me more often
John Segon-Fis...
Stunning. I am in tears. A beautiful, wrenching and honest love story. Thank you.
transmute
Drowning in this.
Suzanne German
Melissa – speechless….breathless…as you intended of course!
In that moment of panic of death – comes the moment of truth –
Yes the Phoenix rises!
Well done – excellent smashing piece of writing!
love to you
Suzannexxx
Melissa Vowell
yes Suzanne! And when that moment comes you want to scream Dorwn Me With LIFE!
Suzanne German
Melissa – I’ve re-read – still stunned at your brilliance!!!!
Amazing – I MEAN it!!!!
Suzanne
PhotogeniquE IPA
part 3 please!
Suzanne German
I’m also deeply moved…and that …I think is inevitable for everybody!
Stacey Hatton
This is very poignant. It stirs something in me that I can’t quite describe. Wonderful.
MissKristy
I LOVE YOU! Seriously huggggs so tight You are so beautiful.
I really did adore part 1 all on it’s own..it took me someplace similar to this in my mind..but now it’s just all the more powerful.
You are amazing girl…I want you to write the story of my life someday lol
This is brilliant, utterly brilliant.
langstonmartine
very nice to make you acquaintance
i believe you live here
Melissa Vowell
live here I do. And lovely to make yours
fillette
beauitful