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Flash in the Pan

I count my chickens too early
and drop my eggs in the pan
before it’s too soon to say
whether I’ll stay, or even if I can

I try to unscramble my thoughts
Give things a second look, but I can’t
when we’re not on the same page
or even in the same book

I’m leery of such outward charm
that tries to stir its way into my head
At first, I speak nothing of it
and leave my thoughts unsaid

Rome wasn’t built in a day
The world took more than two
I don’t just give my heart away
or drop trou on cue

No matter the amount of conviction
that comes with each pair of lips
I don’t have the taste for fiction
or unnatural slips of the hips

I experience hesitation if
the voice falls short of the eyes
A sound is only as strong as its truth
and I don’t have the ears for lies

I thought I could do this,
whatever this is – -
but a voice from within warns me…

“Time can be unforgiving, but
Life is not a race.
If it does not feel right,
then it is not right. Your actions
you cannot erase.”

I place my left palm to my right
and thank Him for His plan
for allowing me to tell the difference
between the real thing and
a flash in the pan.

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  • Jenifer DeBellis
    Jenifer DeBellisalmost 3 years ago

    Much improved. :) If you print this off and bring it with you tonight, I’ll give some specific feedback that will help polish this off. xox

  • :-)

    – Luisa Zajko

  • RosaCobos
    RosaCobosalmost 3 years ago

    That´s a real song….truly enjoyable and recitable…..! and the meaning is there, the moral I would say clear and sound. There is humor too, which is to thank for…i have enjoyed it much.
    Rosa

  • Thank you, Rosa! :-)

    – Luisa Zajko

  • RosaCobos
    RosaCobosalmost 3 years ago

    Because your poem is a festival of rythm and ryhmming it well deserves it
    Rosa

  • :-)

    – Luisa Zajko

  • ModernMythology
    ModernMythologyalmost 3 years ago

  • Thank you! :-)

    – Luisa Zajko

  • RosaCobos
    RosaCobosalmost 3 years ago

    Congratulations..your poetry so well deserves it!.
    Rosa

  • Thank you Rosa :-)

    – Luisa Zajko

  • Nathan Emery
    Nathan Emeryalmost 3 years ago

    this is amazing writing….wow.

  • Thanks! :-)

    – Luisa Zajko

  • bjeliMis
    bjeliMisalmost 3 years ago

    I love the little changes you made. This turned out wonderful

  • Hvala :-D

    – Luisa Zajko

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