Touring America
My Entry for the Crime Time Challange # 3 – prompt “The stars exploded”.
- CONTENT WARNING-
Touring America belongs to the following groups:
Crime Time, Pulp Noir and WMGInto his hands they fell. Destiny had made them his, and he would use them to his advantage.
She had been sitting at the coffee shop, drinking coffee and smoking a camel cigarette with a friend. Reaching into her bag for something, she had upturned the bag, and out of it fell a set of keys. They fell through the drainage grate on the sidewalk, into the sewers below- into his home. He outstretched his hand just in time to catch them.
The woman ran to the drainage grate having spotted the keys falling through and pushed her panicked face against the grills, straining her eyes to see the keys. He had pulled his hand away and scurried from the grill seconds before. Now he was taking great joy out of watching her search for them.
He thought that so many of these women were stupid – having an address tag attached to their keys. It was as though the women were inviting him into their homes. He was not one to refuse the invitation of a beautiful woman, and so as he had done with the others, he would go their house.
He walked a kilometre through the wet and foul smelling drain pipe until he found the man hole over First and Washington. He lifted it slowly and at an opportune moment climbed out of the hole and walked with the rest of the busy New York crowd as though nothing had happened.
He hailed a cab after ten minutes and instructed the driver to take him to the address on the key tag.
Getting out of the cab he looked around him to see how many neighbours were home. The street was bare – not even one car in a driveway. He smiled, New Yorkers were all the same to him; preoccupied with themselves and too busy to notice that their lives were running out rapidly. This was only his second one in this city. He had become well know in the papers in Chicago. He was going to tour America he decided.
He walked to the Jarrah front door of a ground floor apartment. He tried two keys in the lock before he found the right one and it opened. Smiling, he entered the apartment and noticed the modern furniture in the house. Lots of electrical appliances.
He walked through the apartment picking up loose garments strewn over chairs, bringing them to his nose to inhale the sweet smell of innocence about to be cut short. He spent a few moments standing in front of the draw of panties in the bedroom, carefully selecting which pair he would keep to remind him of this happy moment. Pink, lacy, bikini briefs he decided.
Then, putting one glove covered hand into his pocket he retrieved metal shards. Cupping them gently in his hand as though they were a child, he made his way outside of the apartment to the power box and switched the power off. Moving back into the house he picked his weapon of choice. The kettle. He pulled the plug from the wall and in the open power socket he placed tiny shards of metal. Then he pushed the power chord back into the socket.
Satisfied with his set up he made a quick check of the apartment to make sure everything looked just right. Then he made his way back out to the power box and knelt under it, with a perfect view through the sliding glass door to the front door. He removed his gloves and reached into his pocket removing a thicker set of gloves- electrician’s gloves. This was his protection. He did not carry guns or knives, just gloves and shards. He had found now that was all he needed.
He knew his wait would only be brief. She would have been to someone’s house by now to collect a spare set of keys and would be rushing home now to ring someone to change the locks – just in case the wrong kind of person got their hands on the keys. He smiled at this thought, at how ironic it was.
Moments later he heard the front door opening, and there she was, walking through the doorway into the kitchen. She was tall and blonde and attractive as they all seemed to be. He breathed in with anticipation and found that he was rising with excitement. As he watched her move through the apartment, putting her clothes away, brushing her hair he found the urge to touch himself almost unbearable. He told himself to wait- there would be plenty of time for that later, when he had succeeded.
She moved to the kitchen and retrieved a mug from the cupboard near the sink and began preparing to make herself a cup of coffee. He watched as though in slow motion as the teaspoon of ground coffee was placed into the cup. He began to sweat. He wanted it to happen so badly.
She pushed the button on the side of the kettle and noticed that it had not started the kettle boiling. She laughed at herself out loud realising the power was not on. This was his cue; he stood up and flicked the power box on just as she flicked the power switch. The shards of metal did their job well, the charge of electricity was sent down her arm and through her body. Her hair stood on end and he watched as smoke started to rise from her skin. Finally the charge subsided in one last bang. It was as though the stars had exploded in from of her face. It was beautiful to him and it made him happy to know that the stars were the last thing his girls would ever see.
“New Jersey next” he whispered to himself, little flashes still in his eyes, dropping her keys on the pavement as he walked away.
jcmontgomery
Uh Flic? Honey. Back away from the keyboard. You’re scaring me. LOL
Seriously…how do you find these things out? And then weave them into a tale so well I can believe it happening. Truly, I will think twice about coming home to a power outage from now on.
Flic Manning replied
Hhhahaha – it is a dark force that comes through my finger tips and very opposite me in general – but when I write I see it in my head like a movie and I just let it unfold like that! I take your fear as a compliment of sorts lol! TY.
Banalheed
Ouch! That was, ahem, a real shocker!! ;) Really enjoyed this, a great piece of crime fiction. A little typo on the line about the stars exploded in front of her face. You’ve typed from rather than front.
Read and enjoyed in Pulp Noir – the dark & seedy underbelly of life!
Flic Manning replied
TY Banal – I get so dyslexic and can’t even see it myself when I check it so I appreciate that. TY for your comments too!
Miri
ooo-er that’s scary stuff, geez your mind!! great use of the prompt & what a horrible imaginative way to kill someone!!
saw a wee typo too – think draw should be drawer
Flic Manning replied
TY Also Miri for the correction – see my reply to Banal! I am a shocker with this! Yes my mind is a bit scary haha!
Matthew Dalton
Flic! Is this guy a friend of yours? Very compelling read. Scope for a sequel too?
Flic Manning replied
Hi Matthew – nope just a character from my imagination…add to that a little research on the real scary world we live in and wolah – there he is! Definitely a scope for a sequel – i have a few I need to do sequels on now! Stay tuned – ty for your comment!
MillicentMorrow
Another chilling psychopath…so cold and calculating. Great read, it scared the hell out of me!
Flic Manning replied
TY Millicent – I am glad (as much as one can be lol) that you were scared – thats the idea! TY for reading and commenting!
Sean Rice
Very good, I really like it :)
Flic Manning replied
TY Sean glad you liked!
fixtape
yikes!
Flic Manning replied
hahaha agreed!
Damian
He loved that she saw the stars! Wow :)
Flic Manning replied
TY :)
Roger Sampson
Ahhh Flic – I remember watching you write this, your torso slightly bent over your keyboard as your fingers raced a crossed it, stopping in only brief moments to collect in your mind the next sentence to write. My gloved hand was on the power lever ready for that moment of fixated excitement when suddenly you paused, sat up and leaned back in your chair to read what had just been entered and saved. I brought to my eyes my binoculars and read with you the words there on your computer screen. I was (pardon the pun) in total shock… you had found me out… how did you know… how could you possibly know? I quickly left, the power lever still in it’s upright and normal position. I made a bee line straight to the airport knowing that being discovered it was now in my best interest to get as far away as possible as fast as I could. The plane fight was long and I now found myself in a city half way around the world, it’s name… Chicago.
I’m sorry Flic, I just couldn’t help it. I read your story and loved it!!!! got caught up in it and was sorry it ended. Wow could you ever expound upon this for a book!!! Again… loved it. And again, sorry for writing that little thing. Oh – don’t keep your coffee cup so close to your keyboard… you never know… I’m Just kidding ya :))))
Rog
Flic Manning replied
Hey Rog,
That was cool – I liked your add on, nice and creepy! There are always two ways of seeing whats written- sometimes its good to take it to another place or level!
There are a few pieces of mine that I want to expand on this being one of them – certainly a few books caught up in these stories. Writing a novel at the moment unrelated to these pieces but I don’t stop writing so I am sure another novel is on its way!
Thanks as always for your comments.
My cup of coffee has been moved! lol
Flic