Caught

Lisa  Jewell
Author: Lisa Jewell
Word Count: 44
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Caught

Caught belongs to the following groups:

Core [C.O.R.E], Freedom to Shine, Midnight Ramblers and The Art of Pain

You only unzipped half way
what did you expect would happen
when I crawled out of you?
of course my loose love threads
caught in your teeth
I’d give you a toothpick
but I’m not sure I’m ready to be
flicked in the bin.

  • Matt Penfold

    Matt Penfold

    Ooooo…..... love your work Lisa :-)

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Thank you so much, Matt x

  • Sally Omar

    Sally Omar

    Many thoughts arise from this very unique writing…Def FAV!!!! xoxoxo

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    awww you are such a sweetie, thank you Sally xx

  • Jessica  Tremp

    Jessica Tremp

    spikey pointy to the soft bits is this metaphoric gem

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    xx

  • ozjami

    ozjami

    Wow ohhh waa !!:D

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    I do so enjoy your comments :)) you always make me smile or giggle. Thanks for that, James x

  • Philosophy Lee

    Philosophy Lee

    Hmm… caught in the teeth or in the zipper…
    Either way it sounds like one of you’s in a pickle! :)

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    I think we are both in a natural pickle….

  • Leda D

    Leda D

    instant fave, this is awesome

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Thank you so very kindly :))

  • linaji

    linaji

    lolololoOh Lisa.. this is it isn’t it.. and the funny thing is I will do what I must do when I do it too!! and as far as it goes.. when aimed for the bin.. it ain’t mine!

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    a brave face
    speaks of letting go
    a real face
    holds tightly to the end of the tug of love rope….

    Until…

    Thanks Lina….more than I can say…xx

  • Rany Lutz

    Rany Lutz

    This has to be an original work…...who else could do it? Great!!!

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    hehe thanks Rany…..I’m one original gal :))

  • DeviousLili

    DeviousLili

    Oh dear god, this is Perfect. Spellbiding to the last syllable. utterly simple and yet so deep that it hurts me.

    Adore the way you write. xox

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Life should be simple
    We make it complex…

    Thanks so very much for your kind comment and care.. xxx

  • Leon  Walker

    Leon Walker

    Well I’m think’in you made the right decision!!! Great work “Lady Lisa”!!!

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    xx

  • KNGodin

    KNGodin

    Wonderful analogy, Lisa…really nails the feeling home!

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Thank you very much x

  • Mark Ramstead

    Mark Ramstead

    Good God… I want a private audience with you…

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    I feel very royal…. after reading your comment. I take it you liked this piece…x

  • Mark Ramstead

    Mark Ramstead

    I like you and literally everything you do…

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    You’ve not seen everything I do ;) hehe

  • erika15

    erika15

    wow....I have nothing else to say. xx

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Wow is good enough for me :)) thanks Erika xx

  • ArcadiaTempest

    ArcadiaTempest

    God your mind is a maze of themes and ideas that totally surprise me and take me to a new place….I am getting addicted to your writing…what a delicious addiction!! XXXXXX

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    I do believe you’re right my mind is a maze…...I often forget to drop breadcrumbs whilst walking through it….LOL thanks so my babe for your constant encouragement xxx

  • ArcadiaTempest

    ArcadiaTempest

    It just hit me….you have in these few lines captured the movie Kill Bill for me. It was directed by Quentin Tarantino and starred Uma Thurman. I don’t know if you know this but Uma was a kick arse woman who sure wasnt ready to be flicked in the bin!!!

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Oh I know the Kill Bill series very well…..Lordy I’d like to be Uma Thurman in more ways than one..
    this is an awesome compliment…..I can’t thank you enough xxx

  • Michael Scholl

    Michael Scholl

    Talking to your pants again?

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    LOL well no real pants were used in the making of this piece….only a heart.;)

  • MyheART

    MyheART

    wow…you are a brilliant writer…this is awesome:)

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    So are you Robin…..thank you kindly xxx

  • Mark Ramstead

    Mark Ramstead

    True enough, however, my imagination serves me well in this case… If I had to choose one word to describe you, it would be delightful.

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    You’re the perpetual charmer…;)

  • Mark Ramstead

    Mark Ramstead

    Not in person, or in private, but in public… you are right.

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Behind every monitor lives and breathes insecurity….?

  • Del Millar

    Del Millar

    A brilliant way of speaking parting agony. Exactly how it feels,
    having been in the skin of a soul mate and ripped away,
    a limb comes off too.
    Further down the track, not wanting to let go….

    heartfelt, gutfelt, corefelt, oxo

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Your understanding is comforting….but how I wish you did not understand based on personal experience.. xxx

  • bellmusker

    bellmusker

    I like this indeed…...it packs a real punch and leaves me with my head on an angle, smiling at your imagery and imagination. Love it. x x

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    My back straightens and I feel warmth in my cheeks when you comment on my work…

    Thank you My Dearest xxx

  • Mark Ramstead

    Mark Ramstead

    Well yeah…

  • PJ Ryan

    PJ Ryan

    my loose love threads
    caught in your teeth

    stunning x

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    xx

  • TheWanderingBoo

    TheWanderingBoo

    awesome writing

  • Lisa Jewell replied

    Thank you….x

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