Jonah Syndrome
Inspired by the photo “SS Dicky” by GailD and of course The Book of Jonah. I added the photo to my fav’s so please click on it and see how beautiful Gail’s work is.
“For Thou haste cast me into the deep. into the heart of the seas, and the current engulfed me. All Thy breakers and billows passed over me.” Jonah 2:3
Jonah Syndrome belongs to the following groups:
Living ChristianityShipwrecked washed up upon the shore,
nothing new for me I’ve been here before,
rusty decaying remains half buried in the sand,
why call on me Lord, am I not just another rebellious man?
Yet from the deepth of my distress
there is no other to whom I dare make my request,
forgive me Lord had I not, Your will, tried to resist,
I would not have found myself once again shipwrecked in the mist.
And so surrendered, my feet now fixed firmly upon dry land,
but for Your grace and mercy, my life would still be a wreck half buried in rebellion’s sand!
Inspired by the photo “SS Dicky” by GailD
Olga
I really like this one!
Would you consider breaking the lines in a more poetic form, maybe.. It would look much better. Like for ex. keeping the rhyming words at the end of each line, whenever is possible…
Olga
I would play with it something like this:
Shipwrecked washed up upon the shore,
nothing new for me…
I’ve been here before,
rusty decaying remains
half buried in the sand,
why call on me Lord,
am I not just another rebellious man?
martin steinbr... replied
Okay Olga,
What do you think? I know I should do it this way, but???
GailD
Gosh, can’t we all relate to this at some time in our life.
Fits nicely Martin. Thanks.
martin steinbr... replied
Gail per Olga’s suggestion I changed the form what to you think?
Olga
Ahhh! You just got it right!!! These are precious words, they are worthy to be dressed up in their best robe!!!
EAWilliams
Amen! I know I can relate! I must have Jonah’itis – because it flares up ever so often. (it looks great and is easy flowing – I did not see the before version though – just the after.)
martin steinbr... replied
Thanks, I’ve always known how to use the poetic form, but I just didn’t think it mattered that much. So I guess Olga has convinced me and I’ll start doing it this way.
GailD
I like it. Flows a little more easily.
olawunmi
This is so wonderfully comforting…I felt the message within. Very well written indeed